OK. You really need to update this, also "No Longer Required". Nice to see Pam as one of the mains in this one, she does not get enough time in the books.
Review By [carrytoomuch] • Date [2 May 11] • Not Rated
I'm still find myself wondering why she's handling it this well though. Being turned was one of her greatest fears. i'm also wondering how long she's gonna be able to keep up the ignorant act. I think pretty soon Pam is going to have to see through her act.
Oh and are you using the books or the TV series for your continuity? I might have over looked it but I don't remember Pam being described. I know Pam was 18-19 when she was turned according to the books (but is described as dressing very momish) the TV show fudged that by about a decade. just trying to get a picture set in my head not criticize. I really like both versions of Pam.
Review By [Sahugani] • Date [6 Feb 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
You have some editing problems. Ex: Being as gentle as she could, Buffy bit in and let his blood flow into her of its own accord. Unlike last time, she didn't suck on him like a blood bag, but let his heart to the work for her.
"his heart DO the work for her"
Other than that, SUPERB job. You write an excellent Pam and a very believable Buffy who just got turned into a vampire. I love how powerful Buff is as a vamp and that Pam is clearly worried. I can't wait for Buffy to meet Eric yet all the chapter detours (gas stations, bars, etc) are wonderful additions to the story and make waiting for pretty Eric much easier.
Thanks for sharing!
Review By [Luna] • Date [6 Feb 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Interesting - I'm wondering what's happening back in Sunnydale, and how a sudden flood of Slayers will affect the vampire community (if that happens without Buffy there). Looking forward to more.
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [6 Feb 11] • Not Rated
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