Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from BenjiC
You really should continue this. The premise is unique, the interactions between characters is refreshing and there is a distinct lack of emo. One of the best stories I have read on this site although it feels a bit rushed.
Hope you come back to it at some point.
Review By [BenjiC
] • Date [25 Sep 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from KrisB
It's been awhile since I've read this one. My one suggestion at the moment on where to take this. Some how introduce Lex to Joyce as just "Xander's bud" or something and let Lex get attached/drawn in abit by her. Xander always had a thing for Joyce. This one didn't really seem to show it though.
I doubt that will happen as Dawn is likely to end up Xander's major task in life. Hmm... I've liked how you had Xander's road trip the only one that you really needed to add was Harley Quinn.
I like the idea out Lex/Xander building their own fortune from scratch the easily rivals Luthor Corp. Lex as being seen as the eccentric green guy that likes to have fun is different.
You know what would be really fun? Lex and Xander having a harem contest on who could build and keep up the most comptent and unquie harem of women/girls. ;) The only thing is that you'd need to some how add in Tara and Dawn just to give him a Sunnydale connection. Dawn ain't quite old enough now, but give her 5 years and a flash forward, and they'd be an interesting match.
I also think that tossing a female Amazo his way that started out on his path would be an interesting matchup. The only real problem with that is he would likely see her more as a sister than as a love interest.
Review By [KrisB
] • Date [24 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from WCSII
... You get bored with what you're writing easily, don't you? Do you have anything that you've finished?
Review By [WCSII
] • Date [28 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from ronin
i'm a fan your work and i love this story as well i tend to reread your work when i'm bored.but great job on the story and i would to see you update some stuff
Review By [ronin
] • Date [3 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from Joseph
Review By [Joseph
] • Date [19 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from DarkTopaz
Review By [DarkTopaz
] • Date [10 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from CageFire
This is an awesome story. :) It's sad that it hasn't been updated in about a year now. :(
Review By [CageFire
] • Date [7 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from tchizek
Wow, just wow.
I was worried for a while that Xander was going to end up a mindless weapon of destruction, but it turned out to be just a phase he was going through.
I love how the Wizards keep showing up and causing him trouble.
I love how he keeps pushing DC Super supervillainess in unexpected directions. So far I if I have kept track correctly he has diverted one completely, changed the direction of two slightly. This is great!
I love how he is changing Clark, Superman is going to be less of a boyscout in this version.
It also appears he is changing Lex, which would be great!
Wonderful story, I hope you continue!
Review By [tchizek
] • Date [18 Aug 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from deitarionSSokolow
Interesting story so far, but I really think it should have been a series since it's got two distinct story arcs with their own independent driving conflicts. (The first one ends with the mayor's death and Xander getting the inheritance would either be part of the last chapter or part of the epilogue. The second one begins with Xander's departure.)
I'd also really like to have seen more time and detail spent on the first story arc to flesh it out.
Review By [deitarionSSokolow
] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from Peaslums
Just going through my recommendations and happened upon this again. Figured it was due a reread. Still as good as it was the first couple times. Hoping to see more, particularly the meet and greet between Xander and Kara. Maybe a Xander vs. Clark on red kryptonite perhaps. Not too sure where you can take this in the long run though, Xander's just too powerful and there's really no one who can even challenge him anymore. Clark on red kryptonite maybe.
Review By [Peaslums
] • Date [26 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from SilverWave
Review By [SilverWave
] • Date [27 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from deamon
you know I love this story and as a sugesstion i would love clark/cloe and xander/lois
Review By [deamon
] • Date [24 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from Tjin
still love this, still waiting on more...
Review By [Tjin
] • Date [11 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from SirMethos
Just finished reading the entire story. Great work so far! It's been a great read.
My only point of critique is that it seems kinda rushed. You could easily make it twice as long, without adding anything new to the plot, simply by expanding on what you've already written.
Either way, keep up the good work, and I hope to read more of this story sometime soon :)
Review By [SirMethos
] • Date [24 Apr 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from kitsuneofdarkfire
OMG THEY CORRUPTED LEX!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
thats fucking epic man i want more lol
Review By [kitsuneofdarkfire
] • Date [24 Apr 12] • Not Rated