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Review of chapter "Chapter Two – Base Building & the Silver Surfer?" from NamelessCritic
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Usually sorceress use their innate power to manipulate magic, where druids draw their power from nature.
Review By [NamelessCritic] • Date [12 May 14] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Keeping the Balance" from JinaSolo
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More please.

This is an interesting story and I would like to hear more.
Review By [JinaSolo] • Date [2 May 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Keeping the Balance" from MGrim
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Please update? Despite the grammar errors, this is still a pretty good story.
Review By [MGrim] • Date [24 Nov 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Keeping the Balance" from Bill
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Very well done!
Review By [Bill] • Date [22 Jun 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Keeping the Balance" from Ferret
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Great story, and I do hope you intend to continue it.

I do have one thing to point out, however. Xander has his facts wrong as to the nature of Cybrans - his transformation is actually more in line with the lore than he thinks. Cybrans are humans who have converted themselves into AIs and their military have been directly uploaded to their machines; therefore, a Cybran commander -is- his ACU in a very literal sense. The Cybrans are in fact the evolution of the Core faction from the original Total Annihilation (Ironic, in that the Arm, who cloned their soldiers rather than uploading them, were the rebels in the original).

(Edit: I stand corrected. That was how the Core faction operated, however. So it could be argued that he's a Core Commander rather than the Cybran Commander that he was expecting.)
Review By [Ferret] • Date [3 Apr 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Keeping the Balance" from Bluesnowman
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Great work I do hope that you have more planned.
Review By [Bluesnowman] • Date [6 Oct 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Keeping the Balance" from Rune
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STUPID! "POWERS" THAT THINK THEY KNOW IT ALL....

One day I'll write a fic that dethrones the powers. If you have the power to help and don't then you may as well be EVIL!

With Great Power comes great responsibility, and that does not mean sitting on your "backside" with a "hands off" approach.

All the PTBs seem corrupted by their power. Please finish this. Thanks.
Review By [Rune] • Date [29 Jul 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Keeping the Balance" from Gideon
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The tech possibilities just expanded even more with all those alien ships on earth! Sounds like they might have some competition for the Ancient City ship though. And who is Janus going to find to fight against the scoobies?
I hope you are able to add to this story again sometime!
Review By [Gideon] • Date [22 Jun 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Keeping the Balance" from CageFire
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Aw man. What a bummer only being 4 chapters, and hasn't been updated since 2010. Although I have to admit, the whole order against their chaos, I'm not sure if I like. Well, that is if they turn out having to fight them. If they end up working together or something I guess that'd be ok. Although since it's been so long I'm guessing I won't find out anytime soon.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [31 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One: One last gift" from CageFire
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Hmm, I've skipped over this fic several times before I believe, but I regret that now. It sounds pretty interesting. The D&D character choices though don't sound very good to me, but then I don't really know much about the game. I think I tried learning it once after I found some rule books at a garage sale, but we never had enough people to play nor the time. I do enjoy the various video games that are partially based upon it, as I don't have to use my imagination as much, and the computer can do all the work as DM. or is it GM, I think it was originally one, then they changed it to the other, the rulebooks I found were pretty old. Anyway, the green lantern rings, the starships, and superman sound cool, but then I'm familiar with those. The constructor guy sounds cool, also ironic as xander goes into construction in canon... :) The whole thing where the spell might only work once seems kinda disappointing, although I assume with all the restrictions you're trying not to make them too powerful so that it wouldn't all be over in a few chapters. I can understand not wanting to make them godlike, it makes the stories really short. Although having read a few godlike fics, it /is/ entertaining the way they pwn the badguys. :) Anyway, I'll start reading the rest as I'm looking forward to see where this goes. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [31 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Keeping the Balance" from JediKnight
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Pretty interesting story you made, I'm just not familiar with several of the things you used for the spell, they aren't too well known to me, those being: Level 30 Cleric (Dungeons & Dragons),
Master Monk class (Final Fantasy Tactics), Level 30 Sorcerer (Dungeons & Dragons), Cybran Armored Core Commander (Supreme Commander game), Level 30 Druid (Dungeons & Dragons), Master of Orion II game, Space Empires V game, and Bag of Never-Ending Gold (Heroes of Might and Magic III game)
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [11 Feb 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Keeping the Balance" from TheatricalBarrister
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You use the past tense incorrectly on a very frequent basis, and it makes it very difficult for me to read. I would suggest that you get a beta.
Review By [TheatricalBarrister] • Date [2 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Keeping the Balance" from CrystalBlaze
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The Ascended need a severe lesson on how saying they serve the Balance DOES NOT make then the Judge of Balance.

Please, please, let this bite them in the ass!
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [1 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Keeping the Balance" from cmdruhura
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The Ascended steal the most powerful weapons in the universe from beings filled with Chaotic energy and don't feel as though something bad might happen to them because of that act once it is discovered? That is beyond arrogance and stupidity, both! Higher energy states are still energy and energy can be disrupted to cause pain and even oblivian if the energy is dispersed enough. All it takes is someone who doesn't believe they can't do something to achieve a breakthrough. That's why no plan is foolproof. Fools are such ingeneous people.
Review By [cmdruhura] • Date [1 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Keeping the Balance" from Moontrap
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I like how you portray the Ancients and the Others. Their like the UN, only more full of themselves, and access to untold powers. All ancient beings seem Hypocritical to me. I can't wait to see how the gang reacts, or how this is going to come back and bite the Others.

Thank you for letting us read your work, and I can't wait to read more of it.

Sincerely

John

PS. Why not have Xander build a base on the dark side of the moon that is dedicated to the alien threat. Built some long range artillery, add a cloak and shields, and over 10,000 Pee Wees. (I never played Supreme Commander so I only know the old Total Annihilation tech.) Add a Star Gate, and the gang would become a Galactic Power over night.
Review By [Moontrap] • Date [30 Nov 10] • Not Rated
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