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Review of chapter "Epilog" from Lydia
Review:
Ok, this story was... alright? I think of all the story I have read recently from Mist this is probably one of the less palpable for me, first yea as was noted even by the Mist at the very end, Xander was pretty darn absent at the end, I mean for a story about him the story shifted from him to other chars pretty strongly at one point, not only that the OCs took the front rather than actually the other pre-existing characters which sucks.

Beyond that, their was the issue of Xander himself, the story having issues which weren't AT ALL in existence in the original, the idea that he feared his own kids would turn like his parents?! WTF?! It wasn't what the whole failed wedding was about, it was about his fear that HE would turn like his father, his fear of being a bad husband and father, the idea that drinking is genetic is completely stupid, my mother has alcohol issues, I don't drink alcohol, I don't like the taste or anything about it, its not like my dad was also a anti-alcohol, I am literally the only person in my close family with anti-alcohol issues, alcoholism has nothing to do with genetics, it has to do with nurture and how you raised the kids, but not nature, its not genetic, so alot of the fuss about Xander was completely stupid, somebody should have debunked those idiocy VERY quickly, the idea he supposedly got some bad genetic is ridiculous! But instead it keep on being harped nearly as a justification for pushing him in the background and having him have a 'woe is me' trip.

Now its not all, the next issue is the way crazy hippie love set up they have there, look I could see the various guys having a number of female lovers, the females having various females lovers, I could see one or two girl each that might have two guys she is interested in, but the idea that two guys would be cool with their wives having each others kids for shit and giggles, that they have sex with one another is one thing, but kids?! How the fuck do you even deal with that? How fucked up it would get for the kids? Unless they all had lived in a single house, than it could have been easier to handle but beyond that, where does Lily & Sirius or James & Heather's kids live? With their mother or father? Are they mostly raised by their mother and their 'uncle' it would be fucked up and fuck up the kids, unless they all had lived in a single house.

Added to that Dawn wanted a kid and she got one from Harry?! HARRY? Why not Xander? She showed interest in him originally, than why not Willow, she also had interest in her, and they had the device for breeding between females, so how come she got a kid from Harry instead, how come she suddenly started to move from Xander & Willow as interest to Harry. Also how come Willow didn't get a kid from Aphrodite? She was one of the major personalities attached to Danielle, so she should have been fused too, Xander had used Her, Dawn Kara & Hermione as the major connection, so why didn't Willow get pregnant but all the 3 others seem to have gone pregnant, and why didn't they went and got Kara since they went after everybody else? Also how come Xander didn't seem to try to have any child naturally? Or how come he didn't have any after half a dozen years?! Or by what sort of delusional non-sense did Willow get a male child accidentally from what seem to be extremely high-end genetic engineering mostly involving a bunch of females DNA.

So yea to resume, a guy with a bunch of girls that might be into each others too is one thing, multiple guys sharing multiple girls, wouldn't have worked as well at all, and even worse if you add the idea of the girls having kids of various guys, if each guys had had their own 'harems' with girls interested in other girls it would have been viable, as been done in others of Mist stories, but the crossing of the girls of multiple guys wouldn't. Xander turned way too pathetic about 2/3 of the way & pretty much out of sight most of the time and the OCs took the central stage while the rest of the main characters from the original story became somewhat more secondary characters too often, if not background. So all those things soured the story for me and toward the end I found myself fast-forwarding because it seemed to become worse and worse as things went on.

Sorry if my review sounds harsh but its 3 and a half AM, I have been trying to put my review for this story down and the more I think about it the more I am annoyed about the issues this story had, while most of Mist stories do have an issue, most of the time they aren't that bad, but this one started with a great potential like most of them do but it burned thru alot of it before long, in ways that slowly made things far harder to digest for me. I am sure I might have missed a few other elements which are on the list of bad parts about this story, but right now I can't really come up with them, still its not like this will make me give up on Mist, it wasn't one of its younger stories that benefited from more experience, but rather one of the older ones, so I can forgive the fact it wasn't up to the expectations I had gotten used to from the rest of its works. Still... I complain about it because that what I do.
Comments from author:
Ah well I guess I do have his name in the title. :) As for him being important he was, the soul, the heart and all that... as for Ocs... some stories have more of them.

Cough* Actually...

"Research shows that genes are responsible for about half of the risk for alcoholism. Therefore, genes alone do not determine whether someone will become an alcoholic. Environmental factors, as well as gene and environment interactions account for the remainder of the risk.*" From the National Institute on Alcohol Abuse and Alcoholism...

So yes genetics play a factor. Are they the end all be all? No... should people with families chalk full of people with alcohol issues consider not using it... that might be a good thing.

Ah they were stuck in the same house for years in hiding... they went a bit crazy.

As for getting a male child, no clue. It's been years since I've read the story or looked at my notes for it.

As for 3 am reviews... mine get a bit weird so I can understand.
Review By [Lydia] • Date [15 Nov 14] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilog" from LFW
Review:
Good read and I really enjoyed Anakin vs Vader and mystic hammer vs Cell
Thanks
Comments from author:
I liked Anakin in the second (new) movie. Then they had to remember that he was supposed to go evil... and things went weird fast. As for the mystic hammer verses Cell... it makes me laugh every time I'm reminded of it. :)

Thanks for the review.
Review By [LFW] • Date [25 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from iamjmph
Review:
so, i love your stories, im on y 5th or 6th reread of this series, then i will restart the series that starts with Clark coming to sunnydale(sorry dont remember the name atm...).

Anyways, I love them, and I thank you for taking the time to write and for sharing with us...

No the reason I'm reviewing here.. well this chapter reminded me of a question that has popped up in a few of your stories....

K so, what's with the hangup on het incest you have? You obviously have no issue with lesbian incest, but shy away from the het kind, and since the het sex is usually non magicqally unprotected, the dont seem to fear the magic protections failing so it can't be that...

Anyways, I'm just wondering, not asking you to change anything... It just seems a bit off to me, but hey its your story so...
Comments from author:
Typically speaking, I'm assuming that magical anti pregnancy stuff is in that 98 to 100 range... or maybe less. Not sure they really want those risks... as for sticking with girl/girl pairings... I have a few other stories floating around that have het/incest pairings... just happened that they're not on this site.
Review By [iamjmph] • Date [12 Dec 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from Everfrost
Review:
Ok, this started out very interesting, but has since become an excuse for lez-porn. So I'm bailing out. Girls can love girls just fine, but this is just slutty in amount and swiftness, with poor Xander left behind...and no progress otherwise.
Comments from author:
Hopefully you'll find other things you enjoy more.
Review By [Everfrost] • Date [11 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilog" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
This is one of my all time favorite stories! I love the concept and execution. I love the twist at the end.

Thanks for a great story!

Tom.
Comments from author:
You're welcome it was a fun story to write.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [30 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen" from solitare
Review:
Since when was Natasha the daughter of Nanoha Takamachi? She's the only "White Devil" I know of. I don't think Gambit or Rogue were ever called that. Please let me know if I'm wrong.
I love all your stories on this site and hpfanficarchive
Comments from author:
Le Diable Blanc is one of Gambit's names... (wiki comics) (look at the alias section.)
It means the White devil. (french) :)
So yes, yes you're wrong... *cough* sorry about that... :)

I'm glad that you enjoy the stories.
Review By [solitare] • Date [10 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilog" from DragonBard
Review:
If they were the PTB, then where did Jasmine and that Balance Demon Whistler fit into everything?
Comments from author:
Oh? Replace 'the' with a or a couple of... In other words they weren't the PowerS That Be they were a couple of them... Hopefully that helps.
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [25 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Six" from DragonBard
Review:
Have you thought of maybe an expansion focusing on this version of Harry Dresden?

Possibly Molly seducing him, and then bringing in his various exes and love interests (Elaine, Murphy, and possibly Susan as well as Luccio)

Would fit this story, and the environment would be conductive to her seductions.

Maybe see if Mystic Dawn can cure Susan of her partial vampirism.

Is Harry's daughter still alive?

How powerful is Willow compared to the faeries? Summer/Winter Lady?
Comments from author:
Have I considered an expansion... I've had ideas floating around a bit for the story continuing but it's decently low on my list of things to work on.

I can see it fitting with the environment.

Mystic Dawn could cure her...

As for Harry's daughter, I can't see why she wouldn't still be alive.

How powerful is Willow... she's powerful but the Summer and Winter are forces of nature...

Thanks for the review.
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [25 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen." from DragonBard
Review:
Would have liked to have seen some expansion on the idea of Dawn being a Titan.
Comments from author:
Yeah, that's one of the things I haven't gotten back to. Thanks for the review.
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [24 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter eight" from DragonBard
Review:
I'd like to see a story set in a world with a similar group of Marauders.

Where it's Alana Pettigrew, and the Marauders are in a group relationship, but with a male Harry.

Still have Voldie running around, or some kind of baddie, but just to see how things would happen. Or maybe just make it a relationship/character piece, where it's a cultural fight between Draco and Harry.
Comments from author:
I could see a cultural wars piece between Harry and Draco for that world. That world was rather screwed up... :)
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [22 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilog" from Doodle
Review:
Are you going to eventually write about what effect their presence has on the present time canon of the PJO reality that mystic dawn is in? Plus it would be really interesting to see what effect they have on PJO canon. It would also explain why Sally Jackson could see through the Mist if she was from Mystic Dawn.

--Edit--
You're welcome, it's an excellent series.
Comments from author:
That's actually sort of an amusing idea. I've got a couple too many projects right now but I will probably eventually come back to Mystic Dawn. Exploring the current time period would be interesting... I'll have to see how it goes.
Thanks for the review at any rate.
Review By [Doodle] • Date [11 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilog" from deathgeonous
Review:
You know, starting off, this fic was weird. It then went totally screwy before somewhat straitening out, but the entire time remained a fun read. This is now going to go on my recs list. Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Comments from author:
I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was fun to write.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [5 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilog" from MultiverseBeliever
Review:
Xander needs to use his ''spark'' ability sometime :).........cool
Comments from author:
He eventually does but it takes him a long time. Next story in the series if you're curious.
Review By [MultiverseBeliever] • Date [16 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Two" from kvamic
Review:
i seen you go into game werse atm what woud be fun to see was something like maybe some game universe like starcraft, red alert, the longest yourney, doom duke nukem :P
Comments from author:
While it's possible that I might do something with starcraft, I would have to look at the game again and it's been a long time since I've messed with it. Red alert doesn't really have much appeal. I've never looked at the the Longest Journey though reading the summary it has some potential. I'll have to give it some consideration at least. Doom doesn't really sound like a fun world to visit. And Duke Nukem probably has too much radiation to make it a safe place to visit.
Review By [kvamic] • Date [21 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from Downery
Review:
You kept Xander a virgin for about a year but his creation gets to have random sex when she's barely a week old plus gets pregnant. Then there's the million jumps into other crossovers that i skipped. Don't mark something Xander-centered if it's not. Only the first few chapters centered around him then it was about everybody else BUT Xander.
Comments from author:
He was adjusting and trying to be nice and everything. There are several jumps into other crossovers, it is a crossover after all. It's marked as Xander centered because it was about him even if he wasn't in part of it. Even when he wasn't physically there his presence was. But you're right, perhaps I should have changed the classification but I still think it was about Xander. You're welcome to disagree though.
Review By [Downery] • Date [31 Dec 11] • Rating [4 out of 10]
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