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Review of chapter "The End?" from nicktorilove
Review:
Well I really liked this story I just wish I had some back story . the only wizard of oz I've seen is the old judy garland one so I dont know where the zippered guy comes in but it was still a good story and YAE! for Xander slash!!
Comments from author:
it's all from a ScyFy show that aired a few years back called Tin Man. you should really watch it cause it rocks
Review By [nicktorilove] • Date [2 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End?" from angelkitty
Review:
oh man i love it and your other story, i cant wait to read the next part. can you see glich and ilria trying to figure something out together? that would be funny, and i wonder who will come looking for him will it be cain or dg.
Review By [angelkitty] • Date [20 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The End?" from mysticmars
Review:
Aw man are you sure it's over? I mean you could go so many ways with this story including having someone from the O. Z. come to get Glitch (maybe Cain). Please don't end it here. Please.
Comments from author:
Don't worry, i'm writing the sequel right now. as soon as it's done i'll have it up. no more then a week, 2 tops
Review By [mysticmars] • Date [19 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End?" from MistressRed
Review:
I loved your story, even though I haven't gotten around to watching the show yet. I did notice a couple grammatical errors, but they did not detract from the story as a whole. The big ones were:


1. “Glitch was a bit nervous but the thought that hidden around him were Xander, and Faith comforted him a little.” It should be “were Xander and Faith” without the comma.
2. “Before anything more could be done to Glitch Xander and Faith leapt from the shadows and the fight began.” It should be “to Glitch, Xander” with a comma.
3. “Faith look cautious and ready to spring. But Xander was pale as a sheet and looked scared at the sight before him.” The second part is an incomplete sentence. It should be “spring, but” as just one sentence. Also your tenses are a bit off. The first part should start, “Faith looked cautious”
4. “As Glitch watched Xander’s face turned from pale to bright red. His face became, not one of fear, but one of rage.” The first part is an incomplete sentence. Maybe try “red, his face” making the two sentences into one. Also, the comma after ‘became’ is unnecessary. Maybe try “became not one of fear, but one of rage.”
5. “Still, the slight noises every now and then was a bit disturbing for the girls on Xander’s squad.” You have another tense error here. It should be “now and then were a bit disturbing”
6. “She had her hand placed firmly over her eyes and said, “Hey lovebirds, your late for training. Stop whatever it is your doing or finish it quick cause you promised to show us that cool move with the long staff.” the girl closed the door right before a pillow made contact with it”
Corrections are:
“you’re late for training”
“it is you’re doing”
7. “Because I liked hearing you say that.” he held Glitch’s hands in his and looked him straight in the eyes, “I love you to Glitch.”
Either ““…say that,” he…” or ““…say that.” He…”
Should be “I love you too Glitch.”
8. He then turned to Glitch in the small walk in closet that was just big enough for they to get dressed in and asked, “So, still think I’m worth it?”
Should be “big enough for them to”

I really probably only noticed the errors because I just finished editing a friends paper right before I read the story so I am still in an editing mood. I can't wait for the sequel!
Review By [MistressRed] • Date [17 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Date" from (Past Donor)halfbloodpuffskin
Review:
:D That was great. Fluff, violence, angst and slash...what more could a girl want?
Review By [(Past Donor)halfbloodpuffskin] • Date [9 Jun 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Date" from sciphy
Review:
pretty good! I did catch one typo... Sander instead of Xander... But great job, and I can totally see Xander gettin' all hot and bothered watching Glitch, another guy in a world of supergirls, take down 3 vamps... and I can see Glitch being able to do it too... You know I watched that "dancing" scene of tinman sooooo many times
Comments from author:
That is my favorite scene along with that part in the brain room where Glitch kicks that guy. i'm glade you liked it. there will be more of Glitch kicking ass in the next chapter
Review By [sciphy] • Date [9 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Date" from DennSedai
Review:
Now that was evil and cruel.... don't tear the boys up like that.
Comments from author:
NO please don't be mad at me. the boys aren't being driven apart. i promise. the next chapter will be full of fluff and the fighting of demons.
Review By [DennSedai] • Date [9 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Shopping and Shovel Speeches" from sciphy
Review:
good job. It is much more in depth than the first chapter was. I am glad to see you actually going someplace with this story. Love the descriptions (of the girls and the shovel talks...) Poor Glitch, never having been shopping like that before and then to have to go with the mini's... ouch!
Comments from author:
Yeah, it helps being sober when you write. but if not for being drunk at the time i never would have come up with this story in the first place. glade you like it and the next chapter will be their first date. and as we all know when Xander has a date it is never normal.
Review By [sciphy] • Date [8 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Shopping and Shovel Speeches" from (Past Donor)halfbloodpuffskin
Review:
Ahh, gotta love embarrassed Glitch. Very adorable. You should make him beat something up in the next chapter to balance things out.
Comments from author:
LMAO will do halfblood. i promise that you'll like it
Review By [(Past Donor)halfbloodpuffskin] • Date [8 Jun 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Shopping and Shovel Speeches" from MistressRed
Review:
“Nice job, please write more.”
Review By [MistressRed] • Date [8 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Misunderstandings" from DennSedai
Review:
Awww poor Xander so on the edge about asking Glitch out on a date and poor Glitch not ever having heard of such.... They do make a cute pairing.
Review By [DennSedai] • Date [7 Jun 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Shopping and Shovel Speeches" from ReflectionsOfReality
Review:
Good chapter even if it was sort of filler. At least we got to see another side of Glitch come out...

Personally I wonder what Glitch's reaction would be if he watched the Wizard of Oz and the Scoobies' reaction to him implying that he has/had knowledge of what happened next. For some reason I can easily see Faith being a secret Oz fan...
~Reflections
Review By [ReflectionsOfReality] • Date [7 Jun 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Shopping and Shovel Speeches" from nightowl
Review:
You deserve kudos and lots of chocolate. I love this story and I'm glad that Glitch stood up at the end. Where was Xander during all the speeches? he seems very protective of Glitch. I can't imagine him letting Glitch fend for himself. He would have at least warned the girls to be very careful what they said to him. Can't wait for the rest of the story.
Review By [nightowl] • Date [7 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Misunderstandings" from sciphy
Review:
lol poor xander... he gets up the nerve to ask and Glitch doesn't know what a date is... lol that is so cute. BTW love the Robin beatdown!
Review By [sciphy] • Date [7 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fun and Fighting" from DennSedai
Review:
Definitely enjoying it and yep they did start to move a teeny bit too fast in the first chapter, but love the flirty behavior that's going on. Haven't heard of the Tin Man fandom before, but sounds very nice so far.
Review By [DennSedai] • Date [5 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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