Damn, now that is something I haven't seen before, Xander being deaf. I really liked how you have worked this premise so far, and I am looking forward to seeing more.
Review By [bucksavage] • Date [10 May 12] • Not Rated
Nice idea, and reasonable consequence of the exposion. My knowledge of canon Buffy is limited, what grade are they in? How will being deaf impact Xander/change canon? Esspecially since after he lost his eye to Caleb he would have depended on hearing a bit more. Look forward to more.
Review By [shadowflame] • Date [13 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Hmm... You need to diversify dialogue and description a bit more; the story loses some of its potential the way it's written now. Also, dedicating two chapters to basically the same event doesn't really work that well here. We don't really get any new insight, just a little background, which makes the rest of this second installment annoying rather than interesting. It's better than mixing point of views in one scene, of course, but there's still room for improvement.
Though I am curious what you might make of it; the idea certainly has merit.
Review By [solunvar] • Date [15 Jun 10] • Not Rated
an interesting premise, and i dont think you got yhr hospital all that wrong (breing in canada I might also have errors in my knowledge of them) I also liked that you had faith haveing feelings for him, the whole "get some and get gone" bit of her character always seemed 'over the top' as showm in the series. (and the motel scene just seemed wrong in so many ways)
Be intersting to see what effect this has on xander, in that his family situation has been shwn and thus might be dealt with
Review By [Karis] • Date [14 Jun 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
So far it looks like a succesfull idea for a dramatical story.
it would indeed impact Xander the hardest because he doesn't have other obvious skills that could be used to compensate, and his puns become difficult without the aility to hear what to joke about. And at the same time it happening to him will have the least impact to the story. I'm lookng forward to see how you will deal with this, as I can't see an easy fix till at least Eearshot.
Powerful stuff here. I hope at least some good comes out of this. Xander would definitely not want to be taken out of the good fight, so it'll be interesting to see where this goes. Nice work!
Review By [bucksavage] • Date [14 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Haven't read anything like this one before, a scoob being injured to this sort of extent that they are quite litrely out of the fight. So for me this is quite original. Looking forward to more.
Review By [BurningLight] • Date [13 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Been thoroughly enjoying this story. I'm glad to see you've decided to go for the F/X relationship.
As to the other Scoobies, as mentioned by someone else, this is the time when they were trying to have him 'fray-adjacent'. Buffy and Co. might see this as justification for that, but having the Mayor step in and praise Xander for what he's done and the fact that they now know that without Xander there that night, who was supposedly at home (yep, right. Willow really showed her knowledge of Xander there. NOT!) they'd all be nothing more then bits and pieces strewn across the landscape and the Hellmouth open, it's going to be pretty hard to be pretty hard to keep up the justification without feeling that it's their fault.
On one hand, by keeping him out of this particular fight, they were saved. If they hadn't, all of them would be dead and the Hellmouth open. On the other, it is a validation, however slight, of their beliefs regarding who is capable to fight. This will make for some interesting thoughts, conversations and fights.
Looking forward to more. You've the makings of a complex web of emotions here and I look forward to see how you're going to address them.
Review By [Ghostrider] • Date [13 Jun 10] • Not Rated
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