i really hope that this is not going to be your main DMX story... the other one is far better even though i think the stupidity of both groups is still extreme but i guess they're just basic american high school kids...i cant wait for you to update the other DMX

Adding Zak kind of killed it for me.

Plus i just want one story where Xander acts like a 16 year old hormone driven boy. Take some of the rubies, hop into a reality with sexy elves, visit a brothel and enjoy some orgies then come back to Sunnydale and let the story go back to him being sexless. Hell i don't even want a full chapter just a little side note of Xander thinking of what he had done.

Well, I've read both your original of this story and the rewrite. I'm not sure the rewrite is better, though it certainly is different enough that reading both isn't a chore. I would also mention that the original wasn't as lacking as you made it sound in your rewrite intro. I thought you had done a decent job of pulling it into a cohesive tale with the intro of the Fates. That core of the story may not have been detailed, but it existed. I will say that I liked the variety of dungeons the group visited in the first story better than the rewrite. I may have felt better about the rewrite if it wasn't as much of an AU as far as SG1 was concerned. Without the SGC, there will be a lot of politics and background that would need to be gone over before it was built.

I plan on looking at more of what you've written. I think you're a great writer with a wonderful imagination. In case I didn't review it I remember reading your story Exile's Birth and remember enjoying it. Thanks for sharing with us.

Run for your life, Kendra. Elizabeth Summers is evil! XD

The changes to some basic concepts are interesting. I´m looking forward to seeing how you resolve the latest situation. So far it´s a very good story, and I´m anxious to see how you´ll proceed to develop the characters and story.

Any new chapters coming out, and looking to find out what the sprite did to the Jaffa and Ghoulds.

If the Jaffa get dumped on other planets, why not dump them in the council or at homebase to find out some more about them?

Get more out soon

Great chapters. Keep up the good work.

I like the story a lot but I think that it would benefit a great deal by having a grammar checking beta. A number of tenses and various other things are off.

Still it's an interesting story and I like the language pixie. I was fairly sure that immature gou'ald couldn't take hosts... still I can't see this ending well for Buffy.

this chapter was sorta of a let down and I know i didn't enjoy the thought of Watchers in space.

Buffy has a royal... or should I say, divine pain in the neck to worry about. won't that be fun.

Good read
Zak is a good addition.
You could add more characters like that, hopefully not too many.
I think it makes a fic/book too difficult to read.
Hoping for more
Thanks

Excellent chapter.



Stupid Asgard. :(

excellent

Good, good, now keep it coming!
Hm, why do I foresee Xander gaining his own force of devoted Jaffa? And why do I see the Colonials joining them? And... Is that Cylons Three, Six and Eight joining en masse?
I've been reading too much smut...

OK, I was going to get some much needed sleep, but saw an update here and I just /had/ to read it. It's a good chapter. I am slightly concerned about the goa'uld in buffy. I'm hoping it's not permanent, and perhaps just a plot device so that buffy can operate goa'uld technology. Presumably the larva isn't fully mature so it wouldn't be able to completely dominate her, on top of the fact she's a slayer it might further reject/resist it. I'm also wondering what effect the pixie's had on the larva and jaffa. I would presume that they performed their function of exchanging languages. I'm not sure if this complicates their plan to transport the jaffa back. Anyway, keep up the excellent work, and I hope to see the next chapter soon. :)