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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CPTSkip
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Followup review: I have played System Shock, which I found to be mega-mega-creepy so I did know some of the background to your story. Possibly if I hadn't had this knowledge I wouldn't have enjoyed it as much as I did. So I'd like to add my voice to the previous reviewer's in suggesting that you a bit of information about the game in a note at the end of the story. This might add some enhanced enjoyment of your story for people who are clueless about how Willow was changed in your version of Helloween. This is not a put-down to your story because I just reread it and still find it "mega-creepy". Lol!
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [12 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from draconis
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This is definitely not a slam of your writing or the story. Just input as to why it didn't really engage me in the best possible way.


If you're going to use such an relatively obscure computer game (over 10 years old) in an extraordinarily short cross-over, with a specific character-type in the portrayal, it would likely help your readers (and your reviews) to provide a brief author's note describing "System Shock" and a link to something that describes what "System Shock" is...perhaps in the expansion section tthfanfic allows above chapter 1.

While I was real-time reading your story, I was trying to figure out if this was some alien version of Darth Willow, trying to figure out the context, etc. Whether the "voices" were the PTBs or something else, etc. (e.g. Exactly what the hell was going on.) It was only after I saw the reference to "System Shock" AFTER the story that I began to figure things out...but by then it was just too late to enjoy the story.

Because I spent so much effort trying to figure things out and dredging through my memory, I didn't find the story "creepy" (prior reviewer) at all...not even remotely.

I think a little "heads-up" BEFORE the story would have improved things all around.
Review By [draconis] • Date [12 May 10] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Review:
Chilling... bloody chilling!

Wispr
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [12 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CPTSkip
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Whoa! Your story was mega-creepy. Well done. You actually made me feel sorry for Angelus. Lol!
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [11 May 10] • Not Rated
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