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12.9% Increase In Mission Success

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Review of chapter "12.9%" from Letomo
Review:
Good story, but there was a 'mouse' I want to know more about - who are the 7 people that Buffy needs to be there to help? Willow, Xander, maybe Giles, Dawn?, Oz?, who else?
Comments from author:
I honestly don't remember. It's been so long since I wrote this that I don't really remember any of the stray ideas that were tossed aside.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Review By [Letomo] • Date [2 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "12.9%" from LordSia
Review:
Objective: Informing Alexander "Xander" Harris about the Shadow War. Key facts for convincing main subject to join the fight includes threat profiles against subject James "Jesse" McNally and Willow "Wills" Rosenberg.
Succeeding in convincing main subject to join the fight ahead of prophesied schedule would mean an increase in the Primary Objective Mission Success rate by 5.1%.
Note: Including the standing threat the End Scenarios pose against the continued production of Twinkies is estimated to increase mission success rate by 21.78%.
Comments from author:
That would work well for a bit of a lead in if I were to continue this.

Thanks for reading!
Review By [LordSia] • Date [30 Mar 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "12.9%" from blazblaz
Review:
I really like what you had done with this. The only thing I could thing to make it better is if there was a sequel to it.
Comments from author:
Hmm... I'm not really sure what I would do for a sequel. I'll think about it.

Thanks for reading!
Review By [blazblaz] • Date [3 Jan 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "12.9%" from Chikageko
Review:
That was... interesting. Pity you didn't continue it... though it was written like it was meant to be a 1 shot... oh well.
Comments from author:
Like many of my oneshots, I might well do a sequel in the future.

Thanks for reading!
Review By [Chikageko] • Date [17 Oct 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "12.9%" from Gideon
Review:
I just reread this story again for fun and the emotional content was fairly appropriate for Cameron. She doesn't really understand emotions even if she is quite good at aping them on occasion. Maybe Buffy's experience here will help her recognise robots in her future!
Also I shudder to think what Faith would think when she arrived in town to find Buffy with Xander and Willow. I don't think she would like being left out!
Comments from author:
Well, she doesn't actually know Cameron is a robot, so I don't know...Buffy still thinks she's a special agent. But maybe.

As for reading it for fun, I hope you read it for fun the first time as well. I do hope no one's forcing yourself to read my stuff. That would be torture.

All in all, thanks for reading and reviewing!
Review By [Gideon] • Date [20 Sep 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "12.9%" from (Current Donor)deiticlast
Review:
Wow. Love the plot. Not so much on the execution of Buffy's bisexuality. I mean, I have nothing against her making it with other girls. In fact, I think it's hot. However, you glazed over all of the emotions and interactions that go with seduction, or in this case, self-seduction, of the same sex. All of this is needed to make it believable and not just some adolescent jerk-off fantasy. And the execution of the story was cursory at best. I understand that you had a lot of information to cover in one chapter, but there could have been at least a little more depth. But hey, love the cross-over, and the storyline's great. Can't wait for more!

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Oh, god, please don't think I meant any disrespect by that! "Adolescent jerk-off fantasy" is a phrase so bandied about about my own work that I've grown too comfortable with it, and have forgotten how offensive it can be. My girl pointed that out to me, and I am so sorry for seeming like a jackass! I love where you're going with this story, though! Keep more coming!
Comments from author:
I've been experimenting with prose lately, and this was one of them. I agree, the emotions were absent there. I could have used a few more scenes to show how things were progressing, however I initially decided against them because it was from the point of view of an emotionless machine. Looking at it now, I'm not so sure it worked.

I didn't want it to be a jerk-off fantasy, but if that's what people think it came out as, I suppose that's their opinion.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Review By [(Current Donor)deiticlast] • Date [27 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "12.9%" from Wolflady
Review:
Loved the shovel, but the idea was to bury him with it afterwards. You stopped too soon! I really hope you do a shovel.
Comments from author:
Well, technically, it was "beat to death with a shovel" But Angel was already dead, so the reverse worked as well.

Thanks for reading!
Review By [Wolflady] • Date [20 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "12.9%" from eriktheviking
Review:
A well written and very unexpected method of crossover.
Comments from author:
Well, it is a time travel story of sorts.

I'm glad you liked it.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [20 Aug 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "12.9%" from (Recent Donor)DaveTurner
Review:
YAY! Hit him again with a BIGGER shovel!

Much enjoyed, thank-you.

DaveT.
Comments from author:
Shovels are nice.

Thanks for reading!
Review By [(Recent Donor)DaveTurner] • Date [20 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "12.9%" from anyareine
Review:
Pretty sure it is Connor and not Connors.

Other than that I really liked it. Hope you write some more. :)
Comments from author:
Yep, you're not the first one to catch that slip up on my part.

Any sequel will be sometime down the road. For now, I'll just have this until I get some other works in progress finished.

Thanks for reading!
Review By [anyareine] • Date [20 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "12.9%" from Gideon
Review:
Complete? No , not complete! I don't want it to be complete!
Oh, well, regardless of my wishes it does make a nice self contained story and both Buffy and Cameron will be busy for the next several years anyway.
I love the thought of Cameron pretending to be a valley girl, like Buffy was pre series. I wonder how Buffy convinced her not to sit near her friends?
Its almost a pity that Cameron tried to reform the council, most of them are not worth saving :P
And I don't think you will be the only person to focus on the 12.9% :)
Comments from author:
Yeah, I thought more people would want to have this be longer, but I just couldn't manage to get into another big project like this. I'll think about doing a sequel later when things settle down with my other works. Maybe I should finish some that are just not quite done.

Anyways, thanks for reading. I'm glad you liked it, and that 12.9% is definitely better in this case.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [20 Aug 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "12.9%" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
I like it.
Comments from author:
Thanks!
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [20 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "12.9%" from FireWolfe
Review:
Ok now this is interesting. Love to see more.
Comments from author:
Maybe some day, but for now it's just going to be a one shot.

Thanks for reading!
Review By [FireWolfe] • Date [20 Aug 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "12.9%" from Crayshack
Review:
Very well done. One of the better terminator fics I've seen. It would be interesting to see this expanded to explore the full effects of Cameron's involvement, but as a one-shot it works great.
Comments from author:
I thought about doing that, but realized I've got too many works in progress open at the moment. I might do a sequel in the future.

Thanks for reading!
Review By [Crayshack] • Date [20 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "12.9%" from CPTSkip
Review:
Your story was just "neat"! Nice job with both Buffy and Cameron. I really hope Cam made an improvement in Buffy's future life. I especially was impressed with the idea of Buffy showing her parents her Slayerhood by twisting the steel bar into a pretzel shape. Lol!
Comments from author:
I'm glad you liked it, I did try to keep the personalities as close to in character as I could. As for an improvement, I hope so.

The steel bar was just something I thought up. It does make for better belief if you've got proof of your own abilities.

Thanks for reading!
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [19 Aug 10] • Not Rated
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