$5,000 for such very little 'play time.' I would have thought she would get together with Willow, since Willow would likely enjoy the same sort of activities. I've never understood the attraction to 'pony girls,' but I guess it does attract some people. Maybe I would understand it more if it was finished, but not bad as is. LOL loved the bells on the nipples.

Okay, I just discovered that I missed the last four chapters arrival, so now I'm caught up.
I like this story and WISH you would finish it! :) lol

A well written and very unusual crossover.

quite a variety of experience so far. How many days does she have left?

Lol! Loved Dawn's comment about kissing ass. Man! This is an expensive hobby/life style. I am actually enjoying how much I am learning from reading your story.

Your story is an awesome read (and the reviews you're getting are hilarious in their own right). This is a nice exploration of D/s stuff without devolving into empty smut like most similar stories would. I look forward to seeing more.

Re-reading, and this is still a good story! I can't wait to find out more about why Dawn decided to do this, though.

I am still enjoying your story even as I still feel like I am reading something through a cracked mirror. Lol!

Does she give refunds? I ask because, well they aren't actually in a relationship. Dawn et al paid for the submissive experience, and now it seems they were given the anti-submissive experience for a significant portion of the period they were there.

There was also someone who quit because she didn't like the experience. So she left thinking "okay, I thought I'd like this but I don't." But what if she'd had the experience with someone who didn't play mindgames.


And speaking of mindgames, those don't engender trust, and isn't that what this stuff is supposed to be about?

That guy is lucky he came prepared - or Dawn might have really hurt him! Interesting how that one scene casts the whole story in a different light. Will she want to continue or not?

I did NOT see that whole little scene coming. Lol! Although I was glad to see Dawn stood up for her Scooby self and fought back. The "bad guy" was lucky she didn't turn him into a frog. Lol!

I've got to admit, I still don't really understand the psychology behind this whole pony-girl scene. I feel I am observing a whole new and alien culture but I look forward to learning more.

I did see one mistake in the second to last paragraph. You wrote, "You let us deprive us of your basic humanity" when I think you meant "You let us deprive YOU of your basic humanity." I still look forward to more of your fascinating story.

Thank you, now fixed.

Another well done chapter. It was nice to see Dawn take the initiative and 'save' the day.

Lol! For an adult story, this update is more of an 'anti-sex' story than real pornography. Poor Dawn. All heated up and no payoff. Lol!

Another well done chapter. I liked how well Dawn and Miss Sara worked together during the race. The aftermath was also really interesting. The more of this I read, the more I like it.

Interesting that shaving your head is a bigger step, I guess it is more permanent. At least all that running from Demons is coming in handy for Dawn.