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Resident Evil: Downfall

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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CPTSkip
Review:
While I enjoyed your story, it is one of those that I think would have been improved by being longer. The last third felt very rushed to me. I know it is a one-off, but if you ever wanted to stretch the last part or even add to the story, I wouldn't mind. Hint, hint. Lol! All in all, as I said, I liked your story I just would have liked it better if it was longer. Also I think you should have mentioned Xander having fake ID since drinking age in the USA is 21 and Xander was only 18/19 or so. Just a snit on my part so you may ignore this complaint. Lol!
Comments from author:
I understand what you are saying but I did not want to drag this one out as I would have been encouraged to make it a lot longer and at the moment I have too many fics on the go and I want to finish them off. I am english so I have no idea what the drinking age in the usa is but thanks for the info. If you want to create a story showing the growth of xander's relationship to Jill and Rebecca go right ahead I would not mind as long as you let me know so I can read it too but I will not be doing one not any time soon. Sorry as I said to many stories to do right now.

david
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [15 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Vilkath
Review:
I like this story, not only the pairing obviously since I had wanted to see it in the first place but how it was done. The set up was not bad, two girls out looking for a good time after acomplishing a big mission like taking down Umbrella. But there was also the whole logical reason why two women would share one man so easily, without the usual build up of several chapters worth of skirting around the issue.

The idea two girls so used to life and death situations, assinations etc would be a bit paranoid of being with a guy alone in such a compramising postion makes a lot of sense. People are generaly naked, distracted and even phsyical exhausted (after the act) while having sex, a pretty vunerable postion to be in with some random guy. If a girls friendship with another girl is to a high enough level it would make sense to 'go together' for safety. The epilogue was also nice, not completely Buffy bashing but a bit realistic of how she acted in the later series. The world revolved around her and if Xander returned he would been put down as useless and 'in the way' but if he stayed away it was a betrayl to her and an abandoment of his duties. No real way to make the Buffster happy in the later seasons.
Review By [Vilkath] • Date [15 May 10] • Not Rated
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