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Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from AllenPitt
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so Faith has abandonment issues (no surprise there) and doesn't know how to handle Robin dumping her. Most people go through something like that at least once in their lives, usually several times while dating etc; but she never has. He probably had no idea how she'd react. Just saw the tough facade. Anyway-- I wonder how long willow will remain oblivious to there being a problem.
Presumably a few years (past this story) before her Watcher finds her? but by then most of the emotional damage had been done...
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [17 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from AllenPitt
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Yes, Robin is definitely a slayer groupie with mommy issues . Understandable given his background. Note he took Buffy out on a date first; that didn't work out, so he switched to the other adult slayer. She seemed ok, he didn't realize at first what a mess she was. Has found out and figures "ok, that didn't work out, let's be adult and break up". And is probably only starting to realize that Faith is taking it very very badly. Probably doesn't understand why. He's the first man to ever get close to her emotionally, probably. Ouch.
Add in Willow there undermining her authority; setting off Faith's paranoia (that they never intended to give her command of the Cleveland hellmouth, yadda yadda) and there's just enough truth in that to make things look bad. Faith is either going to buy a motorcyle & drive off never to return or just shut down around the HQ & go out on solo patrols. A lot. With Willow taking a few days to realize F. isn't training the new slayers or working with them or interacting with anybody. At all. (that's my guess, anyway). If Robin gets 'friendly' with any one of the new slayers (and I think there's a strong chance he will) then it's going to get very ugly. Slayers seem to get stronger the longer they last, Faith is the oldest by far of any in Cleveland, she could likely wipe the floor with any of the newbies...
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [1 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from AllenPitt
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I have the feeling Robin doesn't quite understand the damage he's just done. Probably doesn't realize that not only has she never been dumped before--she's never been in a relationship before. ie a 'real' relationship. And doesn't know how to deal with this. Meanwhile Willow is sabotaging her authority without realizing (or caring?)-- but with all her magic, the new slayers need an experienced slayer to teach them, take them out on their first patrols etc...and right now Faith is likely not going to do any of that--will just go out solo & let Willow 'run things'.
Comments from author:
Oh Wood definitely doesn't know. But also, he... sort of got into that relationship without knowing her very well. I mean, they traded barbs, bitched about Buffy, both disliked Spike, had sex, but other than that? The only reasons I see that Wood got into a relationship with her were that A) she was a connection to his mother, being a Slayer... eww... B) she was someone he thought he could 'fix', coming off as simply dark and sardonic without him knowing her whole past, and C) she was a consenting adult in a house full of teenagers.

He initiated and committed to a relationship without really thinking about it. He came off as heroic and wonderful, giving her this thing she'd never had before. It probably felt pretty good for him, being such an awesome guy, making this girl feel all special and loved... but then the apocalypse was averted and everything changed.

That whole Robin's-near-death thing made Faith take his offer a little more seriously, and him getting to really know her past made him take a big old step back. He can't handle her brand of drama. Or maybe he just isn't as into her as he thought he was. Which pisses me off something mighty. I was never a fan of Wood, so I admit to bashing, though I understand where he's coming from and am REALLY TRYING to give him a fair shake.

As for Willow... we'll see.

Thanks so much for reviewing - you give great feedback. :)
-Tamora
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [31 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Waverly
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Love this insight into Faith, it's beautiful and sad, great characterization. Ye Gods, Wood is such a douchebag.
Please update again soon!
Review By [Waverly] • Date [31 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from AllenPitt
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I wonder how long it'll take Willow to realize something's wrong with Faith? F. for once isn't externalizing her problems (ie "feel bad, hit someone") --instead she's just pulling back and not saying anything. She's been dumped, and implicitly told that she's not trusted in a leadership position.... they've done a lot of damage to her & not even realized it, apparently.
But Willow at least knows her well enough to realize that she's not behaving normally; probably won't notice for at least another day though.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [31 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from (Recent Donor)Luna
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For the first chapter I liked the narration of old Faith talking about her old life and her fantasies about her dad :)

In this chapter I think you captured Faith’s voice *really* well.

For her, specifically. I mean, Buffy showed up in those mysterious prophecies and records and mystical books dozens of times. So maybe Faith would too. Maybe they’d tell her what she could’ve done better, or what she was supposed to do now...
----------You slipped into first person tense in the second sentence of this paragraph. Also, I liked that you have Faith wondering if she’s in any prophecies – that’s new; I neverthought of her wondering about such a thing.

Liked the way you dealt with the Gov’t and insurance deal :)


cause Red didn’t drive stick anymore. But there it was
------- ha! This made me laugh; very Faith. Nice to see her jealous as well.

One thing – ugh! How DARE Robin break up with our Faithy! Grrr.

OUCH. Red cutting off Faith sucks, but is to be expected :(

mini-Kennedy. Huh. Maybe Willow’d bone her next.
-------------- HAHAHAHAHAHA

Wood smiled at the girls, his put-the-pal-in-principal attitude shining through those fucking bright teeth.
----LOVE this description.

Liking this story and would def like to see more :)

EDIT: I just realized this was second in a series (I'm so slow at night!) and that her dad is Sirius from the previously story that I adored! Yessssssssss! Now that I realized where THIS story is coming from and where it's heading I am even MORE excited to seemore!!! *grins*
Review By [(Recent Donor)Luna] • Date [30 Aug 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Gideon
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I'm guessing the coin is some kind of wizard money? I wonder where she stashed it that it didn't disappear over the years.
A sad start to life for Faith but it is kinda fun to hear her older self commenting on it. Keep up the good work!
Review By [Gideon] • Date [29 Aug 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Waverly
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Very intriguing start. Can't wait to see who Faith's family is.
You caught her voice perfectly, great characterization. Please update again soon!
Comments from author:
Spoilers for her family in the previous story of the series (it's a one-shot). You don't meet her family for a while in this one, in case LITERALLY meant you "can't wait".

Also, thank you. I'm positively giddy with your comment - I work hardest on maintaining a character's voice, as that's usually what I'm most picky about when I'm reading. Thanks! ^_^

-Tamora
Review By [Waverly] • Date [25 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from AllenPitt
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I don't suppose the coin is a port key? Her mom was a Death Eater who ran and hid in America when Voldemort fell? Or she got messed up by the cruciatus curse? Or she's adopted. Maybe her dad is Sirius Black? That'd be fun...
Comments from author:
Check out the first story in the series. :)

No, I'm not gonna make the nickel-thing a portkey. That would just be too easy. And her mom was just a wreck. No magical powers involved there. But I'm still working on this story, so I'm open to suggestions.

Thanks!
-Tamora
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [25 Aug 10] • Not Rated
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