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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Fayari
Review:
This resolved nothing. Buffy still doesn't appreciate the number of times Xander saved her life. Not that Buffy hasn't saved Xander at all, but Xander appreciates it, unlike her.
Review By [Fayari] • Date [18 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bobboky
Review:
: )
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [15 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from SadJack
Review:
Good Start!

Now, keep it going. It has really great potential. The only advise I would give is to start it by the mid first to mid second season timeframe, and to make it a big story. Like 12-25 chapters, and possible multiple sequals. Maybe 3-5 sequels. Stories like this that have an open range of possibility and central character growth possibilities, should be made into epics. This one-shot nonsense that most due truthfully has gone on far too long. There have been one-shot stories like this that if they were continued into epics stories, would have been just that "Epic", and the readers/fans would have seen that.

So, I give this an 8 for a nice start. But am begging for you to continue it into a great story.

SadJack
Review By [SadJack] • Date [28 Mar 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DesitaniaF
Review:
Have you read "Hero note the capital H"? different plot but crossed with Fable as well, I think both this story and the one I just mentioned are awesome!
Comments from author:
Yeah have read that, it is great!

Thanks for comparing!
Review By [DesitaniaF] • Date [27 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Spiegel
Review:
small editorial note:

Zeppo - One of the Marx brothers; derogatory nickname for Xander
Zippo - A cheap plastic lighter
Comments from author:
Thanks fixed now.
Review By [Spiegel] • Date [27 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from MerleCorey
Review:
You use "your" instead of "you're" several times (e.g., "Your the normal one..." should be "You're the normal one..."). "You're" is a contraction for "you are", while "your" is the posessive, indicating ownership.

Also, the term is Zeppo, not Zippo; it's a reference to one of the Marx brothers.

It's an interesting idea but isn't really fleshed out.
Comments from author:
Thanks fixed that.

Never heard of Zeppo or the Marx brothers before Buffy so easy mistake to make I guess.
Review By [MerleCorey] • Date [27 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Greywizard
Review:
I would really like to see more of this. Do you think you can continue it?
Comments from author:
I might, it may be some time though.
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [27 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from nemogbr
Review:
This reads more like a prologue. Hope you continue.
Comments from author:
I may continue, I never know.
Review By [nemogbr] • Date [27 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from rothos
Review:
Please, please let this not be the end! This is a great start to the original Fable! Or is it Fable: The Lost Chapters?
Review By [rothos] • Date [27 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from darthridian
Review:
good one, too bad it's only a oneshot might have been a good story.

great writing tho.
Review By [darthridian] • Date [27 Mar 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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