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Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Algonquin Round Table" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
Nice prose and consistent characterization. Need more to get more....
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [29 Jul 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Algonquin Round Table" from SlykeDB
Review:
Okay, definitely liking this, perhaps because I'm a fan of Fringe... or perhaps Xander. But it's well written. Ironically if you go by demons original origin of extra-dimensional beings then well he's still a demon-hunter. Always good to play to your skill set.

Hope to see this continued.
Review By [SlykeDB] • Date [14 May 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Algonquin Round Table" from lorwen
Review:
good story...
:)
Review By [lorwen] • Date [14 Jun 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Algonquin Round Table" from BillieBog
Review:
I really liked this. Fringe is getting better each episode. You left a lot of dangling plot points that would make good stories.
Review By [BillieBog] • Date [6 Mar 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Algonquin Round Table" from (Recent Donor)DeacBlue
Review:
Not horrible, but Xander's just generic - there's nothing to make him, him. I'll also add to the voices looking for backstory, or even any contact with the rest of the Scoobies.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DeacBlue] • Date [5 Jan 11] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Algonquin Round Table" from missinglink
Review:
Nice to see another Fringe cross as they are hard to come by. Would be interested if you follow this up with either backstory of what brought Xander out of the fight against the supernatural and into the fight against the pattern, or further intersections between shown episodes and his involvement. The interplay seems nice and could only improve I think with time. I always thought that someone with Xander's bad joke forte might get a kick out of dealing with the former mental patient over time.

Not sure if you would or could do a relationship with Dunham as the series keeps her as the lonely figure morning the lost love angle. Would be a way to further bring Xander in is when Charlie get's taken by one of the shapeshifter soldiers.

The story works as it is, but if you get a good thread of an idea it could move forward. Really liked this and appreciate the effort. Thanks! Later.
Comments from author:
It's intended that the backhistory would eventually be revealed, but wouldn't just tell someone so soon.

I have considered how characters should interact, relationship-wise, so it is something I'm looking at.

Thanks.
Review By [missinglink] • Date [24 Aug 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Algonquin Round Table" from eriktheviking
Review:
A well written Xander who now brings that focus to the human menace.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [14 Aug 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Algonquin Round Table" from Ghostrider
Review:
Great to see another part to this story. I've become a fan of Fringe, watching both seasons in a week's time. Adding Xander to the mix is inspired as I can see him fitting well into that world. I'm glad you seem to have decided to go further then just pilot season with this, at least, I hope this new chapter is proof of that.

Are you ever going to show us how he got involved? Up to now, only an allusion is made to how, him asking Nina Sharp for help. Was that for help against the Mayor? Or something else? And how did he know to go to her?

Looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
The plan for why he's where he is something I'd have be revealed. It wouldn't be a total slow burn, but he's not going to simply tell Olivia because she asked him. It wasn't against the Mayor, and rest assured that it was for something very big and very important. He wouldn't be in the situation he is in if it hadn't been.

How he knew to go to her is part of it, though perhaps not the most important thing.

Thanks.
Review By [Ghostrider] • Date [14 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Algonquin Round Table" from (Past Donor)Peaslums
Review:
Good story so far, even if I don't recognize the cross. You threw me off using a Beretta Storm though, since I only knew of the Storm carbine. One trip to the Beretta site later and I knew what you were talking about. Makes me happy to see someone who knows that a Desert Eagle isn't the end-all gun that needs to be used by every single character.

EDIT: Little more time on the site and I saw they had a storm shotgun as well. Learn something new every day.
Comments from author:
When it adds something to the story, I try to make even the little things have some resonance to the character or overarching world. So in terms of the Fringe universe being very much about advanced technology and science, I wanted the character to be using new technology. The Storm's only been around for about 6 years I believe. It's also why he uses less-lethal weapons, including the TASER XREP shotgun rounds.

Thanks.
Review By [(Past Donor)Peaslums] • Date [14 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One: Small Hopes" from Jarvey
Review:
Cool story, I'd certainly enjoy more!
Review By [Jarvey] • Date [12 Aug 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: Small Hopes" from sunamee
Review:
This is a great story. I hope it will still be continued. I look forward to finding out if Xander is working of his own freewill or using them to get some payback.
Review By [sunamee] • Date [12 Aug 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: Small Hopes" from ladyfiana
Review:
This is really good. Wondering how Xander got involved. Hope you write more soon.
Review By [ladyfiana] • Date [12 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One: Small Hopes" from ianquest
Review:
Very interesting and well written. I've just started watching season 1 of Fringe, so finding this was perfectly timed. It seems to fit in very well with the few episodes I've seen so far, and I'm looking forward to reading more of this, and finding out more of Xander's mysterious connection with Massive Dynamic.

One question; if this is set post-Sinkhole, does Xander have a prosthetic eye or something, since you don't mention his patch? Given the sophistication of Nina Sharp's prosthetic arm, there's all sorts of possibility for hidden optional extras in his replacement eye!

Looking forward to seeing more soon! Keep up the good work!
Comments from author:
Yes, he has a prosthetic eye, amongst other things.

Thanks.
Review By [ianquest] • Date [12 Aug 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: Small Hopes" from Rivana
Review:
Very interesting premise, a bit too light on background, but still interesting.
Review By [Rivana] • Date [12 Aug 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: Small Hopes" from Orion
Review:
Well, thinking of this in terms of a pilot as you said, my vote would be to order three seasons and start negotiations for a movie. If nothing else I want to know the answer to Oliva's question.

Thanks for writing and thanks for sharing what you've written.
Comments from author:
Heh, thanks.

It's not getting the response I was hoping for. It's more episodic than the stuff that I normally write, so I'm thinking of at least finishing off the pilot. I know where's it's supposed to go long term, so if I end up stopping early, I might just add an outline of what's supposed to happen.
Review By [Orion] • Date [9 Jul 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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