Review of chapter "Talking" from Rune
Way over the top, Xander is way overpowered and turns people to ants? I'm sure you could make this worse but I do not want to think of how you might do that. I was tempted to give you a rating of 1 but your spelling would have to be as bad as the plot for that. You still got the lowest rating I have ever given out so far. I know I'm not much of a writer but seeing this makes me realize I'm not all bad. In fact neither are you all bad but Xander is still mega uber, you compared him to a god yourself. Try re-writing this.
Review By [Rune
] • Date [11 Oct 10] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "New Love..s" from loonielupin
I like your story, I find the plotline is nice and can be interesting but you should try to develop a little more when you write and maybe add some dialogue because, at the moment, it looks like you're making a summary of the events happening in the story, more than telling the story itself.
I hope you don't take this the wrong way, as I said, I do like the story. Keep going.
Review By [loonielupin
] • Date [13 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Before" from mpop
You might want to think about running it through spell-check, before posting it.
Review By [mpop
] • Date [3 Jul 10] • Not Rated