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Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from mackiechandler
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Today it was 125 degrees F in the desert where I live, which is a bit much for even me, and I slept during the afternoon and woke at 130 am when the heat had obligingly lowered to 97. I sat outside sweating and read your story and was transported to a lower climate where Dawn and Sherlock sniped at each other in a most entertaining manner. I forgot I was sweating. Instead I felt extremely proud of Dawn for putting up with the prejudice of her sister, and was extremely pleased with Mycroft's intelligence.

It was, in a word, fabulous. All the characterizations were spot on, and I believed in a Dawn that had grown that much into her own person. I snorted a great deal. Well done!
Review By [mackiechandler] • Date [30 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from Xayian
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Okay, so I really, really, really enjoyed reading what you've written here to date and I'm hoping you haven't fallen victim to a mind set that I often fall to and that's the whole knowing-where-you-wanna-go-but-not-how-to-get-there syndrome. In any case, I hope to read more when you can shoot it out.
Review By [Xayian] • Date [24 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from EnergyBeing
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Please come back and add to this. Pretty please?
Review By [EnergyBeing] • Date [11 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from FireWolfe
Review:
Love to see this come alive again
Review By [FireWolfe] • Date [1 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from RarefiedMuddle
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Clever, clever story! Your Sherlock seems particularly in line with the BBC version! I hope you find time to continue this story because it really is magnificent:)
Review By [RarefiedMuddle] • Date [7 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from SmithAndWesson
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Please add more, I read this a long time ago and still have hopes that it will be updated at some point in the near future.
Review By [SmithAndWesson] • Date [24 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from Kalliza
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I think this story is fantastic, and really hope it gets picked up again. I found the "Sherlock" series on Netflix, and agree that Sherlock in it is absolutely yummy. Hope you get back into this story!
Review By [Kalliza] • Date [7 Mar 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from tydepul
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that was a lot of fun to read. witty, and realistic.
Review By [tydepul] • Date [9 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from aveave
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Great story. Are you going to continue writing it?
Review By [aveave] • Date [7 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from Nyn
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Aw, I'm so very bummed you've stopped writing on this story! I can't believe you left us thinking Dawn would never speak to Sherlock again. That would be tragic!! ::weeps:: No more highly-charged, intelligent, witty banter. ::weeps more::
Review By [Nyn] • Date [7 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from silverfey
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Pretty, pretty please continue this story! I love it. I knew from the first chapter that it would be my favorite Sherlock Holmes fanfic (including non-crossovers). Sherlock and Dawn's fight in chapter 3 was hilariously awesome and I can't wait to read more of their confrontations.
I also love (I know I'm using that word a lot) Buffy and Dawn's strained relationship. I can so see Sherlock and Dawn calling a truce to gang up on their older siblings.
So pleeeeease write more!!!
Review By [silverfey] • Date [15 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from (Recent Donor)ConstanceTruggle
Review:
I just started watching Sherlock. Thank God for Netflix!!! I do hope you continue this, even if Dawn isn't a character I like. It's nicely done and you have definitely gotten Sherlock down pat. Thanks for sharing!

CT.
Review By [(Recent Donor)ConstanceTruggle] • Date [30 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from inkling
Review:
Oh please tell me you'll be continuing this fic. It's brilliant! You've done the UST between Dawn and Sherlock so incredibly well. I really hope there will be more.
Review By [inkling] • Date [23 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from MarcusRowland
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I'd really like to see more of this.
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [18 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from MountainKing
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Oh this is good. You captured Sherlock perfectly, It's a shame it's not been updated since October and that the last couple of chapters really let it down.

Sherlock, especially this version of him, can be a real problem. Digging where he doesn't belong. It is more than just though ego, he likes to pride himself on seeing through people. Dawn, vampire or no, has so many layers he's bound to find her fascinating. The thing with Holmes, in any version, is he doesn't see women "that" way. He sees them as people, and he sees people as puzzles to work out. A challenge. All those layers, and the ones you've added, would make her irresistible to him.

I think it's a shame you haven't brought John in yet. Sherlock is brilliant at seeing through others, but hopelessly blind when it comes to himself. John, on the other hand, is very much his Xander. Not as smart, clever or as resourceful but the voice of reason and a grounding influence. He can understand Sherlock, even better than he knows himself. He would have been the one to hold Sherlock back from home invasion and would gently tease him about what he was more attracted to. The game, or Dawn herself.

You've written yourself into a corner here, that might have been a solution.

I like the idea of Dawn being a Vampire too, it adds a nice mystery to the whole thing. You've tried to explain it by making her the child of Buffy and Dracula, but that feels like you're coming at the problem backwards. Looking for something that answers all the questions in one fell swoop. A better idea would be to have Dawn badly injured, they couldn't get her to a hospital in time and Spike siring her being the only way to save her life. Then Willow, or the coven, tried to cure it, but the best they could do was re-ensoul her. It would put her on the outs with everyone, load up a few issues with Buffy and make it interesting. Dawn could be fine with it, seeing it all as the price for being immortal and Buffy could be searching the world for something to make her human again.

Another, better way, to handle this would be to have that discovery come from Sherlock and his investigations. You gave us an interesting mystery, and the worlds greatest detective. What more do we need? A bit of drama and some classic deduction. Heck you could even wedge in the famous "Once you've eliminated the impossible, whatever's left, no matter how improbable, must be the truth." quote in as he stumbles upon vampires.

But at the end of the day this is your story and I would love to see where your going with this.

Thomas
AKA Mountain King
Review By [MountainKing] • Date [8 Aug 11] • Not Rated
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