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Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from raxadian
Review:
Well, he is making the world a better place, kind of.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [21 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from raxadian
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Well, nice team up!
Review By [raxadian] • Date [21 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from wraithrune
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I am beginning to like Jarod :)
Review By [wraithrune] • Date [8 Jan 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Genericrandom
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I can kinda feel that. My best guess would be that while this started off as a story, it ended up as a minor transition piece. It fleshed out the universe without adding anything to the story.

Still, there were a few good quips, and it really did lose something in the retelling.
Review By [Genericrandom] • Date [2 Jan 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from CrystalBlaze
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I think you felt something was missing because you didn't tack on the afterstory for Richard.

Mayor Wilkins the Numbers has been warned off, and he's NOT stupid. I see him trying to find a niche in the new order, and his first steps in that direction maybe should have been put in.

Maybe next story.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [1 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from AlphaBeta
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Love it! In fact, anything you write I love. Also wondering when you will be getting back to some of your other stories, like your Robotech crossovers and The Nighthawk Chronicles. Hope to see an update for those and this story to in the near future!
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [29 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Inquisitor
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thx for the update...i think the chapter is a bit anti-climatic...not enough Jarod, like his character being the Pretender and not just Batman was ignored...neat reference on the Journeyverse story with the Belgari demon...actually would had liked to read more about Xander's encounter in the Dreaming and the Gossip that Egeria and Elanthielle had shared...as for Wilkins ascension with the book of Origin, we know the Ori are jerks and don't ascend their worshippers...at most Wilkins will become a Prior...anyway looking forward to more Jarod's adventures, especially with John Spartan running amok...
Review By [Inquisitor] • Date [29 Nov 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from JoshuaRichardson
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Not completely satisfied, but can't figure out why? Hmmm, lets see, no real threat to speak of, the resolution came and went in about twenty seconds and it didn't really live up to it's full potential. Huh. Can't see why your completely satisfied.

Honestly, it's like buying a comic book and reading about Spiderman taking down a mugger in
with a stapler in twenty pages.

On the other hand, it is real hard to get anything to dangerous to Xander at this point in the series, but it could have been better to let BatJarod figure things out. This is just MY opinion though.

As always, thanks for sharing your story with us.
Review By [JoshuaRichardson] • Date [29 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from darthridian
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good addition with how you handled the mayor, and also the quip. :)


nice reminder for the group about what Xander still remembers and also the meeting with Jarod and spartan, was a nice snippet.

thanks for the good writing mate and hope to read more soon.
Review By [darthridian] • Date [28 Nov 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Bobboky
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sweet
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [28 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Greywizard
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LOVING THIS, MAN!!! ;-)

My favorite part is, without any question:

"..."I made like Harry Potter in the Chamber of Secrets," he answered. He paused. "Wait, is that book out yet?"

Batman frowned. "Where did you get a phoenix?"

There was dead silence for a long moment, and Faith turned on him. "Okay, seriously. A few months ago, you didn't even know who Batman was, and you know Harry Potter? What is wrong with you?"

I LMAO reading that part, because it is just so perfectly in character for everyone depicted.

Great work here, buddy. ;-)
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [28 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Ghostrider
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Great to see another chapter added to the BTVS/DC universe and with two of my favorite characters no less.

Are we going to see more stories in the future with Bats and The Center? Maybe a little visit in costume to scare the stuffing out of his 'old friends'?
Review By [Ghostrider] • Date [17 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Perdurabo
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I liked it. You appear to be showing definite progress in allowing a natural flow of events proceed without interruption. I have previously noted that sometimes you have a problem with your chapters skipping around too much, leaving too much of the action or plot progression to be implied between 'on camera' scenes. Surprisingly, and pleasantly, I didn't notice any such tendency in this chapter. Well, almost none that I won't mention in order not to seem nitpicky. :)

This chapter very much reads like an early Tenhawk, and could fit right in alongside the Journeyverse. I mean this as a compliment, of course.

I am glad that you have resumed this series, and I hope to see more soon. Thank you for your time and efforts, and keep up the good work.
Review By [Perdurabo] • Date [17 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from BrinLondofive
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I was wondering when you'd be picking this back up, Cyclone.
Excellent.
Review By [BrinLondofive] • Date [16 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bobboky
Review:
awesome
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [16 Sep 10] • Not Rated
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