Scary story! I think it was a bit hard to get a sense of the enemy what with it being a building rather than a person, but it was plenty scary. The last section with Kennedy was scary too but in an entirely different way. Killing people, even people that deserve it is completely opposed ot the slayer way of life as Buffy practises it. I can't help but think it does not bode well for the future.
Comments from author:
Yes we could be storing up badness for the future.
To be honest I was never completely happy with the way this story worked out, but most people who expressed an opinion seemed to find it scary so I must have done something right. I wish I could have found a copy of the book on which the song was based, I think it would have been a better fic then. Unfortunately the book is well out of print and I couldn't find it anywhere.
Cheers, Dave.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [2 Apr 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Excellent story. I love it. You did a wonderful job writing this story. Keep up the wonderful writing you do.
Comments from author:
Thank-you, I had my doubts about this one and didn't think it was one of my best. However some people liked it so maybe I was wrong.
BTW; I ordered a copy of the Gregory Peck Hornblower film. I had this idea about Faith just falling out of the sky and landing on the deck of the Lidia.
Cheers, Dave.
Review By [BritneyandJacob] • Date [16 Mar 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Minor road accident... with cameras? I think Kennedy may have been a little careless.
later - sorry, I meant that something like a road accident might have people taking pictures, with a possibility of a picture showing Kennedy leaving the crime scene. Sorry that wasn't clearer.
Comments from author:
Either you've spotted something that I didn't or... I'm almost sure there were no cameras down that street or have I got the wrong end of the stick?
I can't help feeling I should have done a major rewrite on this story, like scrapping it and starting again! It just doesn't 'click' with me so why should it with the readers?
Oh well I'll start posting the follow on story in a couple of days.
D.
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [9 Mar 11] • Not Rated
I'm still a bit confused as to what the frak is really going on. But the mental image of skinned kittens certainly adds to the horrid atmosphere of this story. Yuck! You may not think this story is one of your best, but for shear creepy atmosphere, it scores an 11.5 in my playbook. Shudder.
Comments from author:
Thanks for saying, I think everything is explained in the grand finale.
Gack! What a spookfest. You write a darn scary story, Dave. Whatever it is that is haunting this horrible place, I think Darth Willow is about to kick its butt. Lol!
Comments from author:
Thanks, actually I'd not thought this was one of my better attempts...or it could be me being over critical.
Odd. The detectives don't seem to be in the same building as Willow and Kennedy. Ooooooo! Nice atmospheric story. I just hope I read the next update in the daylight with the sun shinning. Right now I am afraid to look over my shoulder.
Comments from author:
Thank-you, capt. To be honest I'm not sure what comes next it's so long since I wrote this!
Nice bit of foreshadowing. I do believe Buffy needs to find a "Friends of Bill" meeting ASAP as she seems to be loosing control of her life to 'demon rum' and/or other types of alcohol. As usual, I look forward to reading more of your story.
Comments from author:
Poor old Buffy has a way to fall yet.
Meant to mention that the Music xover starts in Chap 2 and the L&O UK xover starts in chapter three!
Cheers, Dave.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [27 Feb 11] • Not Rated
