A deep and interesting view, but a bit lacking in Oz. Also, maybe more suited for the redemption seeing crowd after the murder/suicide, so eventual crossing might work better with Angel or Faith. Also, not sure why you use the / and call it pairing and then directly call it not romantic, why not symply use & and friendship or meeting instad of creating double confusion?
okay chapter one was tainted by anger, but it worked. Because in this chapter we see that angers effects. Dudley in effect 'wakes up' and starts on the path toward something better. For me the HP books dont work very well, the sadism and abuse he suffers makes me question things too much. however I did enjoy this take on a otherwise horrible character.
Review By [Karis] • Date [16 Jul 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Ooh, yes. Please do continue! You've set up a wonderful beginning that shows Dudley's worldview. Dudley's attitudes are quite logical when looked at from that point of view. I love the change in Piers. I look forward to seeing how this change influences Dudley.
Review By [mokahi] • Date [28 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
This is a good look at Dudley so far, and it's pretty diametrically opposed to Oz's world view. I would be curious to see how/where you're going with this...
Review By [SlowMercury] • Date [28 Jun 10] • Not Rated