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Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from tactless
I know that after three yeears this probibly dead, but

Review By [tactless] • Date [24 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from bookworm
Heh, this one's fun too! I'm not sure where it might go plotwise, but I like the idea of these two groups meeting.
Review By [bookworm] • Date [29 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from HMaxMarius
Cool start,

Any plans to continue this? I'd be interested in reading further!

What sort of villains would the slayers be taking on? Did them getting tossed into the Incredible's dimension mean that supernatural forces would now be able to enter? Will there be vampires breaking their teeth on Bob's shoulders? How would a vampire react to the inability to bite Helen? You know that Dash isn't going to stay away from that slumber party, even if he's still in elementary or middle school!

I can come up with plenty of pump-priming questions! More please!
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [1 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from (Recent Donor)Deamondeathstone
Maybe this is a stupid question, but where the hell is Xander?
Comments from author:
He, Andrew and Robin will be showing up in the next chapter.

The Scoobies currently are trying to protect the people that officaldom are not really aware of yet.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Deamondeathstone] • Date [27 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Lilkitsu
What fun! I like the drea pirate idea. And keeping them more shadowy works with their darker natures. Not to mention, if you bring demons into for balance (and fun), they can keep the term" slayer" althougni wonder what the whole posse would be called? Shadow legion? Slayers anonymous? Or would everyone get a name? The red witch, the dark and golden slayer, the pompous a-hole (that'd be kenn)... I look forword to reading more!
Comments from author:
Not totally sure on nameing yet. I personally like Slayers Inc. for the name of the group, but I am planning on using that for my City of Heroes story, so I have to come up with something new.

It will be a chapter or two before I need to come up with it so hopefully something will occure by then.
Review By [Lilkitsu] • Date [26 May 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from skychan
The dread pirate roberts... hmm, it could work, it could work. Maybe some of the squads go with a bolero style jacket, perhaps some with gypsy style leggings or vests, at first I was thinking there is just not a lot you can do with spandex, but then I realized why stop there. accessorize!
Comments from author:
To true. I like the jacket idea, not sure on the gypsy though.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [skychan] • Date [26 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from LetsRandom
This is an interesting crossover idea and I look forward to see what you end up doing with it!
Comments from author:
Thanks, I hope I don't disappiont.
Review By [LetsRandom] • Date [25 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Gideon
Buffy going for a boring costume? I'd never have thought it! But it does make it different from her 'secret' identity I guess. I hope she has another more interesting costume for special ocasions or perhaps formal Slayer appearances.
Comments from author:
Buffy never seen keen on the uniform idea, so I thought she wouldn't be overly happy with the idea of having one. Plus she has even admitted that she isn't very good at secret ID girl.

On the other hand when Helen related what happened when Syndrom followed them home, Buffy saw the need. Doesn't mean she is going to be dressing up like Wonder Woman though.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [25 May 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from SamDragon
If you can would love to see the costumes.
Comments from author:
I'll see what I can do, but fair warning, I'm not much of an artist.
Review By [SamDragon] • Date [25 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Greywizard
This is developing into a very fun fic. ;-)

And I think that Dash will quickly find both Xander and Andrew to be role models to which he can aspire. His parents, tough, probably won't agree all that much. ;-)
Comments from author:

I think you could well be right on both counts.
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [25 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
“Yeah, if they want to stay in town they’ll have to talk to us."
Arrogant, much? They move to a new city and unilaterally assume they have total authority over the city's supers? Exactly how did they decide that?
Comments from author:
That's not exactly how they meant that. What Buffy was saying is that since there were anti-super laws, and Buffy and Willow are part of the establishment if they didn't talk to them, the Parr's would have to move to protect their identies, not that theScoobies would be telling them what to do.
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [25 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from batzulger
'Noooo Capes!'
Comments from author:
One of the best lines in the movie.
Review By [batzulger] • Date [25 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from LordSia
Interesting. I'm curious where you would take this - unless of course you have a dimensional Rift leaking demons into the Incredibles' reality.
Comments from author:
I'll be intoducing the main storyline in about three chapters. You aren't far off.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [LordSia] • Date [18 Nov 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from MarcusSLazarus
Ambiguous about the 'other-dimensional' element- it might have been more straightforward if they were in the same reality with contact between the Slayers and the Incredibles mere chance, particularly since Slayers tend to operate 'undercover' anyway-, but I'm willing to see how this develops from now on before I pass any specific judgement.

Besides, the idea of the Slayers in costumes IS rather potentially amusing...
Comments from author:
I'm leary about having Slayers established in Super Universes. My personal belief is that Slayers are adapted to the universe and considering how powerful some supers are, and that Slayers would have to be somewhere in that ballpark, you get very gross, very quick.

Thanks for the reviews.
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [24 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from skychan
Well you must be doing something right when my reaction to the notification of a chapter is, "oh cool." and proceeding to read it on the spot.

That being the case I was a little disapointed in how short it was, and that you didn't go any further into the 'testing/analyzing' process. I find thats a good way to judge how somoenes treating the slayer condition from time to time. As a thought you might also point out that, one reason people don't stalk out Edna's home is that super villains have been know to use her services, and are less than ammused at paparazzi taking photos of them.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.
I'm going to try something a little diffrent with 'Seeing Clearly'. Instead of going for a fixed chapter length, usually around 2000 words, I'm going to stop writing at what I think is a good chapter stop point. The chapters will end up being shorter, but there will be more of them.

And that is a big reason that why photogs don't usually hang out around Edna's place. Though judging by the security she has, photogs might not life to make the mistake of staking her out more than once.
Review By [skychan] • Date [13 Sep 10] • Not Rated
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