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Review of chapter "Chapter 7 - Grey Hair and Jobs" from Omegaprime
Review:
Please update this interesting story.

I have this odd thought that Buffy and co. meet up with the Lagoon company somehow and Buffy accidently insults them.

And then Rock... adjusts his tie.

Keep up the good work.
Review By [Omegaprime] • Date [4 Dec 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7 - Grey Hair and Jobs" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
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I have only one real complaint, no updates in too long... It needs a little proofing, but other than that, it is a hell of a jewel!
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [26 Nov 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7 - Grey Hair and Jobs" from eriktheviking
Review:
Still a great reread.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [6 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7 - Grey Hair and Jobs" from Omegaprime
Review:
I hope you write more on this great story.

I hope that the Scooby gang plus Faith get to meet the Lagoon squad, not because they get to meet Rock but so they could meet someone who was truly broken.

They think Faith had it bad? Wait until they meet Revy.

Plus everyone gets to compare stories. LOL

Please keep up the good work.

Rock = Xander?
Review By [Omegaprime] • Date [23 May 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7 - Grey Hair and Jobs" from Piterio
Review:
Man why most of the good fics that out there are always unfinished. It is unfair. But i guess sometimes it happens. Oh well great fic nonetheless. Thanks for it, i enjoyed reading it.
Review By [Piterio] • Date [24 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7 - Grey Hair and Jobs" from KageRyu
Review:
How the hell does a PT boat cross the pacific ocean?
Review By [KageRyu] • Date [26 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 7 - Grey Hair and Jobs" from KageRyu
Review:
You had a couple mistakes in this chapter, such as you kept writing in words with the wrong time sense. One such example is in that paragraph, where Alex is getting a new job. There are a few of these mistakes in several other chapters along with the misspelling of certain words. Though overall this truly a magnificent story and crossover with one of my favorite anime. And I hope that you continue it soon, because it is always disappointing to see one of you favorite stories abandoned ne?
Review By [KageRyu] • Date [30 Jun 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7 - Grey Hair and Jobs" from DeaconKrow
Review:
Great story. After going through some of your other work I decided I needed to just hit all your stuff. You write really well and I have been enjoying it a lot. Hope you decide to pick this one up at some point.
Review By [DeaconKrow] • Date [22 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 7 - Grey Hair and Jobs" from AnFan
Review:
I really like how you've pointed out the impact that Xander is having on his environment, both in Ronapur and now in Sunnydale (too tired to check my spelling... or probably get too chatty). After his trial by fire in getting taken to Ronapur as well as what happened along the way you've brought out the potential that many fanfic authors have seen in his "supposed" character. One of my biggest problems with the Buffy series is the darkness of the Buffyverse. Not the characters, and I enjoyed the characters actions and quips mostly. It was the background hopelessness of the world. There was no hope for a win by the good guys, simply because the Powers That Be fought for "Balance" not Good. The Gods were fickle, and evil had a large impact because when they didn't outright cheat, they skirted the rules like no ones business. And the Good guys took it on the chin more than likely. The whole system at first glance is a fight against the dark. Take a closer look and there is no winning. That's why I think this questioning of the comics Season 8 and 9 being cannon is foolish. They fit right in with the hopelessness of the series. Ok, gone off on a rant... sorry.

As for your story, again, love the impact that Xander appears to be having on his surroundings. Even if he and the other characters don't know it because they aren't seeing the fights that Evil is loosing simply because of the change in Xander and what he's dragged back to Sunnydale. Wasn't there a big blowup in Ronapur at the end? Wouldn't the First Evil be a good one to blame on a lot that goes wrong in that series now that he's in the crossover?

Something you may want to think about for your story. Given the impact that Xander is having, who would be put out by this? Wolfram & Hart might be. Were there any other larger organizational Evil or those taking advantage of Evil in the series? Or the Angel series? How would the Order of Terraka think of things going on in Sunnydale? Wouldn't likely have an oppinion, but what would happen if someone wanted to use them to get rid of Xander? How would they interact with the Ronapur crew? Given Xander's impact, would the Powers That Be be angry with him as well (more then they may be over the impact on the Slayer line)? Who else's toes might Xander be stepping on?

Love the work. If I don't fall asleep, I think there's at least one more of yours I want to read :)
Review By [AnFan] • Date [12 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3 - Hands! Watch the Hands!" from AnFan
Review:
You keep asking (and I may not feel chatty after I finish reading) so I'll answer: I really like. Very interesting story, and I am enjoying the interactions.
Review By [AnFan] • Date [12 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7 - Grey Hair and Jobs" from Mordare
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Great story. I just recently watched BL & BL Second barrage. I loved the anime so this story really caught my intrest. I hope you get back to it since I will be watching for more. Revy & Faith would be a scary pair LoL.
Review By [Mordare] • Date [7 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7 - Grey Hair and Jobs" from MaxPayne
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Absolutely lovin it...I look forward to the fireworks that are sure to come.
Review By [MaxPayne] • Date [30 Aug 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7 - Grey Hair and Jobs" from Elleria
Review:
Love this.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [27 Aug 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7 - Grey Hair and Jobs" from Genericrandom
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I wanna like it. In fact, I wanna like it a lot. However, I'm not a fan of flashbacks. If you want to write a 'Xander went elsewhere and became another person during his road trip' fic, then write that. If you want to write a story about the aftermath with a different kind of Xander in the 'Dale, write that. Flashbacks, however, are almost never the way to go. They're really, at most, meant for once or perhaps twice in a story when you explain how so-and-so survived the final death-trap or how they managed to avoid death and catch up to and discover who the bad-guy was.

Flashbacks are a tool to explain complex aspects of the story that have to be left until later in order to maintain sufficient dramatic tension during conflict segments of the story.
Review By [Genericrandom] • Date [30 Jul 11] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7 - Grey Hair and Jobs" from Orchamus
Review:
Liking it, especially the lethal Xander. I wonder where Balalaika plans to go with those thoughts?
Review By [Orchamus] • Date [23 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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