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Review of chapter "16" from AlecMcDowell
Review:
Man, I really miss this story. I love the pacing for everybody's advancement here; Xander went from small things like his pistols to the current cruiser and ZPM's over a couple years and it works well in my opinion. Though it probably would be a good idea for him to start consturction on an aurora-class pretty soon anyways since he believes it will take so long to construct. I want to scream at how much Warren is getting away with still, but, I know as soon as Xander and the Asgard have a handle on the enemy technology it won't be very difficult at all to dispose of. The cloning stuff might even provide a few clues to save the Asgard species as well.

I love that Xander has set up a base in Proxima Centauri, it always seemed to be likely to me that the Ancients would've done more work in the systems around Sol even if the goa'uld never found them so finding a planet full of naquada or another habitable planet wouldn't surprise me at all.

I liked the hints of what Niam was up to back in Pegasus, as well. Seeking to fix the Asurans as a species is great and I loved that he retained the knowledge he gained on Halloween as well. Assuming he can ever learn about Earth I would imagine he'd go looking for Xander. That might take him finding Atlantis itself though, I think.

You've been silent on all fronts for a while now, hope all is well and your make your way back to your stories eventually! Would love to see this and a few others continued.
Review By [AlecMcDowell] • Date [9 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "16" from rankokunathree
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more please, soon please! I love the story so far and the working of the tech of the different games!
Brad
Review By [rankokunathree] • Date [5 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "16" from (Recent Donor)jcon
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Really liking how you are developing the plot and the characters. Enjoying the way that Xander is using his new "skills" & the dilemma of releasing too much too soon, but having to start up protection of the planet. Good interaction with the alien lifeforms. No-one likes Warren, me neither!

Look forward to more chapters.
Review By [(Recent Donor)jcon] • Date [15 Mar 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "15" from jimk
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I know the idea is used in Stargate and obviously the reason it is used is as a plot device to keep the series from ending too soon or becoming too complicated. However, let's face it, there has never in human history been a civilization that has lost or collapsed because someone gave it advanced technology.

The American Indians did not lose because they got advanced technology. In fact the only reason they lasted as long as they did was because of the advanced technologies they received such as the gun and horses. Civilizations collapse in the face of more advanced ones because they have insufficient technology to compete with the other society and they have insufficient ability to adapt to the changes. Well, that and often disease wipes them out. Japan for example adapted quite well and within fifty years beat the west, as in Russia, at their own game.

So every time I read or watch something where everyone is so worried about providing advanced technology I cringe. It is one thing to not contact a civilization so as to not interfere. It is another to contact, maintain relations and not allow technology transfer. In human history when that has happened the civilization has died.
Review By [jimk] • Date [15 Mar 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "16" from LordSia
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Cool. I'd like you to flesh out the story - Xander's reaction to the girls playing with what amounts to a loaded gun or live grenade seemed somewhat... Lacking. Almost non-existant, in fact. There's little to no detail on how his attempts at advancing humanity are going in general, we don't know what's going on over the Hellmouth, etc, etc. Lots of things you could fill in to make the story come alive a bit more.
Review By [LordSia] • Date [27 Jan 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "5" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
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Ch 4

nice 'gift' for Giles and at least this story is a bit more fleshed out than your other
one. Still a lot of jumping forward.

Ch 5

looks like X can at least sleep again now *g*
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [11 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "16" from wraithrune
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Interesting!
Review By [wraithrune] • Date [2 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "3" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
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ahh good they listened to Kendra and went back for backup.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [14 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "16" from burn
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I've really been enjoying your story so far. You're making Xander really work for his achievements while letting him get done, what needs getting done. Keep up the great work! Thanks.
Review By [burn] • Date [27 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "16" from Morgomir
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Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [25 Nov 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "16" from Pointer
Review:
That was a nice story.

I'm not much of a gamer any more, so I'm way out of touch with the newer games. Still, interesting.

Up til now, it looks like you could have had Xander be the benevolent alien and still had SG-1 meet him in Sunnydale.

With the intro to the Asgard, that will begin to be difficult to keep up.
Comments from author:
I've thought of having a 'Xander, the friendly 'Vulcan'' act, but he has to deal with Warren, whom he has no means to detect and simply remove, as the guy would register as human at any Ancient or Asgard sensor, as would all of hs clones; using the Replicators for that purpose without announcing himself first would make it harder for anyone to trust him later.
Review By [Pointer] • Date [23 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "16" from eriktheviking
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A most welcome puzzler for Thor, well done.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [23 Nov 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "16" from borgrabbit
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Haiku fu:

Living in a flux
Suffering alien thought
Free the enslaved soul

♥│♥│♥│♥│♥│♥│♥│♥

Great Chapter!
Review By [borgrabbit] • Date [22 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "16" from darthridian
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Good addition mate, and nice first meet with the Asgards. Just wondering does Xander have a shield that can protect himself from the disruptor just incase someone else gets their hands on one as they might not play around with it but just shoot it at Xander like the NID if the Asgards lend one to the SGC.

With that weapon around he would be vulnerable if he did not have a defence for it.

keep up the good writing mate and hope to read more soon.
Review By [darthridian] • Date [22 Nov 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "16" from AlecMcDowell
Review:
Really like this chapter. The meeting was simple and Xander played it very smart admitting exactly what had happened to him and requesting help. That should help eventually ease the Asgard's concerns somewhat. It probably won't hurt that Xander likely has some knowledge that would also help with their cloning problems... So, even though you had difficulties I like how you handled the first meeting and am looking forward to the next chapter
Review By [AlecMcDowell] • Date [22 Nov 10] • Not Rated
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