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A slightly different Xander

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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from SlykeDB
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Okay... so, you have a story, that changes how Xander is born, gives him a whole new life... then ends with him back in his old one, with nothing at all changed from how the series progressed, and no modifications forth coming. It's like an aborted prequel. As it stands there is no actual substance to this story at all, he isn't even "a slightly different Xander" he's the exact same Xander.
Review By [SlykeDB] • Date [12 Apr 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from powellt
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I don't say this to flame, but you need to cut back on the details a little bit. I got about a third to a quarter of the way through and had to stop due to my head hurting from the overload of details. On the other hand what I have read this looks to be a story with much potential and I hope that you don't allow my criticism to stop you from writing and improving as you go. Also don't get me wrong I'm going to go back and read it all later anyways .
Review By [powellt] • Date [21 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from djhardim
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This story has one significant flaw - the two words "The End". Please consider continuing this.

I wonder how Cordy will react when she discovers what the PTB have done.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [21 Jun 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from KatieKat
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I love that story I think that you should continue it and reunite the brothers *Grins*
Review By [KatieKat] • Date [21 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from oldgirllost
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I'm only giving it a five because it is a one shot and should be the beginning of something longer.

Please have him gain his memory back after season seven and/or Africa.
For one thing he must have a magic core since this is the same Alex Potter, just raised by Muggles on the Hellmouth. Once he gets off the Hellmouth the accidental magic should be all over the place. They didn't change his genetics.

I like this
Review By [oldgirllost] • Date [21 Jun 10] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Doodle
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If that scene at the end was before season six, then when it gets to the Tabula Rasa episode and the crystal breaks, have him remember all about his other life.
Review By [Doodle] • Date [21 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from kaleecat
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This is utterly heartbreaking. Seriously it made me cry b/c I can't stand the idea of both of them losing their family like that. Condemning Xander to a lonely life with friends that hurt as much as help. And poor Harry who surely fared better as a child since he had Alex with him. Stupid PTBs.
Review By [kaleecat] • Date [21 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from nightowl
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I like this alot. I'm hoping that even if it's looking like a oneshot you'll add more later. Maybe you could make them meet up after the battle with the first. That way the powers will have the people they want saved but xander and harry can save each other after the ending of a major battle. Have Xan in europe and run into harry while he searches for a relic thingy. It could be gaurded by a demon that Xan is after. If you keep goin gor if you don't this was an awesome story either way.
Review By [nightowl] • Date [21 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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