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Sunnydale Meet the Care Bears

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Review of chapter "Sunnydale Meet the Care Bears" from BluLadyK
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Tee hee. A teddy bear phobia. Classic.
Review By [BluLadyK] • Date [6 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sunnydale Meet the Care Bears" from Annjeela
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Cute but I'm thinking the bears need Willow hugs

Well done :-)
Review By [Annjeela] • Date [4 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sunnydale Meet the Care Bears" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
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Nice. Good luck with the ficlet-plan. This is cute and they could be useful. Some suggestions:

Should be 2nd, not 2st. "Sunnydale, Meet the Care Bears" would be more correct, but you don't need to change it. The first line when you introduce the bears should have an 'and' in front of Funshine. When mentioning a town such as Sunnydale, California, you should use commas. Try replacing the '3' and the '4' with 'three' and 'four' - they'll stand out less.

--Funshine Bear could feel at least 3 children's emotions swing from confident joviality to hopeless fear.
Sounds slightly awkward to me. You could try: Funshine Bear felt the emotions of at least three children swing from confident joviality to hopeless fear.

--“One,” Both bear counted the final number, the vampires stared in confusion, the teenagers backed further away from counting bears.
Seems scrunched together. Might work better as: “One.” Both bears counted the final number. As the the vampires stared in confusion, the teenagers backed further away from the counting bears.

--“Care Bear Stare!” roared from two bears throats and was said with quiet steely determination from Secret bear. As the last syllable sounded a blast of light erupted from each of the three bears stomachs and flashed through the crowd of vampires.
Needs apostrophes. Might work better as: “Care Bear Stare!” roared from two bears' throats. Secret Bear said his part more quietly, with steely determination. As the last syllable sounded a blast of light erupted from each of the three bears' stomachs and flashed through the crowd of vampires.

Also, when Funshine makes a joke about his sunny disposition, you have the 's' in sunny oddly capitalized. I think that italicizing it for emphasis instead, would be cool :)
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [3 Feb 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Sunnydale Meet the Care Bears" from djhardim
Review:
What happens when Druscilla turns one of the Care Bears?
Review By [djhardim] • Date [3 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sunnydale Meet the Care Bears" from matthew
Review:
So, does this bring the total Care Bear fics up to 2, now?

Nicely done - that was just fun to read.
Review By [matthew] • Date [3 Feb 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Sunnydale Meet the Care Bears" from (Recent Donor)DaveTurner
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Fun fic, cheered me up no end.

DaveT.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DaveTurner] • Date [3 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sunnydale Meet the Care Bears" from cloudleonsgurl
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HAHA! This is great. One of the best funny oneshots I've ever read.
Review By [cloudleonsgurl] • Date [3 Feb 11] • Not Rated
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