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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from TinMan
Review:
A amusing little oneshoot.

You *could* expand it to a full story if you cared to, but it's nice as it is.
Review By [TinMan] • Date [28 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)Katrina
Review:
Awesome ending! I really liked how this story developed. Thank you.
Review By [(Current Donor)Katrina] • Date [23 Apr 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from BrownFinderth
Review:
How did Harry become a member of the Summers family? Hm?
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [29 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Keshkreature
Review:
Haha, that was awesome! Sure does seem to follow along the lines of Sirius's luck :)
Review By [Keshkreature] • Date [31 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Crolynx
Review:
I would love to see more of what happens with this. This was very unique story to me. I'm gonna track it to make sure I see if you do anything else with it, be it a series of oneshots or continue it.
Ja,
Crolynx ;p
Review By [Crolynx] • Date [6 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DarkFaerieYumi
Review:
LMAO
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [3 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from TwistedSlinky
Review:
Haha, I loved that ending! Fantastic writing. It was really a fun, original concept. Thanks for sharing. :D
Review By [TwistedSlinky] • Date [1 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Morgomir
Review:
Great start. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [25 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from yak
Review:
Did you just pull a 1-in-6,000,000,000 coincidence? Lazy! A slight less lazy route would've been for Sirius to be following the advice of some crazy old seer or be regularly dosing himself with luck potion while he searches the world for Harry Potter. It'd still be lazy, but also ever so slightly more believable than what you've got now.

As for HP calling Joyce "mom", I'm assuming that he's been inserted into the Summer's family the same way that Dawn was with the false origins and faked memories. I'm also assuming that he's completely changed his accent and now speaks with a native Californian accent. I'm making these two assumptions because there's no way that Harry would ordinarily call another woman his mother, and because no Englishman would mispronounce it as "mom" unless he were making fun of the Yanks.

Most of the scene in Azkaban didn't seem to add anything. I pretty much skipped everything from some woman screaming up until Sirius getting a newspaper page. That's when I knew the plot was starting again, so that's where I started reading properly again. There were actually a few paragraphs scattered throughout the rest odf the story that I also skipped.

Were you using Sirius chasing a rabbit as an allusion to Alice in Wonderland? If you were; awesome. If you weren't; then you could do it easily. Just specify that the rabbit is white, the same as Alice's. Feral rabbits are typically dirty and don't look white at all. A white rabbit is remarkable unless it's someone's recently escaped pet. Maybe add in Sirius drinking a luck potion beforehand as a reference to the "drink me" potions if you want to go that route. The car crash already acts as the "falling down the rabbit hole".

Best of luck with this. It isn't bad, but it could be better with a little polish.
Review By [yak] • Date [24 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ShinaSchatten
Review:
This was really good. Will you be writing a sequel to it? I would love to see Sirius become part of the family and also how Joyce managed to adopt Harry.
Review By [ShinaSchatten] • Date [22 Nov 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)Charlotte
Review:
It was horribly evil of you to stop this where you did.

Wonderfully interesting and i'd love to read more if you are inclined to continue this.
Review By [(Past Donor)Charlotte] • Date [21 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from LeaFairy
Review:
Hahahaha! I loved this! Very funny with Sirius in dog form in Sunnydale... And of course awesomeness all around with him camping out at the Summers home after Buffy hit him with the car :) *giggles* Truly adored!

The last line was also priceless! I am very curious as to how/when Harry ended up with the Summers though. Hmm...

Anyways, fantastic story! I definitely would love to read more too! Thanks for writing!!
Review By [LeaFairy] • Date [21 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Ansku
Review:
Good one :)
Comments from author:
Thank you. :)
Review By [Ansku] • Date [21 Nov 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Raider
Review:
is there a sequel planned, or is this a one shot?

cause this was pretty good.
Comments from author:
Yup, a sequel is planned. :) It just might be a little while.

Thank you for the review.
Review By [Raider] • Date [21 Nov 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Alyssara
Review:
What do you mean "Completed"! You can't just leave it like this *pout*, you have to answer the questions you caused *whimper*...Please? Pretty please with a kitten on top?
Comments from author:
Ah, cute kitten!

A sequel is planned because, yeah, lots of stuff that needs to be addressed. It just might be a little while before it comes out.

Thank you for the review.
Review By [Alyssara] • Date [21 Nov 10] • Not Rated
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