I'm enjoying your writing style, enough to read this story even though I am completely confused (I have no knowledge of the Champions Universe and had never heard of it til now). So far, things sound really promising and it'll be interesting to see what role the Anitaverse has.
I'm still loving this! And I'm looking forward to seeing Dawn meet Jean-Claude. Did Asher realize before seeing her tonight how very young she is? I was expecting a little more surprise!
Review By [littleoldme] • Date [11 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Gee, I sure hope this isn't Willow desperately trying to resurrect Buffy. And after all, vampires aren't people, to her... not so sure about the lycanthropes. I could see Dark Willow going to any lengths. Might need an actual Necromancer like Anita or one of her coworkers to make it work, though. I hope you don't load Dawn up with too many super powers.... she should have an edge, but too much makes the story less interesting. I like that Asher probably figured out she was the one at the warehouse... * Even though it was called off, the attempt to raise Joyce ... maybe Dawn is a necromancer & just needs training?
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [7 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Kudos for the prompt but well-written new chapter. Thank you for Asher, he's one of my favourite's, look forward to reading more. Good treatment on resolving mine and PATM's query on the anti-lycanthropy drugs for other readers and reminder that for all that Dawn's got 100 years of memories she is still a teenager at high school now. Much appreciated
Review By [emelan] • Date [7 Jan 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from littleoldme
Review:
This is a fascinating story- I love seeing a teenage Dawn who's got a hundred years of experience behind her. It makes for a nice mix in her character, and makes a lot of the powers you've given her seem perfectly reasonable.
Review By [littleoldme] • Date [7 Jan 10] • Not Rated
I agree with PATM on the spelling but the few typos don't detract from an interesting new storyline for Dawn. I'm guessing that like Richard in Anita Blake, Mary was infected with a bad batch of anti-Lycanthropy serum. Could do to flesh these points out to stop confusion for readers who are not familiar with the AB series. You are off to a great start and I look forward to tracking.
Review By [emelan] • Date [6 Jan 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
defiantly should be definitely, scarred instead of scared etc. Anti-lycanthropy drugs infect a non sufferer with lycanthropy? Clarify please or was the family conned with scare science? I think Canadian spelling is trumped with Canadian sentence structure,lol. Leaving the aside the destruction of the Dawn Summers that Buffy knew, not bad. Keep going.
Interesting theory mixing worlds, but I'm not really understanding why you're screwing with Dawn's character. I guess I'll have to find out next chapter.
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [5 Jan 10] • Not Rated
I am cautiously optimistic about this story. Please continue as I will be tracking it. On a purely technical level I would have rated it higher but I'm a little concerned about the tell, not show style.
Review By [Jonathansicari] • Date [5 Jan 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]