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Review of chapter "Schizm" from ktweaver
This is good. I like that its not hard to keep up with all the different storylines going on at the same time! Thanks!
Review By [ktweaver] • Date [12 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Inhuman Origins" from Hanzo
Review By [Hanzo] • Date [5 Aug 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Inhuman Origins" from Eureka
Love this story..G I Joe, Buffy's gang and Jem...Nice mix and it actually fits all together. I really like how Xan has to do certain things to remember/learn what he knew from Snake-eyes.
Can't wait for next chapter.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [23 Jul 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Blood and Honor" from ShadowMaster
Nice Chapter.

I Like the fact that you put Xander back into the store with two scenes. I also like the fact that you sort of hinted at a future meeting between Xander and Jerrica. It'll be interesting to see where you take that interaction.

A bit of a twist that you had Xander getting Vypra hot and bothered rather than the other way around. Also nice bit of conflict with Scarlett. Given the way she seems to be having trouble separating Xander and Snake Eyes it makes me wonder what else this confusion might lead to especially if certain inhibitions and wall were neutralized whether it be by booze, gas or mental attacks.

Hopefully something will happen that will convince Trailbreaker to help Xander and Vypra evade capture rather than something that will land both of them back in a jail cell.

In any case keep up the good work!! Hope to see another chapter out soon!

PS-Do you think the Primal Hyena spirit will meddle in Xander's love life? Maybe it'll see potential mates that she would approve of but Xander might not and try to manipulate things so she gets her way? Just an idea.
Comments from author:
WOW! This is the shortest review you've ever written for this story I think. :D

I'm glad you liked where I went in this chapter. It wasn't easy, but it definitely wasn't something that should take any longer to get done. This way G I Joe and the Autobots will be kept busy by Cobra Commander's dogging them all the way back to the Ark and Xander and Vypra with special guest get to run around trying to get to Storm Shadow while Cobra forces are practicing drills and enslaving citizens at every port of call. Plus he might pick up a few strays along the way to boot... I just hope Trailbreaker is big enough to carry everybody.

In this story I envision the Primal Hyena as more of a spirit guide than a remnant possession. It can still affect Xander some ways as evidenced in this chapter, but it isn't a full blown melding of the two spirits so yes, I think she very well could meddle in the affairs of Xander's love life... If nothing more than to finally GET SOME after being cooped up and leashed for a year. After all she's PRIMAL she has needs that Xander isn't fulfilling for her vicariously speaking. Oh yes, Xander is going to be set with a mighty big problem in a few more chapters time I think. We've got Two Hot Red Ninja Twins, the possibility of special guest(s) from Jem and the Holograms and maybe even running into a certain snake themed woman... and probably wondering where to insert IT when she's got the back end of a Snake and no visible girly bits below the waist. MWAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Oh crap I'll have to up the rating for those chapters. *SIGH*
Review By [ShadowMaster] • Date [12 Jul 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Blood and Honor" from Vilkath
The idea of this fic started out pretty promising but more and more cross overs and more and more characters keep being introduced. Not to mention the fact the 'good guys' have barely done anything in this fic, Xander himself barely gotten the 'You need training' phase of his growth... yet the 'bad guys' have free reign in everything they are doing and pretty much already rule the world. The pacing for the bad side is to fast, and the good guys artificaly held back at every turn.

Unless this is going to turn into another 'win out of no where' type of plot I am having a lot of trouble seeing anything like an even conflict happening any time soon. Evens are FAR to big for a few teenage kids with memories of a few interesting people, memories that are rapidly fading. Memories they have to work towards even using. Over all I just feel the author over did the bad side of this operation, to many bad guys, to many advantages and to many Xovers at once.
Comments from author:
O K You seem to be missing the point of this story. First of all we've had story arc number one. Halloween, and we've established that Buffy is the niece of Destro, but dressed up as a Dreadnok and wound up with another persona created from scratch.

Secondly Willow gained a twin and learned the truth about her family.

And of course Xander became a ninja commando for one night and now needs to be trained in the skills by another to attain the levels he had on Halloween.

As far as too many Xovers, we have Three. G I Joe, Transformers and Jem and the Holograms... All of them interlinked and connected themselves. The characters are reacting to events at a believable pace, you want the good guys to just run in and beat the bad guys in thirty minutes like on the cartoon show? Yeah that isn't going to happen, because then you'd be wondering how it's even possible especially given that I've been doing my damndest to establish the threat levels of these villains.

None of the Good Guys are being held back, we haven't even gotten past day one after Halloween. Nobody is actively doing anything yet. Basically what this story has is... First few chapters - three to five hours Pre-Halloween. Next few Chapters an hour maybe two and a half tops during the night of Halloween in question. Chapters preceeding that roughly a seven to eight hour period of time in which many things are going on simultaneously. Buffy and Willow are being prepared to infiltrate Cobra.

Xander was unconcious for most of the time after his plunge through Ethan's shop's window. Then he regained his senses and spent an hour on G I Joe base.

The Autobots and G I Joe planning and beginning to prepare for what they know they must do. (Sort of like if this were a multi-part episode of the cartoons being crossed with. The bad guys hold all the power, they rule AMERICA, Cobra hasn't conquered the rest of the world yet. And considering this is going to be a full-blown WAR against Cobra on U.S. soil I doubt they'll have the opportunity to RULE THE WORLD as you put it.)

We've had a few brief glimpses into the lives of Jerrica Benton after the events of the Jem and the Holograms cartoon. Because if I left those for chapters that were relevant or that involved purely Jem characters interacting with the Scoobies it wouldn't make one iota of sense, because then you or others would be asking WHY are they reacting to stuff that happened weeks or months ago only now?

And as FAR as events being too big for three teenagers to handle alone, they aren't going to be alone, the Scoobies are being interwoven into the events that are happening. True I've basically thrown out the cannon of the show and probably could have written this story without the Buffy characters being present if I'd wanted to, but this tale involving the Scoobies will more than likely lead to something big happening. They will be involved in these globe altering events. They will be part of something that is bigger than Sunnydale and they will be asked to step up their game.

There is a subtle method to my madness. And a reason for why the Scoobies are even in this story believe me.

What I've written so far, what people have read so far is a span of roughly 16 hours in the new combined world that is Buffy/Jem/GIJoe/Transformers. The bad guys are only able to move more freely because they've been planning for this on the backburner for a number of years, while the good guys have been preoccupied with establishing the Earth Defense Command and dealing with Decepticon attacks on a daily and monthly basis. Plus they believed Cobra Commander had been defeated and no longer posed a threat.

You're welcome to keep the opinion you have or change it now that I have explained WHY things are what they are, but if you were expecting to see Super Xander come in and just crush all opposition... Well I'm afraid you were mistaken. This story isn't Super Xander, it's the opposite of Super Xander, he's got to re-learn the skills his sub-concious mind knows. He's got to deal with global threats from every angle because the world of the Slayer is taking a backseat for the time being as plans set in motion by Cobra Commander and others at last reach their fruition and he's going to have to come to terms to what happened to Buffy and Willow once he meets up with them again.

But it ain't going to take three chapters to tell all that and we're done. OH NO, that's sloppy writing, bad pacing and terrible story telling. This isn't about a quick fix change and then everything goes back to the status quo with a few minor changes and the Slayer and her newly empowered friends running around causing AU changes willy nilly. This is AU Changes being a direct result of why the Slayer and her newly altered friends have to band together to cope with the effects of Ethan's spell in a world turning itself upside down, rightside up and even sideways at every new turn.

Sure there may be a lot of characters involved in that, but that's the price we fanfic writers have to pay when the sum total of the casts for Transformers/GIJoe & Jem and the Holograms consisted of over 100 people each by the end of the events in said cartoons. (Except for Transformers since this takes place between Season Two and The Movie.)

Ah yes and one final remark to address. I highly doubt it will be a win out of no where type plot, but more akin to a win after a lot of hard work and grueling combat type of plot. :D
Review By [Vilkath] • Date [12 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Washington D. Cobra." from Cdog
I decided to wait a while for a surplus of chapters to be built up and man was I not disappointed. I don't know why, but I had a flashback to Modern Warfare 2 when Cobra Commander took over the white house. I look forward to what's coming next.
Comments from author:
Nice to hear back from you... And I'm glad you're enjoying the story.
Review By [Cdog] • Date [10 Jul 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Duplicity" from IcemanII
Great work on this verson.
Review By [IcemanII] • Date [6 Jul 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Final Transformations" from Bobboky
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [4 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Teaming Up" from Bobboky
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [20 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "House Warming Party" from Bobboky
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [17 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Birth & Rebirth" from Cdog
I'm not gonna say that this story is better than the original. What I will say is that it's a really good story and one I look forward to reading. The first one had its merits just as this one does. I liked the more GI Joe focus of the original, but I liked the way things are playing out in the remake.

Either way, while I know updates aren't gonna be coming as fast as they have, I anxiously look forward to the next chapter.
Review By [Cdog] • Date [16 May 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Birth & Rebirth" from djhardim
Speaking of deaths in your story, is Lady Jaye alive?

In canon, after GI-Joe was disbanded, she married Flint. They had one daughter, Marissa Faireborn.

Lady Jaye was killed by Red Shadows member Dela Eden while trying to save Flint.
Comments from author:
That's the comics Lady Jaye, this is the cartoon, aside from Duke and Snake-Eyes nobody else is dead. Yet.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [16 May 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Birth & Rebirth" from purrfus
I don't particularly like the Transformers, and the only knowledge I have of GI Joe is from watching old old cartoons, so I'm not sure why I started reading the story.

There is a lot I don't understand about Cobra actions and motivations - I think I'm gonna have to break down and run some searches.

I would like to see more.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [16 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Eclipsing Darkness" from Bobboky
excellent work
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [15 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Before the Storm" from staticice
Interesting story, looking forward to the next chapter.
Review By [staticice] • Date [15 May 10] • Not Rated
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