Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Rod
An interesting start, but the second half of that chapter happened way too fast. You told us that Ron and Draco become friends rather than showing us. I'm not completely convinced by Ron's dialogue, but an angry Weasley is had to write, so don't worry about that too much.
Comments from author:
I'll make sure to mention it when she's writing it. Thanks for the review. It'll boost her muse alright. And, yes, an angry Weasley is hard to write. Ron and Draco will be explained more in the next chapter, I can assure you. ~Luckie, Gothica's co-author.
Review By [Rod
] • Date [16 Nov 10] • Not Rated