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Review of chapter "Chapter Three: The Name Game" from Avalonemyst
Review:
I love how Dawn and Xander don't automatically understand Strider and co.
Review By [Avalonemyst] • Date [9 Mar 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven: The Parting of Ways" from wintermoon
Review:
Haha.....I like that tune Xander! So funny, Glad your back! It's been a while...or at least it seems that way.
Review By [wintermoon] • Date [22 Apr 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven: The Parting of Ways" from MBB
Review:
An exiting and promising story.

one nitpick; during the first battle you had them name the enemies 'orcs'. While it's not impossible they heard it in battle, it felt off because you went to such great lenghts to show they did not know the language.

An other thing that got my attention was where you altered their physical appearence. While it makes some sense (at least for the still growing Dawn), you need to be carefull that changes will add up over the chapters.
And it seems unnessesarily complicated to first making the characters older, only to regress them in age before the story really starts, but i guess that's a writers thing.
The story makes sense, so I guess it works. :-P


Quote /“Ah but alas, I am man, I eat of the beef and like to look at the bosoms,”/
Reminds me of that line he gave to Anya in season 3

Since you asked for comments on pairings;
I'm rooting for Dawn/Xander. because it is mentioned in the show, because I thinks they could be fun, and mostly because the way youu write their characters in this fic really makes them compatible.

But that doesn't meen there can't be some flings along the way; I expected Xander to have a hopeless crush on at least one of the powerfull woman of the LOTR universe. As well receiving some unwanted attention himself, from a female orc or dwarf of something...
About Dawn, I'm sure you'll find someone (un-)suitable ;-)
Review By [MBB] • Date [22 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven: The Parting of Ways" from LeaFairy
Review:
*squeals* It's a update! I am so happy, I've been missing this story like crazy! So, Dawnie and Xander are leaving Strider and The Rangers and are finally going out on their own... Awesome! I wonder who/what they will run into out in Middle Earth? Loved the bit of Dawn/Strider/Xander bonding/goodbye, nice to know that they became friends.

I'm very curious as to what the PTB have in mind for Dawn's mission? Helping Frodo? Helping Strider? The Fellowship? The Elves? Men?

Anyhoo, this was a fabulous chapter... Thanks so much for updating! I look forward to reading more!!
Review By [LeaFairy] • Date [21 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven: The Parting of Ways" from jupitersdaughter
Review:
Short and too the point. Awesome!
Review By [jupitersdaughter] • Date [20 Apr 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven: The Parting of Ways" from Greywizard
Review:
Just started reading this and have to congratulate you on a very well-written story.

Can't wait to see exactly how Chaos and Anarchy (which are actually fairly accurate descriptions of any member of the Scooby Gang) get involved with the Quest, and how they skew things from canon.

And I'm hoping that Dawn, at least, and Xander, too, gets an opportunity to give the Powers, or at least their representative, a good swift kick in the family jewels for their attitude. ;-)
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [20 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six: Rangers of the North" from chickaboo
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I'm glad I checked the site cause I didn't get a thingie to tell me you'd updated. Another fantastic chapter. I can't wait for more!
Review By [chickaboo] • Date [3 Mar 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six: Rangers of the North" from LeaFairy
Review:
Awesome, Dawn and Xander are now officially Rangers, they have really become apart of the Dunedain! So cool! I also loved Dawn's 'fight' to prove herself... I have a feeling though that she's going to have to prove herself some more before they really start to take her seriously. Men! *rolls eyes* lol.

Anyways, this was fabulously done chapter! I'm really loving where this story is going, it's so very unique and different than any other BtVS/LOTR crossover I've ever read before! I can't wait to read more!!
Review By [LeaFairy] • Date [1 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six: Rangers of the North" from blueyes
Review:
Nicely done! Nicely done!
Review By [blueyes] • Date [28 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five: Learning Our Lessons" from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
Honestly, Xander's attitude is colossally stupid. He's basically saying that he endorses a policy of no one being allowed to carry critically necessary and life-saving equipment until they know how to manufacture those items themselves. What an idiot...
Comments from author:
Sorry that's probably a bit unclear, the idea I was having was that the watcher would be the one carrying the major weapons besides the usual stakes crosses and holy water for the mini-slayers. The girls would go out in teams with one watcher per three slayers, the ones just getting training would have learned the stake whittling hand-to-hand and use of the all purpose knife before being allowed on patrol and then would recieve training in other weapons as their skills progressed and developed. The tools (and the watchers who actually know how to use them properly) are still on hand in case of emergency but we're talking about beginner slayers in this case who have the luxury of learning how to handle their weapons skillfully before being tossed into the fray with them. (See example Faith with the long bow, Kendra/Dawn learning to use the cross bow). I have a list somewhere of alternative training procedures for the IWC/NWC that I just automatically use to flesh out my stories. It is completely my fault for not explaining. I will go back and make it clearer when I get a minute.

Thx for reviewing!
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [8 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five: Learning Our Lessons" from LeaFairy
Review:
"Insert foot in mouth!" Hehe. Poor Dawnie, opening her mouth before thinking. *shakes head at her* Oh well, at least she knows she made a mistake.

Anywho, this was another fabulous chapter! I love that they (Dawn and Xander) have been with Strider and the 'Rangers of the North' for a whole year already. Wow. I didn't think they would be with them that long... I'm loving it though! I also love that Strider's going to train both Dawn and Xander to be actual official Rangers. So cool!

Poor Dawnie, no boobs yet! *giggles* So funny her complaining about her flat chest. Poor Xander, getting stuck with a hormonal teenage Dawn again. lol.

I can't wait to read more... Thanks for updating!!
Review By [LeaFairy] • Date [8 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Little Girls Kick Ass" from Toras
Review:
An interesting twist on the Buffy crew in Middle Earth. Though I have to ask why oh why does everyone feel the need to de-age people when putting them in Middle Earth. Overall good story, I look forward to seeing where you go with this.
Comments from author:
Well I can't speak for anyone but myself however I de-aged Dawn and Xander for a plot point that should reveal itself about mid-story and also because Dawn's characterization is as a young teen, rebellious and whiny, for most of BtVS. I wanted Dawn to have the experiences that being older would give her as well as a reason to be immature so I could evolve her out of it. So many authors assume that Dawn's couple years of aging will make her more mature for no reason, I wanted to show the evolution of Brat-Dawn to Adult-Dawn.

Thx so much for reading!
Review By [Toras] • Date [5 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Little Girls Kick Ass" from blueyes
Review:
Very few grammatical errors but for the most part perfect. This story is really original. I really look forward to your next installment.
Review By [blueyes] • Date [5 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Little Girls Kick Ass" from Waverly
Review:
Excellent, I love Fighting!Dawn. Strider's reaction was great. Please have a Xander/Dawn pairing, they're so cute.
Review By [Waverly] • Date [4 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Little Girls Kick Ass" from LeaFairy
Review:
Yay, it's a new chapter already! A totally marvelous chapter at that! Loved Dawn and Xander's first fight scene, they both kicked ass and Strider's reaction to Dawn fighting was great. At least HE respects her fighting skills though, I don't think most of the others will. I have no doubt Dawn will set them straight though... *grins*

Also loved the whole bit with Dawn trying to jinx and anti-jinx them for the bad guys to come, which amazingly worked, and then her excitement to fight when they came, was hilarious! The interaction between Dawn and Xander in this is so well written... funny too. I love the relationship you wrote between them. Brilliantly done.

Anyways, I can't wait to read more! Thanks for updating!!
Review By [LeaFairy] • Date [4 Feb 10] • Not Rated
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