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Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from JanellyK
Review:
Confused with the alternate Alex. But also a good read.
Review By [JanellyK] • Date [13 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Eljin
Review:
its good, and interesting. i wasnt too set on the idea of native alex, but you obviously have a plan with it.
if youre still looking for additions to the genetic database, how about a sane spiderman symbiote from marvel?
Review By [Eljin] • Date [8 Sep 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
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This is the second story of tis root idea I have seen. It damn sure is a different take! I like it! Got more?
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [28 Mar 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from mojtaba
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wow thats really stupid. first of all te ascended could just talk to Xander and tell him wat happened and what they did cuz theyre already interfering. i think youre idea about THE evil twin that now exists is stupid and unnecassary. i would think that THE powers that be would send him somewhere he does not exist and i hope You will continue THE story after you changed some stuff
Review By [mojtaba] • Date [30 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Zyanadryn
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hope you write more soon
Review By [Zyanadryn] • Date [28 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from possom
Review:
Great fic! Just sad that it might not continue.
Review By [possom] • Date [2 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Rune
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They seem just a tad overpowered, but I'm guessing the enemies will justify it. Please continue. Thanks.
Review By [Rune] • Date [29 Jul 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from superfan
Review:
Well, I Love It. But isn't it Mr. fantastic? or am I confused?

Glad local Xander is NOT the antagonist.
Review By [superfan] • Date [13 Jul 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Genuka
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“I'll choose you Jean Grey.” Willow said decisively as she made her selection.


..... Uh oh.... Pheonix and the possibility of Darth Willow in one body?! bad bad bad bad idea....


As to the death of Alex's wife.... could you make more mention or hints of bringing her back? Or at least get Alex to Xander? Soon?

Great story! More please!
Review By [Genuka] • Date [1 Jul 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from jaeanna
Review:
good story but kinda stupid in not letting the Halloween spell continue of course i could be jumping the gun and that comes back later i do wonder if you used the space larger in then out on optimus why didn't you keep him regular size but good story hope you keep it up so many abandoned stories that start out very good but never finished keep up the good writing
Review By [jaeanna] • Date [19 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
A lot of it seems to be meaningless angst for angst sake.
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [19 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Darklight
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looking forward to see what happens to Alexander, being hit 2 years after xander arrived and getting his child and wife killed, his reaction made me think he was going to be the bad guy and go after Xander for killing his wive and child. Looking forward to see how Alexander is going to create the big bad. So Xander can use his halloween spell to create exact clone of Alexanders wife? like he's not using his power to copy something from an other universe.

Nice going with Jesse, keeps Willow in check from being steamrolled into what she thinks is right, instead of jumping in and have fun. Going fun seeing how they are going to use there new powers. Xander having fun for the first time since he arrived on the planet with his new ice power.

So Jesse is going to see how his other powers match up, let's see how fast he goes trough the pads his mister terrific powers and what his first invention is going to be, Willow going to try to keep up with Jesse?
So get Jesse to make his own versions of T-Spheres, with all the tech available they would be very usefull if all of them had some and even optimus could use large numbers of them without having to supervise each one.

Get more chapters out soon
Review By [Darklight] • Date [15 Jun 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [15 Jun 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from VillageOrchid
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A very interesting choice to have easy going Jesse to choose to become a super-genius with a penchant for solving problems. I also like the idea of "normal-Xander" having been a photo-journalist. Perhaps because he was a fan of Peter Parker? For Willow, having the mental abilities that are strong bordering on mystical might help her untapp her magic eventually.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [14 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from cjcold
Review:
Nice update.

I am glad Jessie at least is more practical than Xander. Ice-man's powers are Omega level but what do they give him in the currect situation except a toy to play with.

Nice that Alex is not going to be a villain, look forward to who the enemy is.

Also look forward to the encounter with the Athosians. Should be interesting to see how they interact.

More soon please.
Review By [cjcold] • Date [14 Jun 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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