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Review of chapter "Adjustments" from (Recent Donor)Luna
Review:
Great story!
Review By [(Recent Donor)Luna] • Date [28 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dad?" from JoWinchester
Review:
This really does get better and better! Hank has gone bad for Katherine! OMG!

I can't wait to see if your gonna update this one, as it's been a while. But I'm holding on to hope you will, as I think this could get a lot of hits. The plot is just that good!

Plus I kinda want to see Dawn finally kick Marcus (or was it Marco?) to the curb.
Review By [JoWinchester] • Date [25 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dad?" from JoWinchester
Review:
Well hello there Katherine! Lol!

Damn! I'm seriously loving where you've taken this, and just the basics, like not having Dawn and Damon automatically hitting the sheets was one of them.

Too many TVD fics just have the love interests jump straight into the sex part. It gets kinda stale, compared to actually making us wait out the relationship and giving us only tidbits to prelude the big scenes between the two.

Markus is totally annoying, but he adds to the fic, making it a hell of a lot more real due to the conflicting emotions of Dawns choice over Damon or Markus.

I honestly can't wait for the next chapter!
Review By [JoWinchester] • Date [23 Apr 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dad?" from Phoenyxrising
Review:
I am loving this story! I just recently got into the Vampire Diaries as a TV show and this story just fits in perfectly with it. I am enjoying the way you parallel the shows and the use of different countries! Please update soon!
Review By [Phoenyxrising] • Date [13 Apr 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dad?" from tracysgate
Review:
oooooo interesting twist :P
Review By [tracysgate] • Date [5 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dad?" from RevDorothyL
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Hank in league with Katherine? SO very many nasty possibilities for Dawn and Buffy with that scenario!
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [5 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dad?" from Xeelia
Review:
OMG!!! Ooooo!! So glad you came back to this!!! Great chapter!!
Review By [Xeelia] • Date [4 Apr 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Truth Coming Out" from liit
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Thank you for the explanation...I think i was being impatient, i wanted to know...I feel like a tool, and spoiling your plot...from now on, i'll be a good little reader and wait for cliffhangers...hehehe...happy writing and can't wait to read your next chapter and I'm so glad that you're not offended ;)
Review By [liit] • Date [18 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Truth Coming Out" from liit
Review:
Hi I like the story but i have a few comment.
I understand that you're trying to explore Dawn's darker side but I didn't think that she will ignore the why factor.
Why did the monk wanted her not to open the cave? she automatically called Damon instead of researching why was Katherine was sealed in the cave in the first place?
Buffy seeing the part where dawn is not acting dawn-normal and she just let it slide. of all the people who would understand Dawn is buffy because buffy's been there...she seems happy in the outside but pretty much dying in the inside. oh yah, and the part that their dad all of sudden in the picture...buffy is happy (skepticism...especially him not being there for Joyce's funeral). this is not flame or anything, i just want to understand why dawn is acting that way and why is buffy's character seem ignorant and off putting...
I really did enjoy reading the story...
Comments from author:
I'm so glad you're enjoying this story, and I'm more than happy to discuss and even debate as to why I'm writing the way I do.
I don't really think I'm exploring a "dark" Dawn, I really was just trying to further develop that part of her that was occasionally shown on the show... i.e the time when she coldly told Buffy that Warren should die for killing Tara; her almost threatening Clem and willing to face anything to talk to the Rack guy and help Willow, and even her aggressive behavior towards Andrew early in season 7 of the show. I think Dawn while very underdeveloped on the show had a lot of potential on the show to really contrast Buffy in her characteristics. Each of the sister's had soft and hard sides, and I'm really just trying to show more of my perspective on Dawn's.
Also the reason why Buffy isn't very 'be there' for Dawn is that she's really trying to respect Dawn's emotional privacy. Buffy has always had the Scoobies, her mom, her sister, and her various boyfriends there to support her for whatever she needs. Dawn, however, has been left alone since her mother died and even a bit before then. After being alone for so long I think Dawn started to put up certain walls and grow in her individualistic attitude.
And secondly Dawn's self-destructive behavior is that she is doing everything she thinks will make Buffy happy... giving her sister the paradigm of normality that Buffy's always chased after. I think this really emphasizes Dawn's underlying guilt over Buffy's sacrificing herself in season 5 along with the guilt she had to have felt for kicking Buffy out at the end of the show. Buffy's dark sides have always been more about using others (Spike) and being blatantly self-destructive. Right now in the story Buffy really is fighting with herself to accept that Dawn will never be truly satisfied living a 'happy normal life' and waiting for Dawn to decide to make herself happy. Don't worry though, eventually she will.
The reason why Hank (their dad) is suddenly so worried about seeing them is after finding out that their town was destroyed and then hearing that Dawn technically died he finds himself suddenly more concerned with the well-being of his offspring... That and of course he has some nefarious plot boiling in the back ground to come later on in the story line... (a few chapters away)
And finally to address the topic of what the monk said about Katherine... just because I haven't gone into depth that Dawn's been researching what happened doesn't mean she hasn't been (after all she was a watcher.) I'm actually planning to drop that as a bit of a bombshell that will push the story along further in the next chapter. I'll also be explaining why Michael (Damon's right hand man) would have the monk killed and that fact hidden even from Damon. Leaving the mystery hanging like I did was just me making an attempt at some serious foreshadowing.
Should have the next chapter up by the end of the week but let me know if there's any other questions you have.
Review By [liit] • Date [17 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Truth Coming Out" from Beth
Review:
I love this story. Please update as soon as you can. Can't wait to read how things turn out for them all.
Review By [Beth] • Date [17 Jan 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Truth Coming Out" from Nightscream
Review:
YAY thanks for the update! I love this fic.
Review By [Nightscream] • Date [17 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Lost" from Darksidhe
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Nice story. I love the fact that Dawn is a lot darker than everyone gives her credit for. really looking forward to reading more!
Review By [Darksidhe] • Date [9 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Lost" from Xeelia
Review:
Oh it's so awesome to see this over here!!!!! I so love this story and can't wait for more!!!!!!!!
Review By [Xeelia] • Date [8 Jan 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Lost" from Nightscream
Review:
Ok, This was a well written fic and very fun to read. I hope you can find time to update it soon, as I'm sure Dawn will not be happy with the deal Damon & Buffy cut on her behalf. :)
Review By [Nightscream] • Date [8 Jan 11] • Not Rated
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