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Review of chapter "Blood" from POTENTIALlyAwesome
great conclusion!
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Thank you!
Review By [POTENTIALlyAwesome] • Date [28 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Blood" from POTENTIALlyAwesome
great conclusion!
Review By [POTENTIALlyAwesome] • Date [28 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Blood" from nightshadowlife
awesome! simply awesome!!! Can't wait for the next!
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Thank you very much!
Review By [nightshadowlife] • Date [11 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Order" from draconis
Very good story and VERY well written. The details, thought, and effort that goes into keeping things tied together really shines.

However, I was sad to see you continued the theme that these people are too damn thick to understand and work together when they are being manipulated by Voldemort...especially the supposedly wise Dumbledore.

And the ending of ROC even shows Sirius finally realizing what happened was SPECIFICALLY meant to manipulate him, yet even with Mandy's life at stake he STILL doesn't tell Ddore what's been going on and his suspicions...when by doing so an effective plan could be developed to use that knowledge against Vmort. Instead Sirius plans to go it alone?

And could claim that Sirius is young, brash, and his thinking is currently clouded by emotinos, but even considering those factors, that's stretching the cumulative incompetence just a bit too far.

The logical plan would of course be for a 'devastated' Sirius to finally join Vmort just as did Meadowes. Either as a spy or a place-holder until they can come up with a plan to rescue Mandy or to inflict serious damage to Vmort's cabal from within.


And perhaps I'm remembering things incorrectly, but it seems at least a couple of people (e.g. Malfoy) called Vmort their 'master' in private conversations with a member or two of the Order, yet that goes unreported even when such an accusation could be checked by looking for the Dark Mark or using veritaserum and would be an immediate ticket to Azkaban? That also strains credulity too far (kind of at the same incredibly irritating level where in canon no one EVER accidentally sees the dark mark on anyone (although I've only read/seen through HBP so far) nor are members of the Order, never-mind ministry employees and officials, required to display their bared arms at regular intervals to check for infiltration. Seems incredibly sloppy work for the highest government outfit in the Wizarding World.)

I'm NOT beating YOU up specifically...just getting a few things about Rowling's Harry Potter that consistenly annoy yet don't seem to ever be acknowledged/addressed by fanfic authors.
Comments from author:
Hi! Like you pointed out, I am following HP-canon when it comes to a lot of things about characterisation and government (at the moment). Lucius Malfoy, for example, is incredibly well-connected, and as such, a report of his calling Voldemort master would probably do no good other than to get the people doing the reporting in trouble. Espescially when Voldemort's followers have infiltrated the government. I am so happy you're enjoying the story and will continue to follow the series.
Review By [draconis] • Date [27 Apr 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Blood" from (Current Donor)mmooch
Okay, the ones I feel the sorriest for right now are Remus and Mandy. Not that I don't feel bad for anyone else, but those two have it the worst, IMO. Too bad Peter hadn't been killed in the attack; coulda saved some future grief. *sigh* As much as I hope for a better 'ending' for the next book, I rather doubt I will get it. But I'm not a huge fan of angst, so... Still, you do a wonderful job of making it more suspenseful than angsty.
Review By [(Current Donor)mmooch] • Date [20 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Blood" from (Recent Donor)Luna

I just saw this is the final chapter. I feel trepidation before even beginning reading it because your last review-response indicated a cliffhanger doth approacheth. OH NOES!

*takes a deep breath* Ok, I shall read now…

GASP! The image is of bloodied Buffy. Oh no. Now I really don’t want to read…

But I shall. Mmkay:

Oh Kelly. I understand it but that doesn’t mean I have to like her crazy outbursts.

“I'm more of singer---lol

. “I’m sorry for laughing, but your entire speech is just too cliché. Did you get it from a book or something? 'The beginner's guide to being a fearsome Dark Lord,' perhaps?”—hahahahaha

Neither saw Peter, who had been sitting unnoticed in a corner of the room during the entire confrontation without pulling up his sleeves, slip out of the room.---*whistles* f*ckin’ A… *frowns* damn that Peter!

“Oooh!” She clapped her hands together. “Such a pretty gift! And just for me!” She looked up at the Dark Lord with adoration and Mandy shuddered.-----Hmmm, Bella reminds me of Drusilla…relation? Heh. Although, we know that Bella is mad and I presume she’s not quite sane as a follower of Voldemort, but I always thought Azkaban is what really pushed her over the edge. Your portrayal appears to believe differently, perhaps. Regardless, I love her character :)

Dumbledore had then went on to give Sirius' empty platitudes – that what had happened to Mandy was unfortunate, but that she had known what she was getting herself into when she joined the Order. That they couldn't risk everything just for her. The greater good, he had called it. And it wasn't like they knew where to look: all of the Dark Lord's strongholds were under something called the Fidelius charm.----------HMMMMPH. Stupid Dumbledore. Yesss, I understand his position, esp after what we learned in Book 7 but me no likey. You portray him, however, perfectly.

June 30th? Hmmm. Le sigh :( That is a long time lovey, but I suppose a thesis is rather important *grumbles and smiles* Good luck with your scholarsy pursuits and then run back to TtH as quickly as you can :)
Review By [(Recent Donor)Luna] • Date [20 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Blood" from KJA
I am sorry I have not reviewed this "Road of Carnage" since Ch/Ep. 14, Wong. A graduate level class has been taking up my time. But as this is the last chapter of "Road of Carnage" I needed to post something.

First off I like what you did with Kelly Walker in the past three chapters. This chapter also makes me very worried about Mandy. Almost nothing is mentioned of her in the episode summaries at "visionary-web". I am hoping that she survives but if she does what will the effects her experience have on her? If not then just about all of Buffy's friends other than Remus will be dead of in prison. She need more people to care about and have care about her.

On the issue of Buffy's hesitation in battle, I am hoping that she it able to reacquire her confidence in herself and her abilities. Maybe she will realize that unlike the eternal battle she faced as Slayer in her original world the war with Voldemort is finite, it can end. I have heard a some WWII veterans say, as a result of witnessing the horror and tragedy of the war, that it made them resolve to do everything in their power to get the war over as quickly as possible so as to end the suffering it war causes. If Buffy likewise resolves that she will do everything in her power, in war and in peace, to put an end to Voldemort and what he and his followers stand for I can see her rejoining the war effort and battle without holding back while still maintaining her moral foundation. Along with that I am also in hope that unlike in "Out of the Blue" Buffy does not get blackballed from the medical profession.

I want to say more on the issue of Buffy having killed a human and a number of other things that have transpired over the past 15 Episodes/chapters but I do not have to time at the moment. I will see about sending you a PM/Email in the coming month after my classes are over for the semester. Still one of the best Buffy/Harry Potter crossovers I have ever read. Actually it is probably THE BEST HP crossover I can remember reading.
Review By [KJA] • Date [20 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Turquoise" from POTENTIALlyAwesome
i loved lily's attitude! good for her
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'm glad you liked it - considering Lily's personality, it was really the only realistic response she could have made: I can't really see her sitting back twiddling her thumbs as long as she can help.
Review By [POTENTIALlyAwesome] • Date [18 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Kelly" from (Current Donor)mmooch
Okay, poor Dorcas. First she has to kill, then she’s a substitute for Lily…with Snape? It sucks to be a spy. Do feel bad for Kelly though; she’s losing a sister, a little at a time.
Comments from author:
Dorcas does have a rough deal going for her right now. As does Kelly - you're more right than you know that she's losing Mandy, a little bit at the time. I've always wondered what it's like for the muggleborns' siblings, who don't have any magic of their own: it must be difficult to stay a part of their life when they can't really relate to each other anymore. Like with Petunia - jealousy, then anger and fear and wanting nothing to do with it. And with Kelly - she wants to be a part of Mandy's life, but she can't really, because she doesn't understand... It's rather tragic how magic kind of must force them apart.
Review By [(Current Donor)mmooch] • Date [10 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Turquoise" from (Recent Donor)Luna
Loved Sirius' present.

Mandy's sister is annoying. Yeah, she means well but gooo away annoying sister! sigh. Sirius didn't help much.

Voldy's plan is *not* of the good. Oh noes! And a cliffhanger! Thou art evil!

Yay for Alice and Lily being pregnant!!

Good chapter :)

And ps: re your comment last time, my 'oh my gawwwd' about Dorcas and Snape was slightly disgusted but also kinda 'aww' :)
Comments from author:
I'm glad you liked Sirius' present! It actually has a part to play in the future plot... *hinthint*

Mandy sister does come of as sort of annoying at times, but if you look at things from her point of view - as a non-magical person who doesn't understand what's going on and only wants to spend time with her sister, who rebuffs her - it must be kind of frustrating, and so, her reaction is understandable. But you're right in that Sirius didn't much help. I imagine as a raised pureblood, were magic is normal, he doesn't really think about what it's like for people like Kelly who don't have it.

As for the cliffhanger - if you hated that one, you're going to hate the ending of chapter 30 even more... *evil cackle* And it was about time for Lily and Alice's pregnancies to make an appearance! I'm glad you're torn about the Dorcas/Severus situation - it is meant to evoke conflicted feelings.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Luna] • Date [6 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Kelly" from (Past Donor)phyllismski
this has been a good story with great original characters and storylines. please keep up the good work and continue!!
Comments from author:
Thank you very much! I'm glad you like it!
Review By [(Past Donor)phyllismski] • Date [31 Mar 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Kelly" from (Recent Donor)Luna
Such a shame Buffy couldn’t punch Luci again… ;)

Dorcas froze in her steps. “You-Know-Who has a spy in the Order?” She asked incredulously.----dun dun duuuuuuuuuun

I kinda like Snape/Dorcas, even just as sorta-friends.

Frick-afrack, damn Doracas! Poor Madam Smith…I’m not surprised tho. Dorcas was a Ravenclaw and logical- she knew Smith would die regardless and that she had to prove her loyalty. Therefore, death.

“And about the favour you owe me... I want you to tell me about her. Everything you can find out.” He didn't need to say who 'she' was – it was quite obvious.-----------huh! Interesting.

The man wasn't that bad looking, Dorcas thought, despite the crooked nose. It was his manners – or lack thereof – that put you off. Well, that, and his greasy hair. And his breath left a lot to be desired.--------------heehee

And then, before Dorcas could react, he leaned down even further, putting an end to the distance between them as their lips crashed in a brutal kiss.-----------OH. MY. Ohmygawd.

“Fly?” Kelly repeated in disbelief, and Mandy groaned, wishing Sirius would just shut up before he dug himself into an even deeper hole. But apparently, that was not to be.---------------hahahahahaha

HMMM. Not sure what I think about Kelly’s role in the story. You only intro someone for a purpose so what will hers be? The only thing I can think of is that she’s being set up to die.

Also, I was surprised the wedding went off without an attack. Prolly cuz it was a pureblood wedding? I was glad though – I like some happiness.

After this chapter I am most looking forward to seeing what happens with Doracas and Voldy and Dorcas/Snape.
Comments from author:
Haha, Buffy will get more chances at dear Lucius, don't worry! I'm glad you like the Snape/Dorcas development - more of them to come! I felt rather sorry for both Dorcas and Madam Smith, writing that scene - but it had to be done! And like you said, it was the only logical end. Snape's 'obsession' with Lily will have a part to play, so I'm glad you find it interesting.

Haha, Snape could use some lessons in overall hygiene. And perhaps a few lessons from Augusta Longbottom in how to behave properly. ;) As for the kiss - was that a good or bad Oh My Gawd? lol.

Sirius is unfortunately not the most tactful. And he can be quite oblivious. Then again, that's why we love him! As for Kelly's purpose... *rubs hands with glee* As for the lack of attack on the wedding - don't worry: I'll make up for it. *evil cackle* Enjoy the happiness while it last!
Review By [(Recent Donor)Luna] • Date [23 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Costumes" from (Recent Donor)Luna
First: The picture made me smile. A lot :)

Why Dorcas! You little tart! Haha ;)

Ewwwww Snape! No lusty looks in your eye, mister!

Snape chuckled. “You really are desperate to join the Dark Lord, aren't you, Meadowes? Has Dumbledore given you the mission to infiltrate his ranks?”-------- Why do the good guys suck at spying so much?!?!?! Lol

Especially not for his female followers, unless you're Bellatrix and already half-insane to begin with, and as such, too stupid to realise it.”-----------EW.

“Then what do you believe in?” Dorcas asked quietly, and honestly curious, seeing for the first time that Snape was lonely.-----------hmmmmm :(

LOL love the costumes, esp Frank!

The sombrero image from Giles wearing one in S4? Hee I liked that moment.

Love Eliza and Carodoc hanging out!!!

The Buffy hair moment was classic ;)

“You dare defy me yet again? For a third time?” Voldemort hissed at Frank and Alice in the meantime as the three exchanged lethal spells. “How are you still alive?!”-----How are you still alive line gave me the giggles. It just seems like it would sound so funny :D

Ohmygod. Buffy staking the DE made me feel sick. Ohhh god. Poor Buffy.

Very good emotional yet also light-hearted chapter. (I’m still reeling from poor Buffy staking a human! Eeep)
Comments from author:
First: I'm glad you liked the picture! I had a lot of fun manipulating it.

Dorcas and Snape - more of those two in the chapters to come...some of which might induce another eew-factor...or aaw-factor, depending on the reader's tastes. As for the good guys sucking at spying - I don't think they suck so much as the bad guys are simply a bit more cunning and naturally suspiscious, espescially Snape who's pretty much the epitome of the ultimate Slytherin!

Yeah, I agree with the ew on Bellatrix - I try not to think of what she does to please her Lord other than general torture and mayhem. ;)

I'm glad you liked the costumes, I had a lot of fun deciding who would be who, and coming up with the dialogue!

Eliza/Caradoc was fun to write, as well as Buffy's despair over her hair! It's fun coming up with stuff that are so totally Buffy. And Voldemort's little rant against Frank and Alice was meant to be slightly giggle-worthy. He is a super-villain...and yet, kind of cliché. I can easily see him throwing temper-tantrums whenhe doesn't get his way. lol.

I'm glad you liked the chapter - more on the consequences of Buffy's little staking accident later on!
Review By [(Recent Donor)Luna] • Date [10 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Costumes" from ShalaDakiri
I liked the costume choices, as well as Buffy's comments that turning into her character might not be a bad thing this time...especially with all the nasty tricks Mara has up her sleeve (Trained by the Emperor? Yeah).
Comments from author:
Thank you! I'm glad you liked Buffy's musings on Mara Jade - she's one of my favourite Star Wars EU characters.
Review By [ShalaDakiri] • Date [9 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Spy" from POTENTIALlyAwesome
great chapter!
Comments from author:
Thank you!
Review By [POTENTIALlyAwesome] • Date [24 Feb 11] • Not Rated
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