Hmm an interesting story, and a decent ending though I do feel most of the stuff was rushed towards the end. More 'summarization' than actual dialog or actions near the end there, and not just any conversations but life altering ones that were too important to just gloss over imo.
Over all I hope there is a sequal to this, cause there was a lot of set up to end the story after 3 chapters, and sort of a rushed ending as well.
Comments from author:
actually the plan was for this to begin a small series which would go deeper into the changes invoked not just for Xander and Tara but everyone involved during the night including people we did not see duirng the actual event. I am already making plans for the second story so you will hopefuly learn what you want then. Yes the ending did end on a sort of rush not but that was just where I thought would be a good ending and then the next story would pick it up.(Razial)
I'm confused... In chapter 1 you said Dawn dressed up as River. Yet in Chapter 2 is seems you have both Dawn and River present. Before they leave the Magic Box it seems to read like they are swapping control of their body, but when they get to Ethan's they are in 2 bodies and River takes up an Axe and goes after the demons while Dawn stays behind. Was this an error or an, unrealized by the group, additional unintended complication with the spell?
Reply: Ok, that explains it... And here I was about to update this and ask where Tara/Goddess got off to.... I completely spaced out on the fact that her name was Dawn as well...
Comments from author:
No you just missed the explantation of who Tara dressed as. Dawn dressed as River from firefly whilst Tara was dressed as Dawn the Goddess of bith and rebirth from the Joseph Michael Linsner comics, hence when I say Dawn after the spell breaks I mean Tara's possessed form and not Dawn Summers ok? (Razial)
Like I was thinking, the difference between Doctors Nine and Ten was that one a bit more lighthearted and easygoing than the other. That one, combined with Xander, would likely overrule the more sensible Doctor and take crazy risks. I don't know what Xan-Doc did, but I absolutely belive that it was something kinda crazy! I guess we'll see next time!
Review By [kayron] • Date [3 Aug 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Too bad for Ethan that Giles decided to dress as Ripper. If he finds Ethan, Ripper is really going to kick his ass this time!! Xander is going to be a combination of Nine and Ten. I wonder how that will work. Their personalities are a bit different. Nine was a bit more serious than Ten. I guess Ten was a bit like Xander. He could be kind of a goofball, but he got the job done. I can't wait to see what the author will do with all of these strong characters!
Review By [kayron] • Date [2 Aug 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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