Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Kremer
The writing's OK, but there's no final 'payoff' or resolution to the scene, other than having to call the insurance company to pay for the damages (which apparently is nothing new).
My first thought after reading it was "And....?"
There was no 'and'.
Review By [Kremer
] • Date [20 Jun 10] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Gideon
I can imagine that conversation. Reminds me of Buffy destroying a bench in college.
" I hit a big rock. On purpose. Well it was looking at me funny!" Good on Dawn for using the weapons at her disposal.
Review By [Gideon
] • Date [19 Jun 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]