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GideonReview:
Great story. You found a way to give Connor some happiness and show him what Family and friends feel like. I think Dawn got something out of it too - finding someone who is just as big a freak as she is. Body swaps are always funny and you have done that well without labouring over it.
Just a couple of corrections I noticed:
"you're" is transposed for "your" a couple of times. Just remember you're is short for you are.
There are occasional words missing so you might want to get a beta to read over your work or just read it through again yourself.
Also "people throwing advert glances" - I don't know what you mean by advert there, "people averting their gazes" perhaps?
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Gideon] • Date [23 Jan 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
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dharkcharlotteReview:
very cute
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dharkcharlotte] • Date [22 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from
GACTsevilReview:
That was so cute and funny and sad, a very good read.
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GACTsevil] • Date [22 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from
linkReview:
I love the reaction of Buffy and Angel when Dawn and Connor kissed. Dawn/Connor was so sweet. Any plan for a sequel? I would love to read one.
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link] • Date [22 Jan 11] • Not Rated
