... Awesome. As it should be. I'm partial to Xander-based fics, but this, this is Warhammer! How can I not track this?! Only pity is that it lacks a lot of detail, descriptive detail; the plot seems plenty complicated to me.
Review By [LordSia] • Date [30 Mar 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Just stumbled across this, delayed me from studing LINQ to SQL for a short while. Interesting story and I for one would like to read more. Brings back memories of running Death on the Riek and Shadows over Bornhafen many years ago.
Review By [JoeDineen] • Date [29 Mar 10] • Not Rated
This story is rather good. I'm not keen on the Warhammer world but you're writing it well and making it entertaining.
The layout would be improved, however, if you put spaces between the paragraphs. Doing so would make the story a lot easier to read.
Addition: I use Word 2007 but if you can't afford that you could get OpenOffice as a free download. It's clumsy compared to Word but it has the same WYSIWYG benefits.
Comments from author:
Mmm, this is something I struggle with. In Notepad, the story appears to be formatted properly, and it looks fine when I view it on TtH, but many people note that the paragraphs are too close together. Perhaps I need to start uploading in html...
What program do you use to write your stories, before you upload them?
ok, the damsel is dead --good thing a Knight found her, otherwise Buffy might get blamed (and at first I thought it was the "Fae" part he was shocked by) -- hm, bad news on Lucile, but in a way it's good news--there was something she could have told Buffy or helped her with, is my guess, that's why she was eliminated. Any chance anything else came through a portal while they were all open? Just a thought... (I've read original plan was for Angel in Pylea to see a flying dragon, then in "The Gift" it flies out of the portal, but they didn't have the budget or something)---hey whatever happened to it anyway? Maybe Buffy can get a nice set of leather or chain mail armor while at the castle? Or a prophetic dream, those come in handy sometimes...
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [27 Feb 10] • Not Rated
I don't get it: how the vamp know she was a slayer... No, how the vamp know she exist at all and where is she? Vampires in Warhammer not a clairvoyant, it's more an elven or Chaos stuff. And vampires never work for elves and almost never - for Chaos.
Review By [ShurikVch] • Date [26 Feb 10] • Not Rated
I can only imagine the confusion of the knights when she tells them she is a slayer... After all, she really doesn't look like a short, hairy bloke with a beer gut.
Level with me. There are no malls in this dimension, right? Poor Buffy. Maybe she can become a Damsel. Wait... do you have to be, like, super religious for that? . She'll be getting real impatient dealing with the culture here, I can see that right off...
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [22 Feb 10] • Not Rated
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