Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Harry
Well, once Xander and Gil realized that they had been together that Halloween night, and that each influenced the other, And now that Gil has seen how Xander has adapted to what he picked up from Gil, the offer has been made. And if Xander does leave Sunnydale, he has a standing offer from Gil.
Review By [Harry
] • Date [25 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from kaleecat
Re-reading this series, it really is original and intriguing. I like how Xander is growing and changing because of Halloween & Gil.
Wasn't there another story though? Where Gil comes to Sunnydale to get Xander's help?
Review By [kaleecat
] • Date [9 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Elleria
Review By [Elleria
] • Date [16 Jun 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from troy
I'm hoping there is going to be more to this series. I keep checking back to find the next chapter.
Really good story. Hope to find more soon.
Review By [troy
] • Date [14 Apr 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from serenityselena
that was a very informational conversation ^__^
Review By [serenityselena
] • Date [9 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from LordSia
Cool and rather believable. It would make more sense if you had a prologue where Xander looked up those anti-demon tricks earlier - and why not? He's a comic book geek, and not entirely stupid - preparation and adapting MO to bypass the enemy's tricks is fairly standard. So vampires are more sensitive to strong scents and smells due to their enhanced senses? How about a bag of cayenne pepper to the face? So they can be killed by wood to the heart - why not go into battle with, say, quarterstaff and that sharpened mallet you mentioned?
Would make for an interesting fic at least...
Review By [LordSia
] • Date [27 Jan 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from AXanFan
Really interesting x-over. You did a good job of showing Xander's life as it would progress due to the changes in his interests and putting forth the effort to do better in school.
I know that he was greatly changed by Grissom's influence and Grissom has a very dry and unemotional personality, but you changed Xander so much I don't feel he is recognizable as himself -- maybe that was intentional, but I would have liked to have seen Xander as himself with more confidence and a strong sense of direction -- the way he is here he could be anybody that knows about the supernatural and chooses to pursue law enforcement, forensics and "bugs".
Please accept this as constructive, not critical. Some of your story reads like someone reading a list of things that happened. It is not much fun to read those parts -- I recognize that pattern, because I was marked down in one of my creative writing classes for doing the same thing. It is easy to do -- I got a little better, but it is still one of my faults. Your sections of conversations are much better -- I could picture them talking to one another.
I really like your concept here and would enjoy reading more of this series. I've never been brave enough to put my writing out there so I appreciate you sharing and please write more.
Review By [AXanFan
] • Date [23 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from fayannr
I really like this series. I saw in some of the other reviews that there was a number 4. Is it still available somewhere? I do hope you continue the series, it would be interesting to see how this changes Xander from the canon.
Review By [fayannr
] • Date [29 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ScorpionofFire
I really like this series. Just curious though, where did number 4 disappear to?
Review By [ScorpionofFire
] • Date [16 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from troy
I really enjoy this series. I have one question what happened to no. 4. I have it on my flash drive but when I look for it it's not here.
Review By [troy
] • Date [5 May 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ferball
Am I nuts or didn't there used to be more of this? Coulda sworn Gil came over from Vegas to consult with Xan... Just down for edit maybe? Please bring it back - was looking forward to re-reading it...
More soon please
Review By [ferball
] • Date [30 Apr 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from slmncpm
i was reading pov4 and went to post a review when it suddenly went missing. i really liked that story and love that angel was yanking spikes chain. was there some problem with the posting? i would love for you to continue it.
Review By [slmncpm
] • Date [19 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from VillageOrchid
Very cool set up and pretty good dialog/interaction. Your internal thoughts narrative is slightly better than your dialog.
Review By [VillageOrchid
] • Date [4 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Shieldage
Great. Nice and calm writing, almost meditative.
Nice perspectives :)
Review By [Shieldage
] • Date [26 Mar 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DarkFaerieYumi
Cool! I liked this. Did I forget to mention I snack on bugs myself? My dad, and an old elementary school teacher got me into it. The ants are my favorites. Crickets are yummy too. Actually those are the only things I eat. LOL I won't go near anything else. I squick too much at them. LOL But give me chocolate ants or crickets and a happy girl I am. Man, now I want some cricket chips! *grumbles* I'm hungry now. *pouts*
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi
] • Date [16 Mar 10] • Not Rated