Review of chapter "End of the Line" from BrianDReader
A cautionary tale on the dangers f using magic without understanding what you are actually doing.
Thank you for an amazing story.
Review By [BrianDReader
] • Date [8 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "End of the Line" from DieselDriver
What a dark and twisted story. I've seen a tiny bit of Sailor Moon but I was far to old for them when they came out so don't know much of anything about them. I like the ending, world saved from well meaning idiots with to much power. Leaves a lot to think about the old Spiderman cliche (probably a lot older than that too) that with great power comes great responsibility also the one about the road to Hell being paved with the best of intentions. I disagree with several of the other reviewers in their opinion that Xander was bad to kill them. He saved the world. That has got to be worth something good.
Review By [DieselDriver
] • Date [14 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "End of the Line" from ShadeoftheEnd
... Damn. I never liked the whoe Crystal Tokyo thing, but stil that was somehow depressing and epic at the same time. Nice job.
Review By [ShadeoftheEnd
] • Date [8 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "End of the Line" from eternalfox
So, are Xander and Faith ending up in Hell for their murdering rampage? Make no mistake, they deliberately murdered innocents. The most Usagi could be guilty of is unmeditated manslaughter. What happened was by accident, the actions of Xander and Faith were intentional. It's one thing to kill the bad guys, it's quite another to slaughter mostly middle school aged girls, an elementary aged girl, 3 adult women, a high school boy protecting his friend, and the two cat guardians...all of whom are forces for good and protect the world from evil.
Review By [eternalfox
] • Date [18 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "End of the Line" from Azunth
Potent, and very well written. Unfortunately, I can't be said to like it. If you had used original characters of some sort, I probably would have loved it, but unfortunately you use a technique that sees a lot of use by less skilled authors; changing the context on the characters. You see it a lot in "Serious" fanfic of slapstick comedy; they remove the comedy elements, but keep the violence, and then Akane or Naru or whoever get's called out on whacking people. This can also be done by fiddling with the background; Perfect Lionheart tends to fill in the blanks canon leaves with details that bash the people he doesn't like, for example. In Crossovers, picking and choosing which background elements to apply can have the same affect. For example, the SM/MGLN crossover White Devil of the Moon is good, but it's lost some readers because it cherry picks from the anime and manga canons to make them look like idiots. People who like the characters on the short end of the context stick get pissed when this sort of context fiddling happens. Other people get pissed on general principle, because the result looks similar to "bash fic"; accusing/punishing characters for real or perceived wrongs, without consideration to their whole character, or the flaws of others.
This is a very scary, well done, and plausible. It's also done by transplanting the theme and metaphyiscs of Buffy onto the events of Sailor Moon, without changing the events of Sailor Moon so they fit the new theme and metaphysics. The results are terrifying, scary, and make Sailor Moon look like naive idiots. In short, it's a beautiful execution of a thoroughly abused technique, one that leaves a bad taste in my mouth despite the quality of your writing.
Comments from author:
I don't normally respond to reviews, mainly because most people who review do so from one side or the other, a set of extremes that leaves me with a roll of my eyes.
That said, I thank you for taking the time to post your response.
I wrote this, because I was in a particularly unpleasant place in life and I needed an outlet. The idea came to me and I followed it. I posted it mainly with a shrug of my shoulders, because I don't write for praise or for attention.
I write, because my muse whispers to me, because I need a release, and because I want to become a better writer.
But moving past that...
Most people have assumed that I hate Sailor Moon. That I wrote this story to bash it, that I was looking to destroy the characters because I don't like them. Not really the case.
Sailor Moon, was a manga that is quite good for it's genre. Of the Sailors, my favorite was actually always Usagi. But, at the same time, it's very much a shoujo manga, with the morals and drives that come with it.
Included in that, is a certain naivete that comes with purity and a determination to see light triumph over the darkness.
In a world not bound by the confines of shoujo genre limitations and values... Well, the Sailors _are_ naive idiots, but so are the characters of most stories designed for younger audiences in most places in the world. It's how most people want their children to grow up, believing in the power of hope and love and the ability of one person to change the world.
It's when they're faced with the greys of the world in truth that they falter and stumble down. Because as much as we want to believe in heroes as children, and as much as we hold onto that belief, that hope as we grow older... That stumbling, that faltering plants the seeds of resentment in our hearts, and a part of us grows to cheer their fall.
A particular Ro-Sham-Bo comes to mind. Monsters kill men, and Heroes kill Monsters, but it is men who kill heroes.
People will argue the point of canon this and canon that. It's an AU at its heart and will always be. It is simply a tale, tapping into the a well of emotions that burned with the need for release.
I cannot excuse it, I cannot defend it, and I cannot praise it.
Nor can I deny it, despise it, or denounce it.
It is a story, and stories are meant to evoke the primal in our heart.
And each heart will never beat with the exact same forces driving it.
But, I digress, I will take my leave from my overly long winded response and again, repeat my earlier sentiment: Thank you for taking the time to review.
Review By [Azunth
] • Date [23 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "End of the Line" from markw
According to one website I've seen, it's uncertain whether these characters can be killed with bullets. But leaving that aside before anyone starts on how easy killing Sailor Moon should be, this is an alternative universe where an event that takes place in the future and does not concern magic takes place in the present and does concern magic. So it's not so much an alternative universe as a case of, well, knowing more about Buffy.
Review By [markw
] • Date [15 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "End of the Line" from naplam
It's an AU fic written to expose just what's twisted about this anime, but because it's got the facts about the story wrong, it's unfair and quite frankly, cruel. I suppose I'm taking crossover fanfiction seriously because of the novelty value. Time, I think, to wash my hands of the whole thing. Bye.
Review By [naplam
] • Date [3 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "End of the Line" from naplam
I'll make this clear, shall I? The Earth being cleansed of Dark Energy, and that's Dark Energy NOT magic, happens A THOUSAND YEARS IN THE FUTURE.
The last review was actually swearing. Such hatred over something you people aren't even right about.
Comments from author:
People whine and moan about that's not how it is in canon, that it wasn't this, it wasn't that.
As people don't read between the lines to see the AU, or the fact that it was just a creative exercise, aka exploring something dark and unpleasant, you whine, and moan about it.
Or on the opposite end, they act like it's a all hell yeah!
Both ends of it are such idiocy over a childish, self contradicting shoujo series from decades ago, that still somehow, seems to push buttons.
Which, if people hadn't noticed was exactly why it was chosen.
Both sides it are pointless, and honestly childish, and having to watch the continued streams of it from both ends is so... predictable.
Both sides need to just grow up
Review By [naplam
] • Date [27 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "End of the Line" from Fayari
Fucking bitches. Bimbo's with too much access to magic, not enough smarts to think things through, and a sense of unearned self-righteousness like Buffy's make for characters so easy to hate, I'd gladly bitchslap them for eternity.
Review By [Fayari
] • Date [8 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "End of the Line" from Genericrandom
"On the Consequences of Love, Peace, and Shoujou Manga."
Review By [Genericrandom
] • Date [30 Jul 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "End of the Line" from SpacedCadet
and very good!
Review By [SpacedCadet
] • Date [21 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "End of the Line" from JoshuaRichardson
Still one of the best fics I have read, well worth a second and even a third re-read.
Thank you for sharing your unique interpretation with us.
Review By [JoshuaRichardson
] • Date [17 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "End of the Line" from Elissiaro
Uwaaa.... This was so, so heartbreaking!
It almost made me cry...
Review By [Elissiaro
] • Date [9 Feb 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "End of the Line" from Penfoldone
Fanfiction exposing the " problems" with Crystal Tokyo are based on fanon. In the Sailor Moon canon very little is ever said about it amd the circumstances in which it comes about. Two things that are known are that, in the Anime, it takes place a thousand years in the future. And in the Manga it happens when Usagi is twenty two years old. And a queen.
Review By [Penfoldone
] • Date [17 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "End of the Line" from LordSia
This... Is awesome. Grim, gritty, dark, EPIC Awesome...
Now all that's missing is a possible continuation, in which Xander becomes a wandering destroyer (Mr Black?) of the evil and the stupid. First one up; Dumbledore, and his "Greater Good".
Review By [LordSia
] • Date [14 Nov 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]