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Darkness Binds

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Review of chapter "Darkness Binds" from (Past Donor)Deanie
Review:
Interesting beginning. I'd love to read more.
Review By [(Past Donor)Deanie] • Date [22 Feb 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Darkness Binds" from Kerridwen
Review:
Would really love to see where this goes!! Any hope you'll continued it? Will give brownies :D
Review By [Kerridwen] • Date [18 Aug 04] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Darkness Binds" from (Past Donor)GACTsevil
Review:
You're very good at writing from Fred POV please continue.
Review By [(Past Donor)GACTsevil] • Date [21 Jul 04] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Darkness Binds" from Keshkreature
Review:
Sounds good so far. Can't wait to see where you are going to take this.
Review By [Keshkreature] • Date [24 Apr 04] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Darkness Binds" from Nakita
Review:
Oh, I like. Great start. I can see Fred doing that (being the one to go into a portal even if it's into a hell daminsion). Poor Fred would do anything for Angel. Him being her hero and all. I'm glad you made it her because she's the only one I can see risking her life to jump into something head first like that. I feel bad that the world she's going to isn't the one Conner in in though. Poor Fred. Write more please!

~Nakita~
Review By [Nakita] • Date [2 Mar 04] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Darkness Binds" from (Past Donor)GACTsevil
Review:
more, please more.
Review By [(Past Donor)GACTsevil] • Date [6 Feb 04] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Darkness Binds" from Anonymous Reviewer
Review:
Interesting concept, but why would Fred just open a portal and hop in without involving the others? Would they forbid the idea, would they not want to listen? You don't address this issue, and it's an important one, because Fred was still, IMO, sufficiently traumatized at that point to not be able to endure jumping into an unknown dimension. We've all seen how messed up she was upon returning from Quartoth, drawing on the walls and hiding and babbling... it's very unlikely indeed that she'd hop into a portal with no more than a few qualms... at the very least there'd be a bit of tummy-butterflies, perhaps some tears, shaking with fright...

Bottom line, I find her doing this on the spur of the moment without involving any of the others highly unrealistic and severely compromising to the story, providing a shaky basis for whatever will follow.

However, address this, and I think you'll have a decent concept for a story.
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [1 Dec 03] • Not Rated
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