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Cloning Dawn

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Review of chapter "Arrival on Coruscant" from (Past Donor)Dianasis
Review:
Not bad. I really like the premise, and you're right - I haven't seen this permutation before. If you give us a little more to the story, I can rate you higher. Thanks.
Review By [(Past Donor)Dianasis] • Date [4 Sep 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Arrival on Coruscant" from angeluscado
Review:
I think this is the first Star Wars fic I've read where Dawn is the lead character. So far, I like it. I like how she doesn't have midichlorians and won't be a Jedi.

Definitely looking forward to whatever you have next, when you get a chance to update it.
Review By [angeluscado] • Date [12 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Arrival on Coruscant" from fanrei
Review:
interresting start. looking for more.
Review By [fanrei] • Date [1 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Arrival on Coruscant" from BrinLondofive
Review:
This is going well (in terms of story) so far.

This being said, I think Dawn should decide to "spill the beans" to the Jedi as quickly as possible.
Let them know that she's a clone, and that she is Anakin's biological relative (sister? Sibling? Daughter?),
but that the datacard's story is about as valid as a three-credit chip.
Knowing what she knows, it would be in character; after all, Dawn absolutely hates being anyone's pawn.
Comments from author:
Well I suppose she could do that, considering it would make sense logically speaking. But we're talking about a teenager who has just lost both her mother and her sister and even her entire life, I hardly think she'd be thinking logically. Telling the Jedi would only serve to cause larger problems... First of all, she has no physical evidence of this plot. The Kaminoins aren't about to corrobarate her story that Darth Sidious ordered them to Clone Anakin Skywalker a female relative.

Senator Palpatine isn't about to let her get away with telling the Jedi anything. Plus she would be tipping her hand much too soon. Sidious would then be aware that he has no control over the clone, thus no control over Anakin through her and this would result in some serious consequences for Dawn. Anakin might even reject her out of turn if Palpatine told him to. He seems to listen a lot to Palpatine.

The story would pretty much die a quick death after that. Informing the Jedi makes no real storytelling sense. Not even when my muse is directing this story sub-consciously and there is no absolute plan from point A to point B and so on.

Therefore Dawn will not be 'spilling any beans' as you put it because quite frankly I don't see that as being a valid choice for her to make at this point. She has no idea as to how to live in this new universe, she doesn't have any skills, she's pretty much a few hours old straight from the Cloning Tube, she has no aptitude for the Force and basically she can only use a Blaster. She has no knowledge on piloting. No way in hell she could join up with the Senate, Senate Secruity Force, Other Planet's Law Enforcement, Tending Bar, Serving Food (Considering Droids do most of that labor anyway.) she has nothing.

She needs to meet Anakin, learn more about this dimension and its rules BEFORE she goes off half-cocked and starts blabbing secrets like that. This story needs to pace itself, not rush from one big event to the next with little stopping power in between.

I understand the logic behind your pointing out that I should do that, but Dawn's character is pretty much from Season Five only at this point. Any big revelations she would have experienced in the sixth season or hell even season seven and eight haven't happened to her yet. From what I recall Season Five Dawn was pretty much your typical rebellious teenaged youth. This story is going to walk. Maybe even crawl. There will be no running here. :D
Review By [BrinLondofive] • Date [29 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Arrival on Coruscant" from DarthPayne
Review:
Keep her out of mischief?

Lol, as if thats gonna happen. It was bad enough when she was Buffys sister, now shes Anis sister. :)
Review By [DarthPayne] • Date [29 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Arrival on Coruscant" from Lilkitsu
Review:
I'm not usually one for dawn-centered fics, but I thought i'd give this one a looksee. I was very pleasently surprised. It's a good explanation for her arrival and an excellent "back story" for her new identity. I'm also interested to see how a nonjedi who's now related to a toplevel jedi handle the war. I like the instant intrigue and subterfuge, and am looking forward to see what Dawn, does with it. Also, tho she has a lack of midichlorians, it looks like she's got a little somethin'. I look forward to that being explored as well. Plenty of potential as far as my interests are concerned. Hope to see more soon!
Comments from author:
I am happy that you chose this as one of your dawn-centered fics to try. And that you liked it even more so.

I will do my best to keep your interest with this wonderful tale.
Review By [Lilkitsu] • Date [29 Sep 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Arrival on Coruscant" from Eureka
Review:
"I hope Kit can keep her out of trouble." NOBODY has been able to keep Dawn out of trouble! LOL
Just think of all the trouble she can get into on a world of squids!!!!More please..
Review By [Eureka] • Date [29 Sep 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Arrival on Coruscant" from Bobboky
Review:
good
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [29 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Arrival on Coruscant" from Gideon
Review:
Ominous closing lines but I think they will find that nothing can keep Dawn out of mischief. And Anakin will not be happy if he learns they kept family secret from him.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [28 Sep 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Arrival on Coruscant" from Robby
Review:
Great chapter, can't wait to see what Dawn gets up to!
Review By [Robby] • Date [28 Sep 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Arrival on Coruscant" from LeaFairy
Review:
Great beginning! Pretty awesome idea as well! I can't wait to read more!!
Review By [LeaFairy] • Date [28 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Arrival on Coruscant" from deathgeonous
Review:
Very, Very, VERY interesting idea here. And yes, you could start off a whole new gere of clechies with this one. Well, thanks for writing this bye for now.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [28 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Arrival on Coruscant" from VillageOrchid
Review:
I like how Dawn really has no reason to open up and tell any of her truths... nor does she have to follow any specific agenda. I wonder if Shark-face Jedi will try to train her in the physical aspect and Dawn will remember any martial arts or self-defense after her body begins to catch up.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [28 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Rebirth on Kamino" from Robby
Review:
Interesting story idea, looking forward to more.
Review By [Robby] • Date [28 Sep 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Rebirth on Kamino" from Gideon
Review:
Nice. This is quite an original way for one of the scoobies to be drawn into another universe. Using the Gift portals but not actually sending anyone through them. Good on Dawn - I think Xander would be proud!
Review By [Gideon] • Date [25 Sep 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
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