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Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Aista
Bella's perspective was fantastically handled, particularly the disintegration of that rose-tinted bubble the family had her wrapped in. You pretty much summed up every single problem I had with the Twilight series. In fact I think it's criminal how Meyer can have a net worth of $170 million for a series that advocates child grooming and abusive relationships under a facade of romance. Would love to see a sequel.
Review By [Aista] • Date [4 Jul 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from SecretH
I like this, I was never a fan of twilight after the first book, but this is really good, and I do feel like it was very realistic. Kudos.
Review By [SecretH] • Date [3 Oct 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Cardona
Here. checking old alerts, I found this story. is quite striking, with the theme of transformation and how it affects everyone in the process.

shame that is open ended ... with a spectacular sword of Damocles hanging over them all.


Werner Markus (aka) Mr. Cardona
Review By [Cardona] • Date [19 Feb 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from whirleeq
Wow. I can't beleive i have never seen this before. Powerful! I hope you write a sequel! One thing that bugs me is that i think Jack would eventually come to see Bella as a victim, moreso than the others at least, as she was underaged and manipulated by her stalker husband... I think he would dislike the rest of the cullens a lot more than her. But other than that, really great story, amd fun to see those annoying canon-sues taken down a notch.
Review By [whirleeq] • Date [6 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from (Past Donor)zephyrRS
Magnificent! I love that you point out everything that is so completely frakked up about the Cullens. Poor Jack!
Review By [(Past Donor)zephyrRS] • Date [5 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Ansku
Intense :)
Review By [Ansku] • Date [21 Nov 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Christanan
Wow, I really loved this fic. I remember watching the first Twilight movie and thinking Bella was a bit of a twit at the end to casually make decisions about being with someone *forever* after knowing the guy for a couple of months! Seriously. But I know I am probably in the minority here.

I like the way you make her less sure of her choices here, the way you offer her the opportunity to grow. There are so many great little touches -- Jack so frustrated that he's going to be 15 forever, and they don't even understand why that it so painful for him. I've always found Jasper and Alice intriguing, so the fact that Jasper would go and try to kill him, as an ex-soldier, made sense to me. Rosalie may be snarky but that doesn't mean she's wrong either when she says I told you so.

Anyway, I see jack the vampire channeling all his rage toward eliminating a threat the human race. Ironic, but so in character.

Fabulous work, and I'd love to see a sequel or more in this universe! You write thought-provoking Twilight fic. It's nice to see.
Review By [Christanan] • Date [16 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Beneficia
Just found this and your other Twilight fics after Fish Tacos won at the COA (congrats BTW). Wow. Very good. Jack is completely in character. Damn, I'm impressed.
Review By [Beneficia] • Date [10 Nov 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from walkerhound
Not really related to the story (for i would just be repeating other reviewer’s) but...

Why are the vampires hiding? ya the culuns want to pretend that there normal but if all it takes a a hundred or so of the "bad" to have a undefeatable army why are thay so worked up about the humans finding 'em?
Comments from author:
Since the rule to avoid humans is from the books, I'm not sure what the author's reasons behind that choice is.

However, I would hazard a guess that the main reason would be that individually humans are not a threat but collectively they could make life difficult for them. If the world decided to strike back against vampires (say using a nuke), it would kill their food source but not the vampire (vampires would be able to run before the bomb even hit).

Fire can kill a vampire, so humans could use that, but again if they were to use a napalm or something like that the vampires would run away at their super-duper speed and most likely their foodsource would be destroyed. Not to mention that humans would hide, maybe set traps etc. All in all I'd say vampires prefer their prey ignorant than have to bother with them.
Review By [walkerhound] • Date [6 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from mithrilandtj
Wow. Intense story.
Comments from author:
Review By [mithrilandtj] • Date [6 Oct 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from pezgirl

I loved Jack's blow up at the Cullens; he's pretty pissed, huh?

I laughed when I read of his disgust at the *sparkly* part of him :)

Great story :D
Comments from author:
Thank you!

Oh yeah, Jack's pissed. I don't think he'll stop being pissed at them for a long, long time.
Review By [pezgirl] • Date [6 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from LaughingCat
This was a wonderful story to read, and about half an hour after I finished, some of the niggling bits of it suddenly fell into place in my mind, creating a wonderful theory that I'll have a hard time letting go of. What if Jack were wrong? What if, instead of being the descendants of alien vampires, the Meyer vampires were formerly known as the hok'taur? That's not to say that they couldn't have been created; the fact that Bella was unable to even resist biting him and then found his blood unappealing implies that perhaps the original hok'taur were created from clones, or something in cloning was used as a marker to show hok'taur which humans they were to infect. It seems like something Loki would do, probably without telling the other Asguard. That way, once the Goa'uld were gone and the 'vampires' disappeared, he wouldn't need to explain them to the other Asguard and might even forget their existence.

It might also explain a lot of the vampires' traits. For example, let's say the hok'taur were created to fight and eat Goa'uld and Jaffa. In that case, the naquadah marker in their blood might have translated into a 'food' scent for them. Once the Goa'uld were gone, the hok'taur would have been reduced to feeding on humans who didn't taste nearly as good. For Aro, Caius and Marcus, who might, conceivably, have fed on Goa'uld or been turned by those who had, Carlisle's choice to feed on animals would have seemed especially ridiculous. After all, the best food source is already gone; why willingly turn down the second best, if not nearly as good, source for the 'tastes like vomit' one? They might even consider feeding on humans as their due; after all, they protected the humans from annihilation by alien brain leech, so one or two humans in comparison to the suddenly booming population would have been a pittance.

The sparkling could have originally been a self-defense mechanism. The majority of the Goa'uld seemed to be stationed in Egypt, which was hot and sunny. It would have been much harder for Jaffa to aim at something that glittered so brightly it blinded them. Ditto for the boulder-like flesh and cold body temperature. The flesh could have been a self-defense mechanism and the temperature a way to combat heat exhaustion in the desert, or they could have been ways for the hok'taur to survive brief stints into outer space. After all, they would no longer need oxygen to survive and they would be firm enough to hold together under near-zero gravity conditions.

Could you imagine Jack's face if he ever learned that not only wasn't he an alien threat to the planet, but he was part of a faction created for the express purpose of annihilating that threat? I can't quite get the smug glee out of my head. I'm still trying to place the wolf shifters and 'true werewolves.' Were they created after the Goa'uld had left as a means to control the vampire population or were they originally meant as cooler-climate solutions for the Goa'uld?

Once again, this was an excellent story. I greatly enjoyed reading it.
Comments from author:
Wow. Thank you so much for your thoughts and review.

I actually have a bit of a theory behind the vampires and most especially the reason behind why some have powers and some don't, but I didn't get a chance to go into it in this fic and I don't want to go into it here because I might eventually look into it.

I did enjoy reading your theory! I think the thought of Jack being part of a race designed to defeat the Goa'uld would make him feel a lot better about himself, but I don't think he'd ever be able to look past the need to drink blood because the number of Goa'uld vs Vampires would mean that their food source would disappear rather fast. Your theory actually makes me think of the creation of the replicators. They were made with the best intentions but eventually became uncontrollable monsters.

Thanks so much for your thoughts.
Review By [LaughingCat] • Date [6 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Thedruid
The end? Come on, that deserves more! A sequal I hope, not just an angasty story.
Comments from author:
There will probably be a sequel.

Although, I'm not sure I can hold back the angst. Jack's a very angry vampire.
Review By [Thedruid] • Date [6 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from RevDorothyL
Very powerful! Good work -- though I'd love to find out some day what ultimately happened to clone!Jack as a vampire (whether he decided to call in the Asgard, or to try to infiltrate the Volturi in order to destroy them from within, or to find some way to pit the vampires against the Goa'uld, or finally decided that he couldn't ignore the disastrous consequences for humans if he did any of these things, etc.).
Comments from author:
Thank you very much. Most likely I will write up a follow up, but I need a break from this 'verse because writing it was more intense than most fics.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [6 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from eclecticcollect
Very, very interesting.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [eclecticcollect] • Date [6 Oct 10] • Not Rated
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