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Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from loretta
Review:
this is a good story, i hope you update it soon
Comments from author:
tx again... this one is still on my todo list, just don't know when.
Review By [loretta] • Date [26 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from eriktheviking
Review:
A great Jessica revelation.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [25 Nov 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Gideon
Review:
Interesting choice to make Jessica the bad guy. I don't think I have seen that before. I almost hoped that Jessica did go after Buffy. At least Buffy would put up more of a fight. Jessica is going to be sorry she hurt Willow when Xander finds out! Or maybe he already knows...
I like how you had Xander and also Faith react a bit more maturely but be careful not to take it too far or they might get out of character.I have noticed that they seem to speak a bit formally but that may be because English is not your first language. In that case you are writing very well! Just try to keep their dialog a bit more like how teenagers might speak.
Comments from author:
tx for the review...and teenspeak? yeah...not easy to do :) but I'll try to remember
Review By [Gideon] • Date [25 Nov 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Cateagle
Review:
Okay, this one promises to get highly interesting right quickly. I suspect Jessica is going to be trying to get to Xander before his uncle gets him unbound and properly trained. Methinks a lot of folk who turned Xander out are going to regret it (methinks Willow already does, not that it does her much good). I suspect Jessica is going to cause enough chaos to draw attention to herself and who knows what, or whom, that'll bring down on her.
Comments from author:
tx for the review and yes Jessica will cause some more chaos in trying to find her son.
Review By [Cateagle] • Date [24 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from kayron
Review:
Usually Jessica is a pathetic excuse of a mother. She is usually portrayed as the abused wife or an equally useless drunk like Tony. In this story she is one scary b**ch! She really had a good time taking out Willow! I hope Xander's uncle can help him before Jessica finds him. I remember DarthWillow, and Jessica has probably just sucked in a whole lotta power!
Comments from author:
yes here she is one scary bitch....that was one of my plans for this fic and we will see her again next chapter, you can be sure of that :) And yes that would have been quite the power rush from Will. And to Xander...we will see :)
Review By [kayron] • Date [24 Nov 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from rankokunathree
Review:
wow heck of a story cant wait to find out what happens next!
Keep up the awesome writing!
Brad
Comments from author:
thank you again, sadly I have no new ch ready for this one atm. But I will try to write a bit more next week.
Review By [rankokunathree] • Date [6 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from cloudleonsgurl
Review:
Have to say this is very interesting. I've never seen a fic where Tony was a victim and Xander's mom was the abuser. It's actually a freshing spin and also quite informative. Most people forget that women can be just as violent as men and psychically and mental abuse their husbands too.

Very interesting cliff hanger, I hope you will continue when you have time. :)
Comments from author:
thank you for the review and tx you like my idea to turn this one around this time and yes it will be continued. I just can't promise when, sadly I'm not very fast in writing.
Review By [cloudleonsgurl] • Date [31 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Addlcove
Review:
gah, cliffie!! more please :)
Review By [Addlcove] • Date [22 Jun 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Bobboky
Review:
cool
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [24 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from eriktheviking
Review:
A well written build-up.
Comments from author:
thank u
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [24 Jan 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Karis
Review:
not sure where exactly you were going with this, but liked what I saw so far.
The idea of Xander and faith having a friendship is interesting, given the series seemed to attribute things to them that weren't followed up.
The concept of Xander refusing to accept being put as-side is also one I wish more fan-fics would look at.

any chance you might continue this?
Comments from author:
planned yes, but it will take a while because I'm currently trying to finish an other ch of a different story, but rl issues keep coming in the way of writing.
Review By [Karis] • Date [5 Oct 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Traveler
Review:
Just found your stories and just want to let you know that I find them enjoyable and will be tracking all to see where you take us.
Comments from author:
thank you that you are enjoying them, makes me giddy to finish my next ch of the Harris Files (that what I'm working on now) even faster *g*
Review By [Traveler] • Date [21 Sep 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Raider
Review:
interesting opening, and a side of tony harris I've never seen before.

more please.
Review By [Raider] • Date [15 Aug 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Zaxxon
Review:
Interesting start... not sure where you are going with this. Nor what series you are crossing this with.

With the last name of Black, Jessica being disowned and such, I have a feeling of Harry Potter. But would think you would have marked it as such. Black is a common fictional last name.
Comments from author:
at this point of time no Harry Potter. This Black character I used is actually a bit older than the HP verse, but not know much outside of Germany where it also was just a small mystery series. I just liked the background and so used it, but you don't really have to know it.
Review By [Zaxxon] • Date [12 Aug 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from kayron
Review:
Nice! A mysterious uncle! This seems like it might be promising. Since Xander's mother was disowned, it seems that her family might come from money, or have some kind of power or influence. Not that money is the most important thing, but maybe they can help Xander in some way. I think that Xander is going to need some kind of help or training or something. Since the Scoobies seem to be in their 'fray adjacent' frame of mind, Xander needs someone to either help him learn to survive on the Hellmouth, or help him move off of it. I'm glad to see that Faith and Xander are going to go the friends route, and skipped the sex and rejection part. Xander is already proving to be a thoughtful friend by telling Faith that he will help her with Wesley and trying to get the Council to live up to its responsibilities toward her. This looks like a pretty interesting first chapter. I'll be tracking.
Comments from author:
thank you for reading and such a big review, I enjoyed reading that *g* to faith / xander. I just like those two and so wanted to give them a better foundation this time and not destroy it through the one night stand.
Review By [kayron] • Date [12 Aug 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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