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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Recent Donor)Luna
Review:
Never read this pairing, but it was pretty good. I really liked Faith's words.

EDIT: I liked what she was saying -- it sounded very 'Faith' to be so self-conscious abou how Giles felt about her and her attacking him for feeling ashamed of her.
Comments from author:
Thank you :) What about them did you like?
Review By [(Recent Donor)Luna] • Date [31 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy
Review:
Well, I actually like this pairing a lot, as you'll know from my story Lost, but I think you've come up short so far... it's good... you've got their motivations down perfectly, but the voices aren't quite right -- at least Giles isn't 100%. But I still love you for trying, and I know you'll get it a bit closer next time...

One thing I believe you *did* get right, is that I didn't hear him say 'I love you' -- which she probably wanted to hear and *needed* to hear, and which someone like Giles might have a serious problem saying... Even though he suspected she was thinking it, and though it seemed from how your wrote, that he felt it.

You're still one of only 2 writers for whom I have 'track all stories' selected. For reference, I have many hundreds of tracked stories - so you're in very special company!

Peace.
Comments from author:
Wow...thank you! That is rather impressive and flattering...

What specifically do you think doesn't seem right about Giles's voice? I haven't actually written him very extensively very often. I don't think that either of them, in this particular story or in general, would want to say I love you, at least not at this point. In the comics they are not actually having sex that we know of, but there are a few places where a relationship could be inferred if one looked at it that way. And they do have a closer relationship.
Review By [(Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [31 Jul 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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