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Review of chapter "Cursum Perficio" from arturusoriginal
Review:
A very moving, enjoyable story. Loved the last 2 chapters.
Review By [arturusoriginal] • Date [25 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Cursum Perficio" from (Recent Donor)draconin
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A lovely story and definitely in the tradition of Narnia. :-)
Review By [(Recent Donor)draconin] • Date [29 Aug 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Cursum Perficio" from Fayari
Review:
Very refreshing story overall. I didn't like the ending. The "classic knight slays the dragon for the bimbo princess' hand in marriage" is ridiculous by today's standard. Chauvinism and all that.
Review By [Fayari] • Date [10 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Cursum Perficio" from DesitaniaF
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This was an excellent story, fully worthy of being part of Narnia. Very well done.
Review By [DesitaniaF] • Date [6 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Cursum Perficio" from DeaconKrow
Review:
OK, so wow... just wow. I can't even really exclaim that one. This was an incredible story, and I'm sad to read the end. I would have loved more. I'm glad I found your work. I started reading "The Call" a while back but I never started tracking your stuff till I read "Rising from the Darkness" and I started to go back through all the rest of your stuff. You are incredibly talented and I can't wait to read more. Thanks for posting.

Mike
Review By [DeaconKrow] • Date [5 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Cursum Perficio" from lwbush
Review:
I have been crying for the last three chapters, but it's with joy in my heart. You have, with this story, filled a void I didn't know existed until now. Two of my favorite characters in all of storydom, neither of whom ever really had the match they truly deserved in their canon, together at last. This was transcendent and beautiful. Thank you.
Comments from author:
Thank You. As a great admirer of your work, your review means a lot to me. I'm glad that I could craft something that touched you. That means I've done my job well and no writer could ask for more.
Review By [lwbush] • Date [23 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Cursum Perficio" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Review:
A well written work. A somewhat sad ending. Though the analysis of the weakness of the Powers is interesting, I would tend to agree with aprevious reviewer that a somewhat intelligent, an admitted contradictio in terminis, Power, would get itself a "beta reader".

That said it's a lovely notion, it explains a lot and I applaud it.Thanks for writing and sharing.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [22 Nov 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Cursum Perficio" from Teucrian
Review:
Excellent story. I found it well written and emotionally engaging.
Comments from author:
Thank you for taking the time to review. I'm glad you liked it.
Review By [Teucrian] • Date [7 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Gone, Gone, Gone" from KevinSchultz
Review:
The idea that Aslan doesn't understand the power of sacrificial, individual love doesn't match up with the action of the first book. In there, Edmund gets himself trapped by the White Witch by accepting her food. The witch then uses the "ancient magic" idea that she now owns Edmund, and Aslan agrees - but fees Edmund by sacrificing himself in the process. However, Aslan is able to come back to life, because he understood the power inherant of an innocent sacrifice, a "more ancient magic" that the White Queen couldn't comprehend. So, to use Buffy parlance - while it seems true that some Powers that Be don't comprehend that power, Aslan is not one of them: he, as an individual, sacrifices himself for another individual that he loves - and the witch's plans are completely thrown off course because of it.

The second point (about how Powers can't comprehend individual sacrifice because they've never been human) is somewhat addressed in The Magician's Nephew - Aslan is a Christ-figure, and he pretty much comes out and says that he and the Emperor of the West also exist (in a different form) in the normal world. One of the central themes of Christianity is that Christ was fully human yet fully divine - on the Narnian side, Aslan was a lion because the dominant species are talking animals. As such, he was "fully lion, yet fully divine" - that's why he could be killed in LtWatW. I suppose you could argue that sentient animals don't understand the idea of sacrificial, individual love, but I'm guessing that's not what you're going for.

It sounds like you're trying to get around the Problem of Pain - the idea that an all-powerful, all-knowledgable, all-loving entity can't exist due to the existence of suffering. You're trying to solve the problem by taking out the "all knowledgable" part. Which may work from a logical perspective, but doesn't really work from what we've seen in the books.

EDIT - well, I've been thinking about this one for a while, and while I understand the point you're trying to explore, there seems to be a couple of flaws in it. The first of which is the Evil Overlord List variation: "I will run any plan past a five year old child, and correct any flaws she finds in it." If a truly good entity knows that they have an innate weakness in a plan that they cannot percieve, then a reasonable thing to do would be to run that plan by an ally (ie, a mortal) who CAN see the flaws, and redesign the plan accordingly.

The second issue is the Incarnate/Avatar issue: one of the points of having a physical incarnation of a divine entity is to be able to relate more easily to that entity - and one of those ways to relate is to have a shared experience with that entity. From a Christian theological point (which is what Aslan is more-or-less based on), that's where the phrase "fully human, yet fully divine" comes from - someone who did, in fact, experience all the vagarities of human emotion (including individual Love), and yet is also able to comprehend the 'big picture'. (Of course this ignores the Omniscience issue, in which the entity in question really DOES know everything - but that's a separate issue.)
Comments from author:
First and foremost, thank you for the review. I appreciate the time and thought that went into it. Aslan, of course, sacrificed himself for another, but was this because he loved Edmund and Edmund alone or because he loved the world and did what was necessary to preserve it. A rather cynical arguement, I agree, but it does touch on the central point of contention. These central figures, Aslan, the Powers that Be, etc.; love on a completely different scale than humans do or can. Because of this focus on the overall, they have no comprehension of the consuming love that one person can have for one other person. It is that difference that I sought to highlight, and if you accept that supposition; many of the actions of the higher ups on BTVS and in the Chronicles becomes much more comprehensible. Of course those in Aslan's position can feel pain and even feel it for an individual but I maintain that such a being cannot comprehend all the ramafications of Love because their relationships are too broad.
Review By [KevinSchultz] • Date [23 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Cursum Perficio" from CelebwenTelcontar
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This was a beautiful, incredible story. I'm glad I found it. Very, very, very good.

CT
Review By [CelebwenTelcontar] • Date [16 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Cursum Perficio" from AriaDeloncray
Review:
I loved this! Great story!
Review By [AriaDeloncray] • Date [23 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Cursum Perficio" from lorwen
Review:
That story gets a 10!
:)
I would like to know about what happens with Dawn and possibly Faith...
I mean I assume Giles would eventually let the cat slip out of the bag about who her parents are, or at least who her father was...
Review By [lorwen] • Date [7 Jan 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Cursum Perficio" from DarkFaerieYumi
Review:
AW! This was wonderful, except the whole Murphy's whipping boy. That was funny as hell. But that was great.
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [9 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Cursum Perficio" from Bobboky
Review:
nice
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [8 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Cursum Perficio" from DarthPayne
Review:
Nice to see a happy-ish ending.

Will there be a sequel?
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I won't say that there will never be a sequel, but I don't anticipate one.
Review By [DarthPayne] • Date [8 Nov 10] • Not Rated
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