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Review of chapter "The Story of a Girl" from BillPh
Review:
This review is a bit late, I have been going through old stories I had not read.

The problem is that watchers kidnapping potentials is definitely not canon. Kendra is the only one who said they were raised by a watcher and that was with parental permission. So the available evidence is that the majority of potentials are not raised by watchers and none of them are kidnapped.

In most societies, raising a child that is not yours will attract attention and locking them up to prevent them escaping will definitely provoke a response. Also, as somebody else pointed out, when the slayer dies there will be some sort of homicide investigation and “who are the parents/guardians” is going to be the first question asked.

So a watcher raising a potential seems to be more of a rescue rather than a normal policy and it needs to be done in accordance with local laws. “Faith the Series” by Kcoll has Giles adopting Faith from an orphanage; which would be plausible, although a married couple would make better sense. In that series Faith is suspicious of Giles' motives and I expect the authorities would be too.

All that said the story is well written and could be developed further.
Review By [BillPh] • Date [5 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Story of a Girl" from brokenmimir
Review:
This is fantastic -- I would love to see some of it from her point of view. Kudos.
Review By [brokenmimir] • Date [11 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Story of a Girl" from Rune
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sorry for the double post, my internet is wonky.
Review By [Rune] • Date [30 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Story of a Girl" from Rune
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It is not complete. You have to at least sketch out what happens up to when Buffy dies going after the Master. Does she make friends with Xander and Willow? Is Jesse saved? Does she meet Angel? What does she think of the vamp with a soul? Does Buffy let anyone help her against the dark? Does she survive the Master? This is just a chapter one. Please expand on it.
Review By [Rune] • Date [30 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Story of a Girl" from Specks
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That last line, about Buffy bending the spoon was absolutely heartbreaking and it works because you set up Giles' dread of the moment so so well. The whole thing followed such a natural progression and just...wow.

Also, I know it's not what you intended, but I keep wanting to finish the story title with "who cried a river and drowned the whole world" lol. Oh nineties.
Review By [Specks] • Date [1 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Story of a Girl" from (Recent Donor)Luna
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Whoa, so awesome! I would love to see more of this.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Luna] • Date [9 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Story of a Girl" from justapiranha
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How long will Buffy live in this serise?
Review By [justapiranha] • Date [7 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Story of a Girl" from Dragonelf
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I hope you will be inspired to expand this story.

::Gives the plot bunny a piece of pumpkin pie::

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Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [30 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Story of a Girl" from RocksandGlass
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This is really good, I like the Giles perspective on the situation. A Buffy perspective as a companion or follow-on piece would also be a good read I think.
Review By [RocksandGlass] • Date [4 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Story of a Girl" from Twoboots
Review:
More! More! More!
Review By [Twoboots] • Date [1 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Story of a Girl" from laoshi
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Your Giles voice is very believable. I enjoyed the premise. In a way I've always been kind of surprised that Kendra wasn't more of an exception to the rule. It's hard to believe most watchers were cold heated enough to maintain that level of emotional distance from a child they have raised from a very early age, Giles emotionally attachment to her is perfectly natural and probably happens quite often it's just the other watchers don't let on to it.

I suppose this could have been part of your HP series. Isn't Harry grows up with someone other than the Dursleys a HP trope? I would love to see a Buffy POV chapter. Would you consider doing a potential!Faith story?
Review By [laoshi] • Date [1 Oct 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Story of a Girl" from LeaFairy
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Wow, this was so completely original! I LOVE the idea of trained-potential!Buffy-- it's such a unique idea and has so many possibilities for her future. The idea of Buffy being taken (kidnapped) from her parents and so young to and given to Giles to train is just brilliant. How different would she be if she was trained form such a early age? Mostly likely a better Slayer no doubt, but what of friends? Would she be more pro-Council and go the "No friends, a Slayer is always alone route?" If so, she probably wouldn't last that long...

Your Giles POV in this was also spectacular. I thought it came off even better being from his prospective than rather Buffy's. *shrugs* I really not know why, I just for some reason felt really connected with his character here. His struggles with raising Buffy and his slowly questioning everything he was taught at the Council as what's best was just incredible.

Anyhoo, I really enjoyed this piece of fanfic! Thanks for writing!!!
Review By [LeaFairy] • Date [1 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Story of a Girl" from tonnocal
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oh man oh man - I've gotta say that I love the Giles characterisation in this. Also, the idea of the tale of Buffy being one told from the POV of the Librarian. Will they go to Sunnydale? Will Joyce en co be there? I know that a story is good when my immediate reaction is "where's the next chapter?"
Review By [tonnocal] • Date [30 Sep 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Story of a Girl" from (Current Donor)mmooch
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I definitely vote for a Buffy POV chapter! At least she had Giles and not a Wesley-type. Or worse, Travers *shudder*.
Review By [(Current Donor)mmooch] • Date [30 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Story of a Girl" from Satori
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Giles slowly developing empathy and despair are haunting and beautiful.

please continue.
Review By [Satori] • Date [30 Sep 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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