I enjoyed this story. I like how you set it before the Southern Vampire novels, so that I didn't have to worry about keeping up with the show or any of the new books (I only read the first three). I think you captured the televised version of Eric quite well, and Buffy also. I also... well, I don't want to say _liked_, so let's go with _appreciated_, that you allowed Tara to die. Too many writers rewriting the sixth season (including me) find ways to save her.
I do think the writing was a tad clunky at times (and overly descriptive on Buffy's clothing as it happens), and I would suggest going back to the chapters in third-person and just revising them to be first-person, rather than shifting midway through.
Overall, I think this was pretty good, and I look forward to the next one. Which I'm going to go read now. 'scuse me.
Review By [Listener] • Date [11 Jun 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from BrownFinderth
Review:
Wonderful story that I enjoyed reading!!!
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [20 Dec 11] • Not Rated
'I turned to Buffy. I picked up her hand and slapped it. “Bad Buffy! Bad!” ' Funniest line ever! Thank you for a great story & I hope you come back & do a sequel one day in the future :)
Comments from author:
You know, I originally didn't have that line in there. I actually had completely forgotten about the blood bond. I remembered at the last second and wrote it in. I laughed too. haha ;)
Well all I can say is that it BETTER NOT be over! :P Lovely story, nice characterisations. Buffy is Buffy and Eric is Eric. I would love to see how Eric handles being on the Sunnydale hellmouth.
So glad this isn't over yet, although I have been thinking of what you could call the sequel.........A Sheriff in Sunnyhell.......or A Viking does Halloween on the hellmouth, heh heh.
Comments from author:
hahahaha A Sheriff in Sunnyhell...good one. hahahahahaha =)
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from Wrytergrrrl
Review:
I'm glad this story isn't over yet, cause while I'm glad that Dawn and Hadley have been rescued, there haven't been any smoochies between Eric and Buffy yet. ;)
Comments from author:
hehehe no, there have not ;]
Review By [Wrytergrrrl] • Date [17 Mar 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]