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Review of chapter "Awareness" from leb
Review:
this is an interesting story, I cant wait to see what will happen next
Review By [leb] • Date [28 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Awareness" from (Current Donor)Ironbear
Review:
Coolness. I like this so far, and it's good to see you writing again.

Is this a continuation of an older fic of yours? Chapter One seemed vaguely familiar to me, as if I'd read it somewhere before...
Comments from author:
Thanks. I've spent the last month retraining myself on the keyboard by polishing up old chapters daily and posting them elsewhere. Finally feel productive with my creativity after a long dry spell. Yeah, this was one of the last stories I managed to put out before the break. Great thing to untangle at least two plot snarls that had spent a few years in the back of my head :D
Review By [(Current Donor)Ironbear] • Date [1 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Awareness" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Glad you're continuing this!
Comments from author:
It's fun. Cordelia's scene with Amelia should help with things in the present. After that, I'm thinking about abandoning the format and writing an Interlude with Buffy's dream. She wakes up and she's on the plane with Angel and/or her dad, annoyed that the dreams are still coming when she's already on her way to the Caribbean. I think if I frame things that way, I'll be able to decide what happens next :)
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [31 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Darkness" from (Recent Donor)ArgyleButterfly
Review:
Great alternate universe concept – I really enjoyed your story.
Comments from author:
Thanks. Fleshing it out with another chapter posted and at least one more ( and probably a Buffy-centric Interlude where she fills in for Kendra ) on the way :)
Review By [(Recent Donor)ArgyleButterfly] • Date [23 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Darkness" from Scorpio
Review:
Interesting. Very interesting. I like it a lot. A very different and pleasing twist on the whole wish thing.

So...no vamps on the Hellmouth, but lots of demons and witches. = no Angel, Spike, Master, etx... No Master = Buffy never died? so no Kendra, right...

Harmony & Oz are werewolves...

Cordelia is blind (a seer?) and dating Jesse (who's alive)

No mention of Xander or Willow... and Amy is a bad witch?

Would love to see more of this arc. The backstory and future stories. The premise is kinda neat
Comments from author:
I'd be glad to help out. I've been getting my writing skills working again after a long hiatus.

I've an idea about Xander and Willow. No vampires means the loophole that saved Buffy in the ghost episode "I Only Have Eyes For You" doesn't exist here... But I'm not sure to what extent I want that to affect the Scoobies.

Yeah, I'm not sure how to resolve several issues. I'd like a plot seed, please. Setting up a challenge for them to face might help me clarify the backstory.

Hey. Thanks for the good review :D
Review By [Scorpio] • Date [12 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Darkness" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
*snicker*

It can always get worse.
Comments from author:
Ahhh, I love the smell of relativity in the morning ;)

Thanks :)
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [27 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Darkness" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
Very, very good.

And I'm interested in seeing more of this world. A place the demons gather and the vampires CANNOT go?

(No Dracula episode, that's for damn sure..)
Comments from author:
Thanks and... Wow. You're right. That's a recipe for a hopeful and interesting place.

Heh. Hadn't even considered him until now. He'd either be aware of things and avoid Sunnydale (maybe avoiding the Slayer, maybe trying to attract her to L.A., maybe - depending on the AU - focus on a different Slayer outside of Sunnydale) or the coffin he likes to travel in will arrive there with him... both dead and rather icky.


Speaking of dark visitors and barriers...

http://www.dominic-deegan.com/view.php?date=2007-04-30

:D
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [22 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Darkness" from Gideon
Review:
Poor Angel, separated from his high school crush :( I Jesse is alive does that mean Willow or Xander are dead instead? And if Drusila wasn't around to kill Kendra was Faith ever activated? So many questions!
Comments from author:
Yep, and if she falls for him, it will be for his mind first ;)

Willow and Xander? It's possible that two people could've found a hiding spot that three people couldn't fit in. I'm also worried about how Bad Eggs turned out with an extra human/vulnerable member of the gang. I just focused on some details and some of the broader outline. I'm curious as to the rest of the stuff as well :D

Heh, with weirder demons filling the ecological niche left behind by vacant vampires on the Hellmouth there probably were Big Bads during Season One and Two... Buffy may have died once, such as by electric shock, but there's no guarantee of it. There was a fic on here where Eyghon wound up possessing Buffy so they dunked her in a huge vat of holy water and the chaotic energy reaction produced by that fight summoned the next Slayer ahead of schedule, but I can't find that scene right now...

If you have ideas on how those questions and others should be answered, I'd be glad to hear / quite possibly use them :)
Review By [Gideon] • Date [19 Oct 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Darkness" from Bobboky
Review:
nice
Comments from author:
sweet
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [18 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Darkness" from PATM
Review:
Cordelia before the wish takes over the body of Cordelia after the wish? Huh. The Cordelia that was the blind girl, where did she go off to?
Comments from author:
It's weird what they did in the episode. The injury that Cordelia had was healed, but she was wearing a dress her vamp-fearing alternate-self never would've left the house in.

I'm not sure how much of this alternate-Cordelia is left in my version. I basically had the spell (that's being sustained by the witch's life-force) become unanchored while reality was altered, then refocus on this Cordelia once things stabilized and she proved to be a valid target. If checked out, the spell will have all the earmarks of a fresh cast except for the act of intent that created it, which is over a year old.

... I'm frankly not sure how "real" the first blind Cordelia was, or how the reality overwrite worked in the first place. Dopplegangland implies that the Wishverse was stable enough to have a past, but it also appeared to have vanished easily. My best guess is that wishing-Cordelia was held in place while the rest of the new reality was moved in around her... In that case the blind Cordelia would be in stasis, basically the only thing left behind in whatever dimensional space the new Sunnydale was pulled out of... Sort of a movie extra waiting for the next set to be put up. *shrugs* Heh. :)

I guess the true answer to your question lies in floating, unresolved, backstory. I'm open to opinions on which way it should be fixed in place :D
Review By [PATM] • Date [18 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Darkness" from Doodle
Review:
Excellent story.
Comments from author:
Cool :)
Review By [Doodle] • Date [18 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Darkness" from amusewithaview
Review:
Ooooh... INTERESTING! I would love to see this continued!

Blind!Cordelia, Werewolf!Harmony, AND Alive!Jesse? This looks amazing!
Comments from author:
Thanks. Glad you like it. I had been reading some of your "Ten Things I've Never Seen on TTH" short!fics and it occurred to me that a "Wishes I've Never Seen Cordelia Make" would be cool to explore. This was the top one on my list :D

Heh, I have a lot of fics in progress already. Have a specific scenario you'd like explored? As usual, feel free to use the idea in your own work :D
Review By [amusewithaview] • Date [18 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Darkness" from calliopesol
Review:
Very interesting start. I'm afraid I don't have anything constructive to say, other than I enjoyed it and that I'd like to see more.
Comments from author:
Thanks. Heh, unless a specific scenario strikes a chord I'm not adding more anytime soon. If you have something in mind you'd like to see me explore more fully, feel free to suggest it. You can also use any ideas in your own work :)
Review By [calliopesol] • Date [18 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Darkness" from Corris
Review:
Interesting take on a twisted wish, I can't remember the witch episode well enough, but was Angel or some other vampire really involved enough to make a differance like that? Eh, either way it'd be nice to see thiss continue, even if you've labeled it as complete, blind Cordy isn't something I've seen a lot of (no pun intended).
Comments from author:
Thanks. Nope, as far as I know, other than "Out of Sight, Out of Mind" where he managed to avoid breathing in order to shut off the gas valve in the boiler room after saving the gang, Angel played it pretty low key during the 'monster of the week' episodes that season.

Nah, what happened here was that the town as a whole was different. In a vampire-run place, you'll mostly have attacks during the night and people who stay in their houses tend to survive. Without vampires, more demons moved in, of different types, with different feeding patterns, so the population/demographic of the school, and therefore that of the cheerleading squad, changed.

Heh, I'm blaming the difference on some combination of Catherine's overall method of becoming head cheerleader changing because of who was on the team and Buffy being distracted at the critical moments by a convenient series of broad daylight demon attacks that took her focus off of what was going on with the school. Either that, or the Scoobies' having a different team roster brought about a different solution, like combining Amy and Catherine into one person, that prevented things from getting worse, but didn't cancel the spell on Cordelia.

It'd be nice to continue this, but I already have other fics in progress. The idea, of course, is open for people to use elsewhere.
Review By [Corris] • Date [18 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Darkness" from Dmitri
Review:
That was a very, very interesting short story. I liked it. Still, Harmony and Oz? That's just wrong.
Comments from author:
Thanks.

Yeah, that was a side effect of an AU love spell. However, I'm not saying they haven't seen more of each other since then, now that they have something in common ;)
Review By [Dmitri] • Date [18 Oct 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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