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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Muffie
Review:
Buffy the Vampire Slayer is banging Harriet the Spy. And there isn't any purpose for it in the plot, other than for pedo sexy times. This isn't lesbian sex. This is pedophilia. Lesbian sex is okay. Pedo sex is not okay. If you think that Buffy macking on Harriet is hot, something is seriously wrong with you.
Comments from author:
Hmm, if you'll recall Dawn has the memories of a messed up adult Kryptonian. (that loved the character that Buffy dressed up as) That said, in the show Buffy was having sex at seventeen with a two hundred and some year old CORPSE. A corpse that also had a hell of a lot of stalkerish tendencies and behaviors that were creepy as hell if you looked at it. That's from the show... thus the show is rather warped to start with.

Dawn isn't a kid in this, she's basically a teen (at worst) trapped in a body that's younger than she'd like. That said, I have warnings on stories for a reason.
Review By [Muffie] • Date [26 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from deathgeonous
Review:
This fic SO deserves a sequel. Anyways, thanks for writing this, and bye for now.
Comments from author:
Probably but at the same time, it's been a while and it was a nice place to end things...
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [10 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from demonianism
Review:
A fantastic piece, if a fluffy. Of course I might be saying that just because Xander got genderbent. For some reason I love seeing that happen...
Comments from author:
Sometimes it's funny and sometimes it's way too much of a change for me. I'm glad that you enjoyed the story.
Review By [demonianism] • Date [15 Mar 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from deathgeonous
Review:
And this was as fun as it always is. Thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [3 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Christmas party" from DragonBard
Review:
Not sure about Cordy and Doyle being together romantically. I always thought she cared for him more as a good friend, even after his death.

Plus, wasn't she in love with Angel at that point?

I could maybe see her trying to get back with Xander, but I just don't see it as being more than friends with Doyle

But that's just me.
Comments from author:
I don't remember... I thought they had something... maybe it was just wishful thinking on his part. It's been a long time.
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [8 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "You did what on your weekend?" from Oxnate
Review:
Ch 10: I realize she's "contained" but it seems like a needless risk to use Dawn's blood to make the first hellgod-child.

Ch 11: Tara sighed, “Can I have my shade of grey on the side of I didn’t hurt any innocents please?” -- You should probably update this to "50 shades of grey" ;-)

“Yes sir, Tuesday at seventeen hundred sir. As for Alex, she’s an impressive fighter. Permission to invite her back for steaks in the interest of furthering diplomatic ties?” -- Great line.

Ch 12: An interesting ending. Not quite sure how you would get to that point after changing canon so much, but oh well.
Comments from author:
You're probably right about using Dawn's blood being a risk.

I'm not changing it to 50 shades of grey.... :P

I figured steaks were a good tool for getting to know people.

As for the ending, there might be a couple of gaps.
Review By [Oxnate] • Date [28 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from locard
Review:
OK, I was very surprised by this funny, sexy, and a little kinky story. The characters seem to step into their new roles with a fever. I do wish you had added Oz into the picture plus let the very sexy Giles have more involvement because we all know that Ripper had a kinky side to him. It would have been a very hot to add a little of Ripper's DNA into the mixed.
Comments from author:
Oz was a victim of not actually being around... he doesn't actually notice Willow in the show until Halloween...

As for Giles... I'll admit that I probably should have included some spawn of his in there... I'm not really sure why I didn't. If I ever do a continuation of that story I shall have to fix that... but for your peace of mind feel free to assume that he had some spawn with Glory... :)

I'm glad that you enjoyed the story.
Review By [locard] • Date [25 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from DragonBard
Review:
Great story, only wish it had been expanded a bit more, instead of jumping the years into the future where the kids were running around.

Maybe seeing how the relationships between SG-1 and the Scoobies grow (and see if any of them ever got Sam in bed :) )

I'd have liked to have seen you walk us through how Jenny Calender started becoming comfortable enough to walk around in the nude with the Scoobies, and how the various romantic relationships developed. There was some glossing over of those elements I thought.

Maybe write a sequel or side-story that covers these missing elements?
Comments from author:
I might have to write more about that world at some point. It was a lot of fun. As for the jumped years, yeah. It was that epilogue look into the future thing.

As for SG-1 and the gang... that could have been explored a bit more.

Same thing with Jenny changing and altering.

As for a sequel... there is always a chance. I'm not saying it will be soon though. I've got the echoes story... a Harry Potter/Smallville cross and a Harry Potter/elder scrolls fic on another site that I need to work on before I consider something like a sequel to this one. I did enjoy this story a lot though.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [11 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Like a broomstick" from DragonBard
Review:
How is she planning on dealing with the fact the visions will kill her unless she gets turned back into a half-demon (or was that demigoddess) like she was in the original timeline?
Comments from author:
Probably some strengthening spells that are safer than last time.
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [14 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from eriktheviking
Review:
A great story, well done and thanks.
Comments from author:
Thanks... (yes you wrote this a while ago... the notification got lost somewhere...)
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [26 Feb 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from deathgeonous
Review:
Ah, why isn't this fic on my recs list yet? Oh yeah, that's right, I haven't reread this since I actually started making recs. I must fix that now, so onto the recs list you go little fic. Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. This story was a blast to write.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [5 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from HappyWonKinobi
Review:
That was awesome! It may not be the *best* story out there, but it still beats the crazy guys who do nothing but absolute crackfics by a mile. A mile composed of 5280 kilometers (if that even makes any kind of sense whatsoever).
Comments from author:
I don't worry about being the best. If I amuse and entertain people with my work then it's effort well spent. I try to avoid the absolute crackfics... though Harry in Vegas... comes the closest that I'll write... to a crack fic.
Review By [HappyWonKinobi] • Date [31 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from HappyWonKinobi
Review:
I love this chapter! Even though I was a *little* OM- *WTF*?! about "Anne", it's still turned out well. I haven't read past the first chapter because I can't actually email you through the site, so I'm using this as a way to ask for your help. What I want to do (that is one of my most pitiful weak suits, which are the opposite of strong suits) is to have a crazy clone of Diana's mother from another universe show up and talk about my main character, the apokoliptian. I want to alude, through words obfuscated to oblivion that she is capable of bending distortion and corruption to her far more pure will and that she can wield all of the non-black power rings, and lastly that she will bring about the recreation of the white power ring, partly through divine intervention, partly due to "divine" intervention ("divine" as in Ares, Eris, Athena, etc., etc.), and partly due to remembering what happened to make a friend real in the universe of her birth. Specifically, the spell that made Dawn Marie Summers real. And that will help to hide the White Power Ring, which (according to the prophecy that foretold it's rebirth) someone tries to corrupt at the source before it's made. And finally, I looked up "obfuscate" to make sure I'm allowed to use it before I wrote it. According to the definition, it is :
Verb
1. Render obscure, unclear, or unintelligible.
2. Bewilder (someone).


last bit of this review: I'm going to continue reading this story. Try to remind me if I forget to review at the end.
Comments from author:
I'm glad that you're enjoying the story. As for your part about help... I wasn't aware that you couldn't e-mail me through the site... at any rate... I suggest having someone... maybe Zantana use a spell to call up someone with information about the main character. That would allow you to get a couple brief questions answered about her without them being able to cross examine her overly much. As for the divine angle keep it nice and quiet... maybe a hint here or there but nothing overt. As for corruption or distortion... I'm not sure I understand what you're meaning by bending them to her will... she seems to have too many fingers in too many pies... right now. Also if people don't have names they are typically given one. On the part of the power rings... maybe maybe and I mean only maybe mention something about a white ring of light or something... but you're better off just describing her as the type of person that can pull that off... rather than telling... she's sounding a bit like a Mary Sue... I don't mean to offend... but Superman... super flight, super strength... a couple of other things that fall into that... as well as nice guy with a heart of gold... If someone can do more than him... bend concepts of the universe... make the ultimate power ring... do you see what I mean? Superman has had decades... and decades... to get where he is... I would do more showing than telling where her powers are concerned so that you don't get too far off left field with your main character.

Have fun with the rest of the story.
Review By [HappyWonKinobi] • Date [31 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Fayari
Review:
I enjoyed the story, but the whole Xander-becomes-a-girl bit really pissed me off. I'm really all for women empowerment, but for once, I'd like to read an empowering women's fic without it resorting to (in this case, literally) emasculating the main male character in an effort to make the female seem like the 'stronger' gender.

I mean, do you ever see fics where the women have their breasts cut off and are given penises for the heck of it? Not very often, I imagine. Because frankly, it would be ridiculous. So why then are there so many gender-bender fics like this where the guy gets his dick removed? You'd think they'd react a little more strongly to losing their friggin genitals. But most fics like this have the guy freak out for maybe a few hours and then accept it as if they weren't just castrated last night.

BTVS is already filled with enough gender reversal and women empowerment as it is. There was no need for this to top it off.

Sorry for the rant. I really did enjoy the story despite this ridiculous aspect.
Comments from author:
I can understand your rant. :) Believe me I happen to agree that you can do a story and empower the female characters without cutting the boys down. There is enough of that in Buffy as it is. That being said, I was going off a challenge and I wanted to see if I could write something that I didn't exactly agree with. (turning Xander into a girl)

That being said, I'm glad that you enjoyed the story despite Xander getting turned into a girl.
Review By [Fayari] • Date [9 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Ancalador
Review:
An enjoyable read. Thank you very much. My only complaint (if you can call it that) is that I didn't see all that much suffering, despite what the title claimed. Also you kinda jumped through quite a bit of potential story, but I can understand getting tired of a story and wanting to just end it.

Anyways hoping to read more of your works in the future.
Comments from author:
I'm glad that you enjoyed it. The suffering was some (light) emotional suffering... they ended up suffering less than I thought they would. :) Toward the end I was getting a bit tired of people complaining about one thing or another I think. I skipped a bit of stuff I probably could have explored but that's true with a lot of stuff.

I've a number of other stories and I'm still working on things so you're probably in luck for reading more of my stuff.
Review By [Ancalador] • Date [2 Jul 12] • Not Rated
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