Thanks for the review. They were only passing through and that was the end! Everyone wants me to continue it, but, I have already written a stargate story and 8 other Buffy stories.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [18 Sep 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Nice scene. it probably doesn't have enough plot to be a full story but it works ok as a stand alone. The different points of view make it a little disjointed though, perhaps it could have been done purely from the viewpoint of one character.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I used General O'Neill mostly as you know. However, I wanted to get Graham and Riley in and have Xander be as vague as possible. Thanks.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [18 Sep 10] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Nice start, and as a one shot ok. but it just seems to be the start of a longer story. But keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. They were just passing through and happened to run into Riley and Graham. I only intended it to be a one shot. I have enough Buffy stories already.
Review By [Thewander] • Date [18 Sep 10] • Not Rated
I think this is a decent start to a fic. It reads a little stiffly though. It doesn't seem to flow naturaly but I'm not really sure why. Hope to read more from you.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. It was something that popped into my head this evening and it's only a short.
Review By [kyzhart] • Date [17 Sep 10] • Rating [6 out of 10]
