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Review of chapter "Quirrellmort" from Pointer
Review:
That was a fun read.
Quite a bit of a spin compared to most of the do over fics.
Of course, you know the end has the same relation to a cliffie as an orbital strike... a looong way down.
Review By [Pointer] • Date [18 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Quirrellmort" from Chan
Review:
Well seems as if Harry's really landed in it wonders how he's going to talk himself out of this one?
Review By [Chan] • Date [11 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Quirrellmort" from ChefJackButler
Review:
I'm finding one consistent problem in a lot of your stories. Your use of language is pretty good, and you've got a good eye for plotline. Your characterization is often inconsistent but the creativity of the plot makes up for it. But the biggest problem is how many of your stories you've seemingly abandoned.


EDIT: Sure, I can buy that. The entire reason I'm in the middle of Origin Story is because of a massive case of "Okay, now what" with my pro-novel "Fortune and Glory" that's lasted a month now. I was only able to sit down again with F&G after I got the rewrite chapter finished.
Comments from author:
Characterization is a qualitative rather than a quantitative assessment, and one that I tend to find myself particularly happy with actually. Mostly because I believe that having various emotions, personalities, and facets isn't being "out of character". It's being human. Nobody has one or two or three faces that they apply to literally everything in life. You react to good times and bad times differently, just as you react to friends and strangers and loved ones differently. People are complex organisms and so when writers get too focused on THE response to things, that's when shit gets flat and goes to hell. At least in my opinion. Some people see a story and go "that's perfect characterization because that's EXACTLY how Harry would react in the book!". I see the same scene and ask "why is Harry reacting to something completely outside the realm of anything he's ever seen or done in the same manner that he reacts to an unrelated event?".

As for abandonment, my health is terrible as is my significant other's. Often times, I'll stop working due to illness or needing to take care of her, and come up with some new idea during the recuperation period. When I come back, my muse is often unwilling to do anything productive on the old project until I get the new idea out onto paper. This story, though, along with the Wand of Uru variant? They were both constructed to try out two ways of fixing problems that ultimately brought Shell of the God-King to a screeching halt in 2007 and 2009. Someday, I'll probably sit down and condense the two stories into one and try to work with the gestalt file, though.

EDIT: You should see my mess in Scrivener right now. There's the original God-King with Tonks as the body double, the revision with less Tonks and a colder Illyria (what was posted as the 2k7 variant until I removed it), and then an '09 variant that never made it to the site but is distinctly different from both of the preceding versions. And I'm trying to boil all three down into a coherent whole that then includes Marvel additions, Tracey, the rest of the Greengrass-Davis clan, movie characters, Su...
Review By [ChefJackButler] • Date [26 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Quirrellmort" from JinaSolo
Review:
More please! This is a very good story!
Review By [JinaSolo] • Date [3 Oct 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Quirrellmort" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Amazing story. I really hope you are going to continue this.

Tom.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [28 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dinner, Deliberations, & Discovery" from Arianith
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Comments from author:
And as I told the other person, you don't seem to get that he's not the Ministry. He's a sixth and seventh year Hogwarts student and essentially a vigilante when he's fighting with the Order of the Phoenix and Dumbledore's Army. He has no power to negotiate with them for anything. The Ministry failed him and society as a whole, and that left him with a mess to clean up. Which he did.

Exception/norm: Ugh. I hate that I've been merging multiple files to make this story. Or the early chapters at least. I KNOW I fixed that before. Fixed it again. Thanks.
Review By [Arianith] • Date [26 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Quirrellmort" from JinaSolo
Review:
More please!
Review By [JinaSolo] • Date [7 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Quirrellmort" from SamuraiSky
Review:
Joe, I started reading this version of the story a couple of days ago and have been hard pressed to put it down.Can't wait to see what happens next!
Review By [SamuraiSky] • Date [23 May 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Quirrellmort" from WCSII
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Dude (and again sorry about that last review); planning on updating this... or any of these older, and still incomplete stories anytime soon?
Review By [WCSII] • Date [5 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "This Time Around" from Ember
Review:
I so love this Hermione and its turning out to be more interesting than I thought, keep up the good work :P
Review By [Ember] • Date [28 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Quirrellmort" from garrycooper
Review:
Outstanding!!! It's Greeaat!!!! say Tony the Tiger. More Please? A great story, I can't wait to hear the explanation to Dumbledor. Have a glass of milk and some fresh baked cookies.
Review By [garrycooper] • Date [14 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Quirrellmort" from gryphkorval
Review:
Hrrm I was going to say a bit anti climatic... but then Dumbledore showed up and it was win, very nice ending to one of my all time favorite stories, as I mentioned in my review of Wand of Uru I truely enjoyed this story... repeatedly, that being said I await your next offering in this saga, whether here or as part of Uru with great expectation. Keep up the good work.
Review By [gryphkorval] • Date [5 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Can You Handle the Truth?" from kalahari
Review:
I like your story very much. It kept me up very late last night, and I kept reading this Sunday.

On cats as food: here in Germany the euphemism is "Dachhase" (roof hare). I was told the English name is "tree hare". It is considered famine food by the older Generation, at least those who don't keep cats as pets. (Even than you really don't want to eat them before nearly anything else has been eaten (including the dogs), because you need them to keep away the rats.)

Regards
Review By [kalahari] • Date [13 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Quirrellmort" from fitzpatrick
Review:
Great story of the few good time travel stories that have been written and not become over the top or ridiculous please keep updating/continue this story.
Review By [fitzpatrick] • Date [30 Apr 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Gryffindor vs. Slytherin" from draconis
Review:
Excellent last few chapters!

Hope we get more info on why Lara Ramsay was brought into picture. Character seems introduced kinda from out of left field.

The confrontation with Quirrell/Morty was much too short compared to all the lead-up to it. Was hoping for much more back-and-forth between Morty and Harry (although do I understand that Harry would likely want to conclude the fight ASAP because now he was facing Morty directly...instead of just Quirrell-puppet, still...a longer section would have been nice)

I'm curious...even though the soul-fragment was destroyed, will the rest of Morty know what transpired in this confrontation? (is there some mechanism by which experience/knowledge of 'fragments' is passed along to all the others?) So in the future will he know of this HIGHLY unusual display of magic by Harry, and the fact that Longbottom was kept from from appearing because Harry prevented it?

I'm also very much hoping that Harry (or Su or Hermione) will demand to know from Ddore why he arrived EXACTLY the moment Morty was being incinerated...or was he there for much of or even the entire time..."observing" (aka "not helping")?
Review By [draconis] • Date [30 Mar 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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